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Reviews for Controlling Time

By : TalisRuadair
  • From Jan on August 26, 2012
    Please update chapter 5 soon.
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  • From ANON - alwayslove on August 25, 2012
    Hermione is an idiot. Why would she send that howler to the past. I thought she was a smart person. Love the new chapter but I would love to slap Hermione.
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  • From ANON - heartstar on August 25, 2012
    Nice I was a little confused at the begining But I love what you have done. Until next time..
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  • From Sera21 on August 24, 2012
    Wow, Harry hasn't just thrown all his cards on the table, he has thrown his lunch bag, his satchel and everything but teh kitchen sink on the table at this point. Wouldn't it be wise to keep some of that stuff to himself? I mean if he hadn't oblivated wormtail by accident, Peter knowing about him and Lucius could have been big big trouble :/. Also, Harry just pointed out( in great and exact detail) that he is related to Regulus through a great aunt. If Regulus is as pure-bred and as knowlegable about his heritage as you would expect, wouldn't he put two and two together and get back to Potter? and yes, you should consider making Harry a bit more human. So far he pretty much has zero bad qualities and everybody but the really bad guys like him and trust him. His only bad quality seems to be that he can't keep his big mouth shut. Maybe that will mean trouble in the future? Also he seems very talented in new spells which I can't remember him ever being in the books...he always learnt a handfull and had to practice ages to learn them and then used them on a rota,lol. I mean he used wingardium Leviosa on a troll and he used stupify to kill Voldie so yeah...not an endless repertoire of new and impressive spells. Maybe 1 or 2 but ur overdoing it a bit.
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  • From Sera21 on August 24, 2012
    Wait...Harry just used Snapes dads first name and Snape didn't even blink about it. Thats not suspicious for somebody that has only been there for a few days? and why is Snape so open to Harry when he spent 7 books telling nobody his private thoughts and motivations till the moment of his death?
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  • From Sera21 on August 24, 2012
    Okay, here I am, back for more, because although I think parts of the plot need some work I love me some sub! Lucius. Really, there are far to few storys in which Lucius is a sub for Harry even though with his history its a given that he would be into some kinky shit. So yeah, great sex scene, the only problem I had was at the end when ...wait...Harry told Lucius he LOVES him?? WHAT??? WHAT??? Last chapter he still hated him for being an evil bastard and only wanted to humiliate him and now, in the space of a few days no less...he has come to love him?? WHAT?? Thats some serious stuff right there! But wait...I'm going to presume he is just messing with Lucius head. Psychological sadism. Because otherwise I would have to assume you are either a teenager or fresh off some 50 shades of grey reading ( fanfic abomination that it is). Sex does not equal love!!!!!!!!! Oh and on that note, are we going to find out how Harry became a well-practiced sadist at the tender age of 17 when he hasn't done more then use a leg locker curse until now?
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  • From ANON - heartstar on August 24, 2012
    lol I love this I think though that remus will figure it out his nose and all? lol
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  • From Jan on August 23, 2012
    Please update chapter 3 soon.
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  • From ANON - heartstar on August 23, 2012
    lol poor luc well more please
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  • From bloodshound on August 23, 2012
    wow, major mary sue alert. Seriously though, har is overplaying his hand something chronic. I know he has a schedule to keep up with but you're rushing it and covering with rather thin excuses. Long and short, slow it down a bit... also, what's the point of getting luc the DADA position if he's going to undermine his authority? I mean, seriously, as a teacher Luc has to give commands to the students.
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  • From HeartStar on August 22, 2012
    interesting moe please.
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  • From Sera21 on August 22, 2012
    Good writing although I felt like the sex scene could have been a bit more drawn out. Make Lucius beg a bit more...plus I don't think the enslavement potion was really nessesary if Lucius was already practically a slave. Now we won't know if what he does is natural or if its because of the potion :/ Also, I can't believe Harry just blurted all of that out * facepalm* . Wouldn't it have been wiser to slowly win their trust and then tell them? Now they are just going to think he is some lying slytherin :/ I mean if somebody you had never met came up to you and just read your mind and blurted out that one of your oldest friends is going to betray you, I wouldn't trust them at ALL. Good idea and decent writing but you just put at least 10 chapters of story into one...
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  • From imsandir on August 22, 2012
    I like it so far, looking forward to seeing where you take it and how you have Harry help out everyone in this time line. One question, what about Draco? If Harry controls Lucius and that timeline's Harry hasn't been born yet, then neither has Draco, so will he still be born? I really hope so. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - SinfulMind on August 22, 2012
    The beginning was promising, however when I got to the moment of Malfoy's collaring... definitely not my cup of tea.
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