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By : CryingCinderella

From ANON - lemonade on July 07, 2013
Where to start? I love Molly so much. She didn't want to push it, but had a room all set up for Hermione. She's like my grandma, what a darling!
And poor, lonely George! I want to hug him and set him up on a date. Just the thought of him running that shop all alone, of spending day and night doing nothing but working, then seeing other people enjoy what he doesn't get to. I hope this line sells well so he can hire some more people and take a little time for himself.

I actually like the way Severus is trying to keep things distant, sort of. It's not that I'm not rooting for them, it's just that he has the wisdom to know that the situation is ripe to produce artificial emotion and is trying to keep illusions at bay. He's dealing with a much younger woman who doesn't have nearly the experience he does and I can see him not wanting to waste time on things that aren't real or won't last to avoid needless pain. That he might be actually attracted to her or that they might develop real feelings over time is something I don't expect him to recognize immediately, so I do have more sympathy for his emotional walls. Too bad they are hurting Hermione's feelings, though. I suppose he feels it would be better to nip it in the bud now than to let them go on and get hurt later. He really does seem to look out for her well-being in this, and I love him a little for that. He always checks to see if she's okay, he tries to save her dignity, he hinted at the 'missing breath' and let her get credit for it when he could have just brought it up himself. There is a lot to like about him, even as acerbic as he is.

And he kissed her back. Good for him!!! She really likes it, I think he could use that to get his way if he wasn't being noble. ;D You know, he has always had no trouble performing for the testing, but he seems to be enjoying himself much more lately, so I wonder if that is an indicator of his attraction to her. Also, the fact that he was adamant that no apology was necessary and that HE wasn't sorry... lol She just doesn't get what that might mean, does she. :D

The bed, the couch, the room!!! (I know, not a full sentence, but you KNOW what I'm laughing about) He didn't get a good gander at it, but I bet he will have bed-envy soon! Plus it's memory foam, he probably would get a decent night's sleep on that thing, unlike the cramped up little cot he's on now! I wonder if he will ever give her the key or put her in the wards or something. It's just that last step before acknowledging that she's welcome and a part of his home, even for a little bit. Oh, Severus!
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From MagicWords on July 07, 2013
OK... LOL

I don't know where YOU are, but it's after 3am here and I wasn't about to go to sleep before I read your update!

O. M. G!

I am absolutely loving this story more each day!

The little clues and insights into his head are brilliant...

And I can't WAIT to see what happens with the D2 when Weasely repairs it and "looks into the notes in the ledger"...

That should be an interesting "re-test" LOL

Keep up the good work and can't wait for the next update!

-S
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From serialcabbit78 on July 07, 2013
and this is how we shatter the ice prince. I cannot wait until you return with more!
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From ANON - Nami on July 06, 2013
Love it! I can't wait for more XDD
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From ANON - notlori925 on July 06, 2013
Okay, I just read the last two chapters and WOW! I mean, this story has kept me reading because it is interesting, inventive, and HOT!!!!! I mean that last chapter had me fanning myself. I enjoy your characterization of Snape. He is extra mysterious here. And extra aloof. And maybe these are the reasons that Hermione is so intent on digging into his personal life. I also could very well see him being bisexual. That does not seem too out there. Especially considering that he worked for a dark lord. And now that she is living with him this should get even more interesting and intense. I cannot wait for more!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Mela on July 05, 2013
Great story and plot! Please continue with this story (I'm so glad that you picked it up again)!
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From serialcabbit78 on July 05, 2013
*Picks up a heavy cast iron skillet* Okay Severus. Could you ATTEMPT to be nice for once. She's homeless for Merlin's sake.
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From ANON - Missycam on July 05, 2013
WOW! Just... wow!
You did very well, it was cute, intimate, perfect
Thank you
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From ANON - Nicole on July 05, 2013
I realy am enjoying this A LOT more than I expected. The way that you have made the facade of snaps so clinical is an approach that has caught my interest. Please keep writing this story! I'm loving it!
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From HarryGinny4eva on July 04, 2013
Well, I would say either you are VERY well read, or that was not your first time "instructing" either. :-) Strangely enough, the clinical-ness of his actions and explanations helped me get through it, too. lol I can't wait to find out what his dysfunction is, though. Since he is obviously not turned off by her, and seems to be over the "former student" thing, I can't for the life of me figure out why he can't seem to relax and let himself enjoy things. Not to mention, she might be less annoying to him if he stopped treating her like a his world's biggest pain in the ass. And, she has got to get over thinking of him like her teacher and start seeing the man he is. Maybe then she wouldn't be so freaked out about it all and could relax a bit more and not be such a pain to him. Oh what a circle! lol Thank you, HG4eva
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From ANON - Mary on July 04, 2013
Even with the speed you can create and give us (generously I might add) two chapters in a short period of time, the quality, the characters, the situations are just excellent. How well you portrayed Severus as a hard core reluctant to share his personal life character; I do enjoy the puzzling stories behind the difficult man; Also Hermione with curiosity and moments of candid maturity and spontaneity. Just adore your story, event the taboo subject of anal is well described and actually accurate, a lot of preparation is needed.
My dear, as always you are doing a great job and kudos for being such a fantastic and creative writer. Your imagination knows no boundaries
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From ANON - vero on July 04, 2013
je pense que quand il
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From MagicWords on July 04, 2013
I've said it before and I'll say it again...
BLOODY BRILLIANT!

