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From ANON - Katrina on December 08, 2012
Draco and Sev and Charlie!
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From ANON - LoversMedium on December 05, 2012
I wanted you to know that your story seems to be going well, and I hope you continue to write it. As for the census: I am unsure if the Colin/Denis as a package counts as both points, but I want them and Severus. Or if the package count as both points: Severus and Colin. I will not give up a sevviepoo for anything, even the cuteness that is Denis!
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From ANON - rosie on December 03, 2012
All of them
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From ANON - jujukitty on December 03, 2012
omg, was reading some of the reviews, and "bunny bros" from unneeded!!!! i laughed my ass off cause i kept thinking of them the same way, they're just so sweet and innocent and corruptible *dies laughing*. since i forgot to throw in my vote...um? i agree with another reviewer, poor charlie never gets enough face time (and i really like a work-scarred, muscled and tattooed charlie *hinthint* lol) but i'm wondering how/when he's goign to play into the story line as it is so far. i agree with another one that this nathaniel kid already kind of has an in as harry just saved him. snape should kind of be last in the mates i think just to give harry a challenge in trying to win him over as nate, colin and dennis are pretty much a sure bet. since ryr already has a special assignment, i can't pick him, otherwise i'd give him first place lol, the chemistry between the two is just so nummy. if you do the bunny bros, you should do them as a set i think, no fair corrupting one without the other lol. so i guess charlie (1pt), nate (1pt), col/dennis, snape is my order of preference.
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From ANON - jujukitty on December 03, 2012
another wonderful chapter, couple typos (though i liked the healing "slave" *snicker*). and i liked all the different reactions to harry and i think you did a wonderful job with snape and draco and their absolute reluctance to deal with things. i see fun times ahead for harry lol (or maybe i should say *cackles evilly*). btw, in your census thingy, you didn't actually say what we're voting on though i'm assuming it's who's going to be his first mate. and who's this nathaniel kid? anyway, keep up the good work, i'm looking forward to more :D
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From ANON - librarycat9 on December 02, 2012
I want Snape as a mate... Definitely!!!
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From Jan on December 02, 2012
I vote for Snape and Nathaniel.... though there is also Charlie... but since I can only vote for 2 then Snape and Nathaniel.

Please update chapter 12 soon ^_^
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From ANON - Ish on December 02, 2012
Loving the story. It seems to be a creature harry story unlike any i have read so far. (i have read at least a hundred no exaggeration) You really have me intrigued. Now you mentioned in your author notes mandatory voting well the results seem to be much better than what we have here in Canada. Waaayyy too much corruption due to voter apathy. About them banning cartwheels soon they will ban paper because kids might get a paper cut not to mention stairs. Lets ban stairs since some kid will trip and fall, ooh no can't go on a field trip the bus might get in an accident. Lets just wrap the kids in bubble wrap with a safety helmet and goggles strap them in wheel chairs and push them everywhere because heaven forbid they crash into another in the halls and get a bruise.. Ridiculous... and honestly legislation needs to be put in place to halt the policy makers from straddling out kids so much that they loose out on opportunities like i did. No rock climbing gym trips, no gymnastics on bars because its too dangerous and i will never forget being forced to wear safety glasses while sewing because some stupid girl ran over a pin broke the needle had it go into her eye and sued the Ontario school board and won. For generations kids have been taught how to sew. That was a first. Sad.

Anyway sorry about my rant but the prompt just couldn't be ignored, Anyway sorry Love the story so far and i sincerely hope that it will be completed or complete. The visual descriptions you give in the story are so vivid that ixcan literally follow the story with a movie going on in my head that is so far as good if not better than an hp movie.
Thanks soon much for the story.
L
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From ANON - Alisha on December 02, 2012
I choose Snape and Charlie. This is a great story and I love reading it. Keep up the awesome work.
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From bloodshound on December 02, 2012
blast, i really cant read instructions. coulda swaorn it said 3. oopsie... >> well in that case. i dunno nate so i can give him up easy. snape and the bunny bro's. snape definitely. har needs some who'll challenge him... besides, he already knocked down sev's inner walls. ^^ i we knew a bit more about nate i'd consider him in the bunny bro's place, but i don't. *shrugs.
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From bloodshound on December 01, 2012
i go for snape, the bunny brothers and nate. nate cause har rescued him and is likely to be possessive, the bunny bro's cause they have super sub tasty little snacks written all over them (instead of colin and dennis they should be called coney and dinner. :P )and snape cause it would be absolutely hilarious.
is some finally going to explain stuff to har instead of letting the poor guy muddle along on his own? a king huh, well damn... does that mean har has to follow their laws too as well as WW ones?
also, with those he calls as ?, potential mates, whatever, does that mean he still has to go to the mate meet? Bit rough emotional black mailing them like that. come or be shunned. what happens if they're sick or injured? or if they're still struggling with the whole critter instincts and make over?

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From ANON - XTakesheX on December 01, 2012
Nathaniel and Ryr
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From Hollibell on December 01, 2012
Ok. I'll apologize in advance. This may be a bit long....

And this will probably not help you much with your poll (sorry! :( ). I just don't know how to vote my two points, so I thought I'd just throw my thoughts out there.

I don't always review on aff. I HATE the captcha...and it hates me, lol. But, I am really enjoying your story. Kick ass vicious creature Harry is a guilty pleasure of mine, multi mates a decided bonus. I really really loved how you brought every one in in this chapter. The Creevy brothers, Snape, Sebastian, Draco, Nathaniel....wow, do I really have to choose? I liked them all together like that, I could see each of them in his...harem (not sure what to call it, lol) for their own reasons.

I know you said Draco was out of it, but I like how he was called, too. I sort of saw him as maybe a co-dominant or leader or something, equal to Harry, or maybe only slightly below him. He is strong in his own right, able to take care of himself, but he and Harry being together would allow both of them to have someone to lean on, someone they could give over to when they needed to. If that makes sense. (and is even relevant to where you're going with your story, lol)Snape strikes me as a man fighting he need for someone to take care of him. He's had a bit of a shit life. That one line from Draco, "How much longer, Severus?" that got me thinking. Then the two of them stood in the doorway, both reluctant, and finally went to Harry, and just held his hand. It was a really good scene, and made me really want them to be Harry's mates, too.

Nathaniel. I'm not usually a fan of OC's, but Dumbledore's little musings on his mother made me feel like Nathaniel needs Harry; someone to protect him. I loved how he just snuggled in to Harry, and with how intense that rescue scene was, with him in danger causing Harry to emit his dominant call, it's like he's Harry's already in my mind. So, lol, now that I've reasoned all that out, I guess the only ones I could see not as Harry's mates is Sebastian and the Creevy's. You know, if some had to be eliminated, those would be the ones I would be least sad about. Best case scenario for me: all of them together, one big happy family, lol. AAnnnddd I think I've rambled long enough! Apologies again for the long windedness!!!! (Now, please please please captcha work, and not lose this massive review!)
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From ANON - Sethys on December 01, 2012
I vote Snape and Charlie
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From ANON - CM on December 01, 2012
OOPS sorry! I'm not very good at reading instructions properly heh. My one point goes to Collin and Dennis as a package and another to Nathaniel! I want Severus but I think he's an adult and he won't be as hurt as the three if he doesn't get chosen? I have a weakness for little boys! That came off wrong... Haha Update Soon!
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