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By : sordidhumors

From Leania07 on January 28, 2012
Nice, and Harry learned to drive a stick shift that fast hmm? For all my years 'assisting' my Aunt shifting gears, I still drive a manual. Awesome chapter by the way, he's still a bit touchy when people call him 'gay' or 'bi' hmm? Still in denial? Like the attitude at the end though, its not what others call them, but what they call each other. I'd be afraid of driving at a brick wall (or any wall) too, known magic barrier or not.

Leania
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From Leania07 on January 21, 2012
I enjoyed this latest chapter, that's what Hermione gets when she tries to get someone to do something they don't want to. Guilt trips and cajoling, and he's supposed to 'play nice'? I loved it! Seems like Draco has the teaching style of Snape, learn the hard way ;).
I await the next chapter.

Leania
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From Leania07 on January 18, 2012
Another wonderful chapter; I've been looking almost daily for your story. I'm quite enthralled thus far and (since I haven't read any previous stories of yours) I am hoping you finish this unlike the few I've grown to enjoy that are no longer updated and nowhere near complete. IMHO, Ron seems to 'just' realize certain things and perhaps grow up a bit, but still holds onto immature ways. It almost seems like he doesn't want Harry to have other friends, and that strikes a chord with me. I've had several friends with that kind of attitude, sad to say. I almost want to reach into the story and smack him around and say, "He has other friends who understand and can help him deal with things you have no knowledge of." LOL, its a good story when I respond to characters like that. Keep up the good work, and I await the next captivating chapter, Sir.

Leania
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From ANON - Tork on January 15, 2012
I never leave reviews. Indeed, I can say with absolute certainty that this the 2nd review I have left in my 9+ years of reading fanfiction. You've earned it.

When I read books, I take the liberty of not giving a shit and sometimes change things in my head to better suit my fancy. For instance, Fred's not dead and that's all there is to it. However, when I read fanfiction, I just treat it as delicious fanwank; it doesn't contribute to how the story played out in the books for me. In some glorious shining cases, though, the plot is just believable enough, the characters just real enough, and the writing just beautiful enough that a new entirely valid world springs to life beside the original. I like to call these "Parallel Endings in Smut Filled Universes." Hah. And you, ma'am, have wrote the 3rd official "ending" of Harry Potter for me.

I'm not even caught up with what you have posted, and I know that there is more to come. I just had to let you know now, though. ;3

(I think you might have also broke me of my nasty habit of enjoying a fanfic without letting the author know.)
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From ANON - addiena saffir on January 14, 2012
yeah but what good porn it was.
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From ANON - addiena saffir on January 14, 2012
oh please tell me she tells everyone! or that everyone notices on their own. Bloody Hell but i can't wait to see the boys reaction.
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From ANON - addiena saffir on January 14, 2012
oh my as if me imagining the boys dancing bachata isn't enough i get to totally imagine them getting into so much they make out....mmmmm yeah need a minute to cool off now.
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From ANON - addiena saffir on January 14, 2012
Stunned. Speechless. I now find myself in possession of a pair of stonking great titties, the phrase i never, ever, ever thought would pass Draco's lips. The hilarity abounds in that statement. The cliffhanger at end was brilliant, by the way.
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From ANON - addiena saffir on January 14, 2012
I am truly, without a doubt, enjoying this delightful story. Not only because of the college level vocubulary, but because it is done with such a delightfully sarcastic air. As you may or may not know, sarcasm can be considered it's own sublanguage which in and of itself can be difficult to understand with high degree of skill. I look forward to being impressed with your vorbosity.
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From ANON - elementalwitch on January 14, 2012
Wow. Just wow. I gotta ask- how much work do you put into writing this- the languages, the references.. wicked good. It's quite impressive. I am a lit minor (2 classes shy of a major but I got derailed by other degrees LOL not enough time for it all) so I get persnickety about what I read. It's hard to find stuff that doesn't make my brain melt sometimes when it comes to fanfics. This is fabulous- keep it up! I am dying to read the rest.. I put it off at first, some of the tags had me debating and I thought eh, we'll see. I can just stop if it goes somewhere I don't like. Then you totally sucked me in.. like the story, like the writing, like the sex. I imagine if I had the ability to lay hands on that kind of power I'd blow out a few windows or fuck in mid air too.. sometimes it feels like it *evil grin*