I love the concept...love the story but most of all...

I LOVE THE FACT THAT YOU ARE KEEPING IT IN HERMIONE'S POV!!!

Much of the FanFic I've read is good. Some are VERY good and a few are GREAT!

But even with the great ones, there is the thing editors refer to as "head hopping" where the POV changes almost from paragraph to paragraph.

The fact that you are doing a FANTASTIC job of keeping to Hermione's POV is the mark of an extremely good writer. The only clues that the reader gets as to Snape's feelings about what is going on is through her eyes. We find out as she does and we discover things about the character only as she does.

That is what makes this story so truly addictive.

I don't know if you realize it, but that is exactly what JK Rowling did with the original series. The reader NEVER knew anything before Harry did...we may have suspected things, but until Harry discovered a missing piece of the puzzle, we didn't know for certain.

Bravo!

Now...having said all of that...Will you PLEASE write faster? LOL

Also...I gotta wonder if the D2 is going to work anything like the "panties" did.

I think it would be really interesting if HE could actually FEEL what the 2nd phallus was doing...like LITERALLY having...well, 2 cocks. It IS called "D2" and involves double penetration

It would be only fair for HIM to get an unexpected surpise. (evil grin)

I'd LOVE to see him try to keep his composure through that in the workshop...

Keep writing and keep up the GREAT work!

-S
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From PiertotumLocom88 on July 04, 2013
I really adore this story.. One of the very few that keeps getting more and more intriguing.. I like the fact we know nothing about Snape's thoughts or the reasons behind his behaviour(despite the fact that he is an adorable bastard most of the time) yet. And although it makes me sad that Hermione has lost her home because i realize these things can happen even with the most brilliant ones, it's inspiring that she keeps fighting! On the "naughty" part now why (basically WHY????) a potion for anal preparation??? It can be so fun with the "muggle" way...
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From ANON - lemonade on July 04, 2013
Her trust in him is touching. It doesn't seem to visibly melt any of those walls he puts up, but maybe off the page he feels it. He does seem to be relenting in letting her know a bit more about his sexuality, and the circumstances would really necessitate that she have some sort of idea about what he does and doesn't like. His grumpy admission of her into his house was kind of funny (if you aren't Hermione). He knows that she will be needing to stay with him, he just can't bring himself to NOT give her a hard time about it. He knows she's pretty good at cleaning charms, though, so that's a bonus. :D LOL, I can't believe that he was complaining about her needing to practice blow jobs on him!!! Oh, poor baby! It must be so terrible to have a young, beautiful, smart woman who admits to being attracted to you begging you to let her give you a hummer! The humanity! Thank goodness for obliviate- you wouldn't want to have to remember such a terrible thing! ;D I noticed he'd been thinking about it, though.

So, wait though, she has shrunken her sheets and pillows and clothing, has she shrunken her furniture from the old apartment? Is it in her bag or is it in the attic of Grimmauld place or something? Her bed has to be more comfortable than Severus' lumpy but charmed single one. I wonder if he will try to trade her or have her pay him with it for 'rent' once he sees it in the extended room they will make. If I were him I would totally sneak down and take naps in it.
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