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Reviews for Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

By : CryingCinderella
  • From ANON - Belissima on July 18, 2015
    OH, DO WRITE MORE!

    Please please please!
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  • From ANON - starr on July 18, 2015
    wow don't think that anyone even know how much Hermione is hurting !!!!!! hope they do make it as a couple !!! Thanks for the update and see you soon again hopefully !!! :):):):)
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  • From ANON - chelsey on July 17, 2015
    This is quite adorable and very sexy.
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  • From ANON - Belissima on July 17, 2015
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  • From Luna8 on July 15, 2015
    Oh. Dear. Lord.
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  • From ANON - troggs on July 15, 2015
    Thank you THANK YOU for the new chapter. Great story only getting better every time. One question will George have to join in at any time ever with Snape or as a threesome?
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  • From Kitty115 on July 14, 2015
    OMG, thank you so much!!! It's a great chapter! Love the way you are developing their relationship. So slowly but at the same time with so much tension and fire. ))))
    Can't wait to see how Snape and Hermione will act after that intercourse in bathroom. Will Snape pretend that nothing happened? Or he will accept that "something" between him and Hermione?

    By the way, that was HOT!!! ;))
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 13, 2015
    I've been coming to this site to read Hermione/Snape pairings for 10+ years now and I can count the number of times I've felt compelled to write a review on one hand. This story is amazing and I sincerely hope that you continue. I would so look forward to an update!
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  • From ANON - Nancy on July 13, 2015
    I was so excited to see an update! Another great chapter!
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  • From ANON - Vaila on July 12, 2015
    You are fenomenal. This story can start a challenge like Marriage Law fics and Time Travel fics. It could be WWW. This story is just unique. There is no other like it. And every chapter is more intense than the other. I like how you portray Severus - the way he holds back all the time. I like how he finally snapped and fucked her hard the way he wanted and without audiance. I hope every chapter is as intense as this one. And I hope you update more often.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 12, 2015
    Thank you for the update! I thoroughly enjoyed this new chapter and the slight shift in the relationship between Hermione and Severus. These two characters are a pleasure to read.

    I noticed some prose issues while reading and I just wanted to let you know for future reference.

    I think you use a lot of semicolons - perhaps too many. Just CTRL+F to find them - there are a lot of them. The semicolon is usually used quite sparingly since it essentially doubles the size of the sentence. However, I think my issue with them is that I don't think they're being used properly. A semicolon is supposed to separate two complete clauses; these clauses share a common idea, but can function independently. An easy way to check for this is to see whether you can replace a semicolon with a period. If you can, then you're using it right.

    Eg. "His palm landed against her again; firm and unyielding." That semicolon should be a comma, since firm and unyielding is not a separate clause (no noun or verb).
    Eg. "It was joined by his other hand; both arms around her back now, circling her into a loose embrace." The first clause is fine because it's complete. The second clause ("both arms around her back now, circling her into a loose embrace") is not. It doesn't read quite right when it's alone, right? To rectify it, it would have to be: "both arms WERE around her back now, circling her into a loose embrace." I think a lot of your sentences could be fixed just by adding a verb into the second clause.

    Some sentences could use a little reordering: "It flashed quickly in her mind the things she
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  • From FieryPhoenix on July 12, 2015
    Woweee... Someone turn up the air conditioning in here! Intense, well detailed and rather hot. Bet anyone reading this doesn't need those delectable lustipops ;) keep writing please, I'm truly enjoying the burgeoning relationship between them and the way Hermione is learning to love and accept herself too.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 12, 2015
    I'm so glad you updated! Thank you. This story is, of course, sexy, but I also love the emotional development of the relationship between Snape and Hermione as well as their perception of each other.

    I enjoyed watching Snape's facade crack just that bit, despite how he denied what I guess was Hermione's love for him (I think?). I would also be interested in knowing whether Hermione really was thinking that she loved him. And gosh, everytime they take a step forward, they go at least halfway back. Severus is rather endearingly emotionally constipated...

    I will admit that sex during menses is a little squicky for me. Not sure why, since blood is just another bodily fluid, but blood seems just so visceral. I think you had a relatively good balance between mentioning her period and leaving it out when it wasn't necessary to the story. It might have been mentioned a tad more than needed, possibly, but I guess it is rather noticeable - especially to Hermione, who is self-conscious about it.

    Looking forward to your next update :) Happy writing!
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 12, 2015
    Holy hotness!!! Not sure how old this story is but would love to read more!?
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  • From Rosajean on July 11, 2015
    I'm so confused by that ending. What was he stopping her from saying? She does not what? Enigmatic Snape is so frustrating! But hot as hell too! Really great chapter! Loved seeing both of them get spanked. Please update again very soon! Anything I can do to hurry the process? :D
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