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Reviews for Lost Souls

By : TheShadowFox
  • From AlasseaM on January 18, 2012
    Alright, I do like this chapter :) And I loooooove the DL :D
    *drool*
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  • From AlasseaM on January 04, 2012
    O.O
    ...

    That was my reaction to the chapter.
    Ginny being a Death Eater isn't really a new thing for me. But that she would kill in cold blood...
    + it isn't such a big shock that she IS a Death Eater, when the chapter's name is "Ginny's betrayal".
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  • From Nerys on January 03, 2012
    "and their new friend Aaron" - You may want to take that out of your summary. When I read that, I got all kinds of bad associations with self-inserts, Gary Stus and other horrible OCs in fanfics. So far, Aaron hasn't been an obnoxious, overly present, wonderful, amazing all-doer yet.

    And the rest of your chapters' contents is pretty decent, so I felt that one "two plusses" rating was a bit harsh compared with what else I read on this site that did get five. I wonder how you'll continue (after all, we can surely use some good Tomione fics since there are so few to spare), until then, I'll keep an open mind and see what you do with your OC.

    The way you portrayed Harry felt OOC to me, but hopefully, you'll give him a good explanation for his behaviour later on.

    I look forward to see the interactions between Hermione and Voldemort, and how you're going to write that. Eh, it's why I check this list. XD

    Thanks for writing.
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  • From AlasseaM on January 03, 2012
    Uuuh, a cliffhanger!
    But I find it quite hard to believe that the others would be mad at Harry for running.
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  • From AlasseaM on January 03, 2012
    Good start. Interested to know how it'll become Voldemort/Hermione ;)
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