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From Crittenz on January 19, 2013
It was an excellent review. Well worded and full of awesomeness. I don't know why it showed up blank but I was tired and couldn't bother leaving another review.

TO re-cap though. I LOVE this story and as I am a dedicated lurker you should feel pretty special I left a review at all. I normally don't. Not because I don't like a story mind you but because I get horribly lazy. However if you keep writing I will keep reviewing. I do hope Draco forgives himself soon. I have already lol
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From ANON - Ariisha on January 19, 2013
I really should log in, but my laziness forbids it.
Which means you should be super complimented that it allowed me to review.
Wow, Max is such a hoe! For a second I thought she was implying Draco be with her. Then I was like
"Bitches be crazy!" And indeed they are. Maybe I'll get a Draco sized pillow and clutch it when I get
Depressed. It's good to see Hermoine is awake, I really hope she snaps out of the depression funk and
Kicks some serious ass. Also wondering about Isobel and her reaction to Hermoines and Dracos relationship.
I anticipate your next chapter.
If I was a pure blood and you were a mud blood, I'd totally still marry you!
-Ariisha
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From FaeChild on January 18, 2013
I think that fanfics and OCs are so much better when you an use personal experience to fuel them. It's like the need that touch of reality in order to be more 3D. Thank you for the new chapter. I'm keeping my eyes open for your fic and any new chapters you post.
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From DB1 on January 17, 2013
@26 poor Harry hope he gets the help he needs!!! Poor hermione going through all that but yay for her and Draco!!
Update soon!!

DB
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From ANON - kit on January 17, 2013
Your story is fantastic! I can't stop reading and I came upon it just a few hours ago . I love everything; the plot, how the characters are portrayed, the progression of Hermione's and Draco's relationship, and also the quotes at the beginning of each chapter. I usually do not like the oc characters authors input into their stories; but yours are very amiable. The thing I enjoy most about this story is how no one is perfect, every character has there flaws; everyone is just very human. Its one of the best stories I have read in a while. I'm sure you could imagine my disappointment in catching up to the latest update. I'm excited to read what happens next! I cant stop thinking about who's wand Harry has...rons? and for that matter... I want to see what has happened to him, what led him to become this manic-psychotic Harry.
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From Crittenz on January 17, 2013

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From ANON - anaidra on January 17, 2013
Once again, great job!

Why everything has to so difficult for Draco and Hermione? Does so many bad things have to happen to them? It seems like they make a move forward and take three steps back.... and then I thought... Isnt it the exact reason why you love this story so much? That they have to work for their love and have to face their lives, past, memories etc. Absolutely yes!
Cant wait to read more. Look forward to seeing how Draco and Hermione will react once they wake up. What will they think and do. And what about others ;).
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From ANON - Ariisha on January 17, 2013
I don't know if you know. But there's this game called Cards Against Humanity. I'm from
Canada. It's the adult version of Apples to Apples.
One of the cards is actually "Harry Potter Erotica"
And I thought of you and your wonderful story. I was so excited to have finally found the time to read the
Newest chapters. I absolutely love how you keep all your characters
In character. I wish they could make a movie from this story. However,
I did notice your story was hauntingly similar (but much better in content)
To ianthe_waiting's The Fool, The Emperor
and The Hangman. Just wondering if you used it for any inspiration or if you're
Just going on the fly? I'm not accusing of plagiarism or anything, I was just wondering
Cause if not you should really read it.
You are my favorite person in the world everytime you update.
With utter abandon and devotion,
-Ariisha.ck
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From ANON - Aranel on January 17, 2013
No dubious consent, that's alright. You can make it up to me in some much needed humping and heavy petting! Whew! Draco is sleeping over again! Nice morning woody for my wee lamb, I believe that shall be his new name. My heart broke when she saw that the record player was broken. I literally said aww... I hope they can fix it, I really love Remus. Somehow I am still worried about my naughty Harry. Why do I think he needs a spanking... Still worried about ronniekens but I won't think on it too much. I'm proud of Ginny, no matter what story I read I always find a way to hate Ginny but she is doing a great job being a friend here. I hope she can keep her head. Poor Issie baby, but for some reason I don't think hermione needs to explain shit to her, but knowing their friend ship she probably will.. Can't wait for the next chapter! Love you too!!!
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From ANON - Devi circe on January 17, 2013
oh please put up the next chapter! this is the best story I have read in ages and its so unique. have to have more.I'm so addicted. Btw I'm not logged in, I'm not even sure what my name is on my account because I have one on my own and one with my best friend so not sure if you could even go d my page which is ok because my stories are so bad in comparison. you really are a fantastic writer.
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From ANON - Cat on January 17, 2013
I'm glad you cleared that whole thing up for us and in a way I wasn't thinking of! I want to slap Draco, I know you're hurting dude but the world does not revolve around you-then again you were taught that it does sooooooo....old habits must die hard. I can't wait to see how she reacts to that tidbit once she calms and digests everything.

