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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Breeding Darkness

By : Danyealle
  • From ANON - ILoveWyatt on October 07, 2014
    I love this story so much!

    Cant wait for more!
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  • From ANON - Liz on October 07, 2014
    I've said it before, but I will say it again...I LOVE THIS STORY! I'm kinda sad that the updates are so far apart but I totally understand that RL is a pain sometimes and writing takes a while. I went back and re-read the entire series to get a refresher of what was going on and it made this chapter even better! I am so happy that Harry finally got to take his revenge on the Dursleys. LOL Keep up the fantastic work!
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  • From ANON - Julia on October 07, 2014
    I've just finished reading your continuation of Breeding Darkness and I loved it!
    You are a very different writer from Athey, I could describe your writing style the following way:
    You're not much of an action writer and you write more ABOUT some events than report those events as they are happening in real time. So it all seems like you mostly report people's emotions and their mental states and their thoughts about the future or past events. That's not a bad thing. It's just very different from the author you inherited the story from.
    I actually enjoyed those parts where you mull over ramifications of a certain past event or where you describe the anticipation of the future ones. But also it was a bit frustrating - waiting for something to happen can be a bitch! Usually beginner writers fall into such a trap when they make their characters make elaborate plans for future plot and when this anticipated thing happens there's no release 'cause it all went as expected - so it's as if you don't need to write the action itself because you'd written it all when planning! Frankly speaking, you have such a thing here. I hope I didn't offend you and I'm not a writer myself so I'm not in a position to offer any advice. It's just my impression. Also I prefer reading inexperienced writers all right! 'Cause why then would I read so much fanfiction? LOL
    I commend you also for the steady continuation of this story! I was very happy to find out that you've added about 35 chapters to it and your chapters have a steady plot line and they are planned in advance and so very well thought over. I've just joined your group on yahoo and would you please tell me what's your usual update schedule because I'll be waiting for your updates impatiently! Thank you for the pleasurable read. Best rgrds, Julia
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  • From ANON - staar on October 05, 2014
    New reader here !!!!! let me start with , that I log this , had to find part 1 of the story - read that and just finished this one ...so far I'm loving it ..this is the first time I've read one of Harry / Tom never in my wildest dreams would have never thought that I would like it ....Hermine and Victor LOVED IT this thing that she always had to be with RON is hsit ( you can guest that I don't like Ron there !!!!!!! please please update soon !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - GoddessonmyKnees on October 04, 2014
    Great chapters. I was so happy when I check in and saw three new chapters. I love what they did and am glad that more people believe Harry. I am very curious as to what Dumbles is going to do.

    Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Cairsta on October 03, 2014
    Loved the new chapter! Im sitting on the edge of my seat for the next installment! :)
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  • From Anaelyssa on October 02, 2014
    Omg omg another chapter!

    Lucius handled the situation well.

    I loved Dumbledore's reactions. Those are the moments for which I live. That wonderfully shocked reaction. *laughs maniacally*

    Nervous waiting. Pulling off surprise. Bragging to Draco. I liked the bragging part because it relieved the tension of the chapter.

    Always looking forward to more :) Can't wait for the big reveal when people will find out that Harry is Dark. Or at least when someone finds out. Maybe he won't out himself to the world. But Dumbles soooo needs to know at some point, just so we can relish in his despair and shocked horror.
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  • From Kyra on October 02, 2014
    Now Harry is free. I'm loving the fact Dumbledore go wrong ever again.
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  • From ANON - DB1 on September 30, 2014
    @60 oh my god you need to update soon!! Loving this story!

    DB
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  • From ANON - CurlyFries on September 24, 2014
    Hi, i don't know if you're aware you're doing this, but you've been calling Harry 'EVANS' his pseudonym is Evan Harris, therefore when Severus is using his first name, it shouldn't have the S on the end.. It sounds like he's referring to him by his surname when you use 'Evans' as opposed to just "Evan"
    On another note, i'm glad you've adopted this story, because i was really enjoying it. Looking forward to seeing where you take it. :)
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  • From ANON - warren on September 18, 2014
    I read for a good part of the day and am up to chap 51. Time for bed but just wanted to again compliment you on some absolutely brilliant writing. Really looking forward to seeing Wormtail get it. Also hoping that Remus ends up with Harry and Sirius as well but not sure if that will happen. Also waiting to see Dumbledore's reaction to Bill's answer, that is not going to be pretty at all.
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  • From ANON - warren on September 18, 2014
    Sorry but this is the best spellcheck error ever....EVER!!!

    Looking down at the massive letter, Remus was silent, brow furrowed. Then, quickly, he folded it up and stuffed it into a waiting Penelope.

    hahahaahahahahahaahahahahaha

    if you put together the MASSIVE letter being stuffed into Penelope...it is actually the best Freudian spellcheck error ever
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  • From ANON - WarriorofAces on September 17, 2014
    You misspelled Harry's 'consort' name. It's Lord Raiodamort, not Raidodamort. You put an extra D in.
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  • From ANON - warren on September 17, 2014
    Very good story so far, you are carrying the story on perfectly.

    One note, you use the word "vaulted" as in Lucius' vaulted connections in the ministry. You used it several times in the same way. I think the word you meant to use should be "vaunted". Minor mistake though, and not something that breaks the flow of the story.

    I think my favourite part of the story is the increasingly friendly relationship between Harry and Draco. I am really hoping for a future scene of the two of them getting drunk together. I don't know why but I can only imagine it as incredibly funny.

    I am not sure how much I trust Bellatrix once she wakes up. I can't imagine she is going to take Harry's position well.

    Really well done on keeping the story going. If someone didn't know that two authors had written this, that you had taken up where another author had left off, they would say that this was written by one person. It is incredibly difficult to take over someone else's story and not lose the feel and flavour of the story. You have succeeded in this, without a doubt.
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  • From ANON - james on September 17, 2014
    I understand that a good portion of the earlier chapters are not yours, but the constant DAA instead of the correct DDA is truly annoying.
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