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Reviews for Overdose

By : MusicLife
  • From ANON - Anon on November 18, 2011
    Uh, uhm, okay: Firstly English is my third language. So sorry for the mistakes, that is probably gonna come.
    And secondly, am just reviewing so you can hurry and post another chapter. Not an expert and didn't really find things, that I didn't like.
    But here I go.

    Plot: I really like that you have introduced us to new elements and your own creations in HP, such as drugs effect on wizards. Good that you quickly build up a "skeleton" for how it is, and how it is gonna be. Hmm. It would be great if you could put more meat on that skeleton? Why are Harry and Ginny miserable in their marriage? The love has died? They simply can't stand each other anymore? Don't know if you intently didn't bring it up :) Also, how did Draco come in contact with heroin? Could imagine him not have anything to do with muggles from the start. And why is he taking it on the street, where there's cold and a such a big chance to be found and humiliated about it (and the drool)? He doesn't care under the rush of heroin, but he must have been thinking of it before he took it? Guess I, as a reader, need some reasoning? But the lack of it is VERY weak, so don't take this comment too seriously.

    Characters:I REALLY like that you don't get to far from HP itself. Fics tend to get too far way from the characters (HP suddenly turning into a sadist/a coward/a girl, DM being exaggerating humble/overly kind). Of course it is okay to color the characters in a fic, but to actually change them kinda sucks. So I'm glad that you're holding onto their defined relationship. That also imply Harry and Ginny's relationship.


    Descriptions: Well, descriptions aren't so important in a good read, but how can I say it...? I kinda miss it, when the story has just started. I need something to visualize when I've just started reading, to get further into the story and kinda live into it, I guess? Like, how does the street Draco is lying in look like? It is 9 years since they've seen each other. Is there any changes? Does Harry have a beard? Has Draco growed his hair long, or has he cut it short? You get my point. But you did well anyway, 'cause you DID write that Harry recognized instantly Draco, which (I guess) means that they haven't changed much... or is it because Harry has seen pictures of Draco in the newspapers? God, I suck at this. I guess my point is WHAT is Harry exactly thinking of in the waiting room? Was does it look like in there? And how about Draco? Is he pale or does he look alright after the overdose?

    Well, here is a VERY bad review (it's my first, don't judge me). I hope you got something good out of it. And though there are more negative things that positive in my review, those points are very weak and unnoticable. Otherwise a really good read. Hope you're continuing :)




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  • From bloodshound on October 09, 2011
    winces... oh Har, I just KNEW this was going to come back to bite you. 2 months with a suffering withdrawals ex rival with a blade like wit and no care for you at all... and you're not even getting paid for it. This is going to super suck hard core. I just hope you're up for it, you brash, impulsive thing.
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  • From Lilith08 on October 08, 2011
    This was really good ^_^ Hope you update soon, I wanna read more!
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  • From bloodshound on October 08, 2011
    this is going to come back ro bite his arse neh? Very much a 'no good deed goes unpunished?'
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 08, 2011
    Wtf!! I was hoping for some long sexy story! It was good,don't get me wrong,but there had better be more.
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