Can I just say that I felt so bad for Ginny? Like way to crush the girl. I feel like something is bubbling with her and Blaise but I mean she loved/loves Harry and that must have been so harsh to hear, and how he acted to her? Goodness me I'd have wilted faster than a flower after a freeze. Though I love how she and Isobel went and made up her room, they really do love her even through all the shit (tho I feel like Isobel will be okay with this whole relationship its going to be so awkward for her to watch)

And Mcgonagall, I feel like though in shock she would have acted more like a momma lion than anything else-this is one of her favorite cubs so to speak attacked by another. Where are the claws? I don't think she would have really let them stay with just Hermione and Draco not for the whole sex thing but because she'd want more protection (other than the random guard)like she'd either demand at least one night in Hogwarts so she could check and recheck the wards (I mean how cool would it be to have the entire group sleep in the DA classroom for comfort and protection) or have like them stay with her just to keep her safe--even if she and Draco were the only ones in her room room atleast they had backup who they knew well enough and trusted.

Oh and wouldn't someone go check the forest of dean? to see if he decided to go there anyway or back to Godrics Hollow?

Just two questions then I'll stop my rant-I'm kidding three. So the elderwand is what he's using---is it voldyshorts or grindewald doing this because I can see it being grindewald since her flat is on the diving line. Also-what happened to Ron? Like I don't want him with Hermione but is he still kickin? What about Neville? It did say he went back right and just chose not to take the class?
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From ANON - TheBusinessofCreating on January 17, 2013
Wow. Your writing is absolutely amazing. I've been following it from almost the very beginning and I have to say, I've loved every word of it. I mean, everyday when I come home from class (university is a real personality sucker), or even when I'm in class (shhhh), I need something to bring me back to life, and your story is just the thing I look for.
When Harry first appeared at Hermione's flat, his actions totally reminded me of another story called The Fool, the Emperor, and the Hanged Man, though that confrontation was far more brutal than yours (thankfully). I'm also going to hazard a guess at the reason behind Harry's complete transformation and say that it's because he is somehow possessed by Grindelwald, namely because of the priest comment and his use of the Elder Wand. Whether that is the case or not, I do so look forward to reading the rest of this story. It keeps me at the edge of my seat the entire way through, and I do so love what you are doing with Draco and Hermione. This is the best character building for them that I have seen to date, so thank you so much for all of your work. :)
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From ANON - Kain on January 16, 2013
-whistles- Well.....that certainly escalated quickly lol. Hermione's reaction to them not coming was perfect and it looks like the cat is out of the bag in regards to her "relationship" with Draco although he kind of screwed the pooch by delaying a possible rescue. What also caught my eye was how Blaise jumped to Ginny's defense since not too long ago they were at each others throats( momma insults and all). I understand this is going to be more centered on Hermione and Draco but is their any chance we will get to see the other Tovarasi interacting 1 on 1? It's just that their seems to have been quite a bit of development in there bonds but we are only being shown the results of said developments, not the path taken to get there. Sucks that Harry(or whatever is wearing his skin) is now branded as a criminal but i was very surprised that Blaise of all people would bring up that it might not have been Harry since he was never close to him and has no reason to speak up for him and it goes to show just how much Hermione still loves him that she would still try to defend his reputation from getting dirtied. She knows him far to well and has been through too much with him to give up on him. That duel was very well done and while Harry, if he is on his game is the better duelist, Hermione is a freaking magical encyclopedia. He is tougher, while she is vastly more knowledgeable.

