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By : Danyealle
  • From ANON - psychosmurf on May 05, 2013
    Ch 13: Glad Harry gets to have some of the normal experiences.
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  • From ANON - Quaff on May 04, 2013
    This is a great story. Thank you for writing it.
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  • From demonsangel on May 04, 2013
    Great chapter as always hun. I loved the idea of the 3 wands vs. just Harry and Tom's. Great idea to let Harry still be parts of things. Can't wait to read more! How does Minerva know what is going on with Harry though? I thought all she was aware of was that his guardians weren't mentioned while Dumbles knew about Harry being sick.
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  • From ANON - nox_lumen on May 01, 2013
    WARNING: concrit, but no flames!

    Plot wise, you have a very good concept to start. Writing style, on the other hand? You have a lot of room for improvement. Your characters tend to be redundant, both in speech and thought, frequently saying the same phrases quite often in a very short space, with little to no change in wording. When 4-5 adults and a child all tell Harry the same thing within new statements being added to a chat, rather then strengthening the statement, it can make the readers mind stop noticing what you were trying to stress and this is why intentionally writing repetition has understandably not been in fashion since Heian era Japan. As a result, though you appear to have a fuller looking chapter, many chapters have so much filler in the end that they would have been more satisfying to read as one rather than several installments. I strongly recommend that after you work out this version you take the time to go back over it and try to take out much of the extra phrases and perhaps even compress a few chapters.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 25, 2013
    Great chapter. I want to beat Dumbles with a stick.

    Can't wait for more.
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  • From chrissy on April 24, 2013
    Cool story!! Look forward to the next up date.
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  • From Jan on April 23, 2013
    Lol poor dragon, being referred to as a psychotic beast you call Smaug. Please update chapter 13 soon.
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  • From demonsangel on April 20, 2013
    Great chapter hun! So glad that Harry is doing so much better. Hope Albus doesn't muck things up.
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  • From Jan on April 10, 2013
    Lol, this was a very interesting chappy, please update chapter 12 soon ^_^
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  • From ANON - mithrilandtj on April 09, 2013
    Instead of two Lord Voldemorts (good & bad), why not have Tom be called Lord Slytherin?
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  • From ANON - GoddessonmyKnees on April 09, 2013
    Great chapter. I love Narc going nuts. It was very funny.

    Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on April 09, 2013
    That was hysterical! I liked how Nagini "pratically broke the land speed record" getting to Tom's room! Excellent update!
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  • From ANON - Sapphire Phoenix on April 09, 2013
    That was hilarious! I loved it and the thought of three of the most dangerous wizards in Britain cowering like chihuahuas faced with a raging mastiff!
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 09, 2013
    hi,
    I am not able to write a review for all of your chapters, but I like this story still and very much.
    this chapter was hilarious, I had tears in my eyes for laughing, it was very good for Harry I think.
    See you soon
    Phoenix5
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  • From demonsangel on April 09, 2013
    LMAO. I love how Narcissa goes all out on the men but still lets Harry keep the toy. Great chapter.
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