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By : TibbytheWitchy
  • From ANON - Katrina on March 16, 2015
    Write more it's good. Please email me when it's up
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  • From ANON - carrie on November 07, 2013
    love this story!!! keep up the good work!!
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  • From ANON - Ryane_Foxx_ on February 25, 2013
    :) I was so glad to see you were back! I'm dying for the next chapter, I love your choice in how to do this CreatureFic, love it a lot :)
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  • From ANON - Pagloh on October 28, 2012
    love story need more updates please really want to know what is going to happen next
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  • From ANON - Usegi on July 26, 2012
    Hey, I enjoy your story, but I keep reading in your a/n's that you're not satisfied with your chapters. I think your problem is that you lack some major detail. You keep having to clarify things in your authors notes that should have been mentioned in the actual story. A Good example is the scene with baby draco and harry. A good way to clarify that it was Ms. Figgs home and not a typo is to give more detail as such. i.e: "A shakkey legged Draco stumbled across the living room. His pale eyes, which had yet to change from the generic color of all infants, watching the dark haired infant crawl unsteadily around the room. Ms. Figg sat on her couch chatting with Lucius who looked ready to kill one of the squib's felines the insisted on pawing at his hair.
    The dark haired boy ignored everyone else in the room in favor of watching Draco move gingerly to his hands and knee's. The blonde crawled over to Harry, giving him a look that said, 'Like this, dummy.' Harry stiffened his limps and mimicked Draco, determination etched in his little face. When he had made his way across the room to Draco's side, he smiled, meetings the blondes eyes. A high pitched laughter escaped him as Draco returned his smile and reached out, putting a clumsy hand on his head.
    Ms. Figg turned her attention from Lucius to the sound and said amazed;
    "Thats the first time I've ever seen him smile."

    Notice how I didn't just say it was a certain house but you can gather it is ms.figgs home. Alot Nor did I just come out and say that Draco was trying to teach Harry how to crawl, but you can figure it out easily from certain details.
    I know details can be annoying to right and if you're not satisfied with a chapter, walk away, watch tv, sleep on it. next morning, you'll easily figure out whats missing. I hope you take this for what it is, constructive criticisum and helpful tips.
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on July 24, 2012
    Very nice! Will Neville join Ginny in spying on the light?
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  • From savannah19742001 on July 24, 2012
    I love this new chapter and am so glad about harry and draco. Look forward to the next chapter
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  • From thrnbrooke on May 03, 2012
    Poor Altari! How horrible!!!
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  • From hotflower901 on May 02, 2012
    That is to sad.
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  • From savannah19742001 on May 02, 2012
    All I can say is.....More please, loved finding out the sub story of her and can't wait for Harry to talk with her...
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  • From thrnbrooke on April 25, 2012
    What is happening to Harry? What bigger threat?
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  • From Morbid_and_Sexy on April 25, 2012
    Good story!
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  • From Mizuchan24 on April 25, 2012
    I love this story. Sorry this is the first time I reviewed but I have been keeping up with the story from the beginning. I just got so busy I forget to review your lovely stories. I can't wait for you to update this soon since draco/harry is my favorite pairing. So please update soon. ^.^
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  • From galyardt on April 24, 2012
    this is amazing cant wait for the next chapter
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  • From KuuChan on April 23, 2012
    I like ur story ^^
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