But I digress... the point is, THANK YOU. This is such a good read, looking forward to so many more updates, and thank you for the quick updates at that. I crave the next bits.. two thumbs up!! If you write like this here, I hope that you write somewhere for publication too.. if not, finish this and then start!!
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From ANON - Glawrina on January 14, 2012
I've really been enjoying this story, and I'm glad to see it updated so regularly. Draco's characterization is spot on. I can definitely see him as a submissive permitted there is a strong enough dom to control him. He always seemed to me to be a reluctant dom, taking the position only because he doesn't trust anyone else enough, but secretly craving - dying - to submit to someone stronger than himself that he deemed worthy. His gradual connection to Harry and growing reliance on him is not only believable, but beautiful and painful (in a good way) to read. (And by the way, I love the idea that a pot smoking Draco would be too mind addled to accurately follow orders under imperious. I'd be very curious to find out what would have happened if he had dropped acid instead - not that I condone drug use, mind you.)

I love your characterization of Harry slowly realizing that he likes to be in control. Not just of Draco but of his own life and how he deals with others as well. Given his past, this need for control not only makes sense, but seem inevitable. His need for control as well as Draco's need to submit to a stronger force, makes their relationship the perfect fit.

I must admit, I fear that this dynamic has the ability to get out of control and send them both crashing, especially with Harry's others duties conflicting with their need to be together. Life and death style stress is not the most conducive element to have in a D/s style relationship. With his inexperience (being 17 and all), Harry also seems to push Draco too hard too fast to be what Harry wants in the relationship. Draco can be a huge prat, but my sympathies are usually with him over Harry because he seems to be the one putting forth more effort. Harry only seems to realize the imbalance in hindsight, while Draco must deal with things as they're thrust at him (so to speak). But then, this makes for fascinating character studies of both of them.

My only critique is of some of the characterizations of other characters. Most I can forgive as writer's discretion, but Hermione seems under the Imperious curse. By this time I would think that she'd develop more of a relationship with Draco either for good or for ill, but it seems stagnant and ultimately uninteresting. It seemed in the beginning that she was waiting for Draco to change or show some progress toward changing, but then she immediately shut down when she discovered that he and Harry are in a relationship. After that she seemed more interested in discrediting Draco regardless of anything that he actually did. Throughout the fic she also seems demanding that Draco make an effort without ever putting forth any effort herself. While I'd find it acceptable behavior in Ron, I find it unlikely for Hermione. I actually find it more likely that she would figure out what's going on in Draco's head before Harry would.

Other than Hermione (a minor complaint), I'm truly enjoying the fic. Thanks for writing it!
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From Leania07 on January 14, 2012
Short but...um sweet? Honestly I was a bit mortified that the guys were doing that to Harry; then when I got to the part where Draco was talking to him, I was relieved. Woah, what a thing to throw at them; I'm grateful for the chapter but I wish it was a bit longer. Felt like just a teaser, you must have something up your sleeve. Can't wait for the next!
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From Leania07 on January 13, 2012
Oh, intense...again! Fully captivated here, I'm almost here daily now just to see if a few stories have updated, this one included. I love the twists and turns you toss at the guys, keeping them on their toes but not overly so.

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From ANON - Sarah on January 12, 2012
Besides the story itself, which is awesome in its originality, I love how many languages and accents you have in here. You must have really a gift for this. I especially love Draco's accent. This is porn, but it has so much plot in it, you should write novels. I would pay for them.
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From ANON - Sera21 on January 12, 2012
I love how you wrote the battle scene by teh way. I wish Rowling had written half as good :P As things stand she had Harry go in throwing stupifys and leg locker jinxes at men who where shooting to kill. and then the whole Voldie scene...*sigh* I mean stupify meets killing curse. Yeah, Harry and the Dark lord really feel like equals in that scene --__--;
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