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Reviews for Snape's Story

By : tbird1965
  • From ANON - Fotia on August 04, 2012
    Absolutely love this story. And so far love this Hermione. Can't see her as the semi-virginal submissive she's usually stuck being. I picture her as going through a phase of out-of-control after the war. Maybe that's why she went into counseling. At least a normal sexual history for someone of her age.
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  • From ChaosLady on August 04, 2012
    That was so sad. I can't wait for more!
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 03, 2012
    Excellent progression; this scene was well crafted and the insertion of the neighbor whom you'd referenced before enhanced his sad sad life. Poor Hermione, when will she realize she's in love with him? Can't wait for another.
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  • From moodysavage on August 03, 2012
    Severus you dunderhead... are you trying to kill yourself? After he is well enough to leave the hospital he should stay with hermione till he is fully recovered... and then never want to leave. Or maybe she can stay with him and then he'll be too weak to kick her out. Hmmm...yep. He'll be stubborn no matter what you make him do!
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  • From ANON - Mary on August 03, 2012
    Oh wonderful you... thank you. It was another update and I feel so distress and so relief because now Hermione knows 3 important facts. The sad story of Severus
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  • From onecelestialbeing on August 03, 2012
    That part about his childhood just broke me down. I hope you're satisfied.
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  • From snape1sh on August 03, 2012
    I enjoyed reading Snape's memories and see Hermione's reaction.
    The follow up at the ball also excellent and I cannot wait for the next chapter (once again)...Snape in the hospital...at least now Hermione finally knows where he is and hopefully the can have another session.
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  • From onecelestialbeing on August 03, 2012
    I neeeed the next chapter *cries*
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  • From HarryGinny4eva on August 03, 2012
    Hello there. I LOVED the quick update, so thank you!! Sometimes Lucius just needs to be the bad guy, and you did a great job writing him as such. He was smarmy and mean. Poor Severus. If that's the kind of "friends" he has, it's no wonder he's such a complete mess. Sigh... And now, when he wakes up from his coma, he's going to get in trouble with the Ministry, too. Sigh again...

    Another fantastic update! Thank you, HG4eva
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 03, 2012
    Now that was a well deserving chapter. And very intense. And I do hope poor Severus manages to make it out of the coma alright. And that Lucius won't cause too much trouble. You've pegged them all quite well, and I do so love the image of her with shorter hair. This chapter was thoroughly engaging. Thank you. Please give us another soon.

    Cheers,

    ~CC
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  • From ANON - Mary on August 02, 2012
    Very interesting developments and now you put my ... I meant OUR darling Severus in a coma. I hope it goes long enough that he will go for an absolute detox and Hermione can use some of the potions to help him. Great chapter, thank you for the quick update... I know I shouldn't get use to it but I do check the site every day just in case!
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  • From ANON - cclemens on August 02, 2012
    I think it is a tad hyporitical for Hermione to be upset with Draco/Lucius for the word "mudblood" after she has called Lily a cow
    for being upset with Severus for saying the same thing.....At the time Severus said it he believed in the same things that Lucius did.
    And it was worse for Lily , because she was called this by someone she cared for...
    Don't get me wrong. I wish Lily could have forgiven him. But I don't think Hermione would have been that harsh with her...She was still Harry's mom.
    The same mother who gave up her life to save her child's.....

    Great story otherwise
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  • From TalisRuadair on August 02, 2012
    That slimy bastard. I do think he belongs in Azkaban, Lucius that is. I cannot help but wonder how Snape ended up in the hospital unless his elderly neighbor went to check on him and he was non responsive and called the authorities. As always I look forward to your next chapter and perhaps some showing of care on Hermione's part.
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  • From MariaTeresaQuintanar on August 02, 2012
    I am loving this story. It's being well written and the plot is great. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 02, 2012
    I think I've held off on reviewing until now. But essentially you've been stringing us along painstakingly slowly- and this chapter is a rub in the faces of your readers. Here we're expecting progression and you're giving us canon fodder that we already know. With a line or two here and there of Hermione's reaction. So basically this whole chapter was like one paragraph of your work- which up til this point has actually been thoroughly captivating- and the other 95% slight paraphrasing of EVERYTHING WE ALREADY KNOW.

    I can't speak for the rest of the readers, but this chapter is just sort of like an insult. Either you're lazy and don't want to come up with new material, which is sort of a slap in the face to those of us that check the progress of this story. Or you're presuming we're stupid and don't know the background- which is essentially still a slap in the face.

    What you stretched out over a chapter could have been summed up in a paragraph-- Hermione viewing his memories, and waves of emotion flowing through her, pity, desperation to comfort, loathing for lily, dumbledore, etc. Every good writer knows how to properly balance 'show' and 'tell.' And this was a case for the story's progression's sake where we should have had 'tell' and we got stuck with 'show.'

    I'm not discrediting your work, as it's been a finely woven story- but throwing this in as a chapter- without more substance to it- or another chapter to immediately follow- just seems pointless, repetitive and feels a little like a slap in the face.

    Here's to hoping the next chapter has substance pertaining to the current goings on; or if it's all memory like this mess that you also actually include more of what's going on in the story than you do of the memories. Your memory work up until this point has been fine- especially what you created- with the girl Mary- that was brilliant and well executed. But you do your readers and yourself no service when you just plop a bunch of canon fodder into your memory sequence and call it a chapter.

    We loved reading the memories of things we didn't previously know; things that made Severus of your own style; but I cannot stress enough how utterly disappointing this chapter was. You've been reeling us along and we're expecting the next big piece of the puzzle...

    I'm hoping that you will seriously reconsider your next chapter if it's more memories of this variety- the canon that we already know.
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