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Reviews for The Shards Of His Beloved

By : EvilConcubine
  • From ANON - Jonah on May 22, 2012
    I think you need to do some work with voicing Albus. His character seems to be too young and too old at the same time. Most times, if a child is talking as much and as often as Al is in this chapter, they're around 4-6 and have a different sort of sentence structure. I think you should take a look at some baby/toddler youtube videos to get an idea of how they talk. For example, they usually forget to add in the little words like the/a/in/on/of/etc. and they rarely understand the basics of manners until ages 6-8.

    Other than that, the story was great! Can't wait for the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Nubia on May 22, 2012
    When a person is in mourning lives 5 stages, denial, anger, covenant, depression, acceptance. I think Draco is in the IRA can not do anything to change the past but at this present is a SLAVE and away from your child is very different to the paternal and maternal love, wonderful chapter.

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  • From ANON - Rosmerta on May 22, 2012
    please don't keep me waiting.
    i love this fic more than any fic Ive ever read
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  • From ANON - Lali812 on May 22, 2012
    Wow! I loved your previous story. I just found your new one and caught up. You are an amazing writer and invoke many emotions in the readers. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From Grey_Archangel on May 22, 2012
    Best story ever! New chapter please!
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  • From Ruri_Hiwatari on May 19, 2012
    Again Awesome, I love the way Harry is so loving and caring whit Draco, just like I imagine him to be, I really hope they find Scorpius, and hope that if Draco gets pregnant again, is with Harry's baby, jajajaja, and again awesome job, please dont stop writting this fic, I really want to know how it ends ^,^
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  • From ANON - Alarik on May 17, 2012
    I can only say that I like your stories very much. I
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  • From Sparrowbirdie on May 16, 2012
    Thanks for another brilliant chapter. I had a good laugh at Harry's reaction to Draco's pregnancy. I'm beginning to wonder when you'll be writing Ginny out of the story because her behaviour towards Draco is beginning to get to me. What a horrible way to treat someone, even if you don't like him. I had no trouble picturing Draco's misery in that unappealing flock of women. But no Scorpius in this chapter either? I'm hoping that Draco is pregnant again, so he might have something else to think about and perhaps it would soothe his sorrow a bit? I keep wondering if he will ever reconcile or accept Harry? And will he eventually find out about what Harry did for him? Hm..., I can't wait for the next chapter when there are so many questions left unanswered.
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  • From ANON - Bitterpill on May 16, 2012
    Wonderful update! I especially loved Harry's thoughts about Draco's pregnancy. I find myself more and more addicted to this story.
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  • From thrnbrooke on May 16, 2012
    Oh Harry!!! You're looking!!! I knew you would! And Ginny! Can someone slap her now!!!
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  • From ANON - Alicia Spinet on May 16, 2012
    Curiosity: why in fics like this one, where Harry trade Ginny for Draco, people writte Ginny like a bitch? Why can't they ended their relachionship been friends? could you please, tell me? i'm very curious about this! by! by!
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  • From ANON - moodysavage on May 15, 2012
    I so love this story!!! I loved how Harry made sure to get revenge and justice for what happened to Draco. Really disliking Ginny btw... good job with that lol. And I like that Draco doesn't know. And please don't let Draco's son be dead. I think Draco would make sure to die himself if that were the case. Looking forward to your next chapter!!!
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  • From ANON - Nubia on May 15, 2012
    I love this chapter well all others, I wait the next chapter thank you for writting
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  • From ANON - Ahren_Black on May 12, 2012
    i've found myself very entralled in ur story the plot is developing quite nicely i must say though i'm anxious to know what's happened to baby scorpiuos it would brak my heart (more than it already is) for him to be hurt or going through hardships like draco, well hopefully none of that will happen i'll wait for ur update.. great work.
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  • From ANON - Bitterpill on May 12, 2012
    I just can't wait for more! I usually don't read fics that aren't yet completed but Ive started yours and now I'm addicted. Please don't ever abandon this wonderful story!
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