Another theory that popped into my mind the other day was that since Harry DID die....who's too say that nothing came back with him when he revived. Like something latched onto his soul for the trip back and just festered there, lying in wait and growing stronger while Harry fell more and more into despair until the time was right to mind jack him. Now as i stated in my previous review, you have taken this story in a completely different route than what i expected. I like to pride myself on being able to predict the plot of a fic and you totally pulled the rug out from under me, so once again kudos. Honestly in the early stages of this story i figured it was going to be more of a 'Healing & Forgiveness' kind of plot. Ya know with Hermione and the tovarasi coming to grips with what happened in the war and the things they had to do and experience and learning to move past old grudges and striving to make a better tomorrow. Kind of like a therapy fic ya know? more 'slice of life' kind of genre with the action and dark arts left in the past. And then ya teased the Isobel suicide and I was like:

"noooooooooooo, I became emotionally invested in her and wanted too see her overcome the hatred the world levied against her for actions that weren't her doing".

I totally thought(before you revealed that she lived) that her death would be used as a lit fire under Hermione's ass pushing her to confront society for turning it's back on an innocent girl who's only crime was trying to survive in a world that had already judged her as evil. And Hermione would channel her inner Maximus and call out wizarding society for their treatment of Isobel with a grand display in a scene similar to like:

"IS THIS WHAT YOU WANTED!!!?"

are you not entertained? ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED!?!?
(or something along those lines lol)

And then giving a speech with all of her Tovarasi in the great hall on how such actions won't be condoned in the post war world and that those who pushed Isobel into killing herself should be ashamed, ashamed that they have fallen so low as to condemn a child for the actions of her father and that they should be moving forward.

And after you revealed that she had lived(which I squealed at....like a girl, not exactly proud of that) I figured that the bullying would continue but this time Harry would make his grand entrance into the story again and through his chronic hero syndrome drop whoever was fucking with the girl at that moment on their asses and say something like;

Anyone else?-wand drawn and eyebrow raised- (before leading her to safety)

and then perhaps attending the Tovarasi sessions and if in the off chance that things with Ginny did not work out they stayed as friends(love Gin either way) that instead he could slowly start to fall for Isobel through shared depression or she falls for him due to him rescuing her. It would go a long way to stopping the Bullying and bridging the gap between Slytherins and well...everyone else. The big hero dating a Death Eaters daughter would turn quite a few heads. They would also act as the beta couple to Hermione and Draco.

Well, my time is not my own at the moment so i will have to cut this review short. Oh and don't worry...."IT" is still coming >D, it is that black shapless entity on the horizon. As I was saying, you totally caught me off guard with where you have taken the excellent story, Harry or whatever is possessing his now a fugitive, Hermione practicing ancient and perhaps dangerous magic with Draco and Hermione becoming best friends with a Death Eaters daughter. And now to end things, as you know I have never been a Malfoy fan, so many fic's have turned me off of him, but I have to say you make him enjoyable and flawed and while i am NOT a Homosexual or have any preference for my fellow male species...............I would totally suck his dick. as sad as this may sound, that is the highest compliment I could ever give you, if you knew just how much I have hated the prick in other stories lol.

-salutes the author for continuing to impress and returns to his dwelling....where that Douchebag...lets call him "Steve", ate the last god damned pop tart-

P.S I understand that he is not taking the class so he would not be featured much....but where the piss is Neville? Him being such close friends with Luna,Ginny and Hermione I figured he would pop up every now and again to give them a "whats up".
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From ANON - Melusine on January 16, 2013
I wanted so badly to be mad at Draco, and then he had to go and start crying! What an asshole, he won't even let me be propery mad at him. I think what he did was so wrong on so many levels though, I mean honestly, could he have a bigger ego. I honesty just wanted to give him a hug though.

I felt terrible for so many people this chapter, Ginny, Isobel, Hermione, Draco AND Minerva, the shock that woman must be going through.

I teared up a few times too, so kudos! And I wanted to punch Harry/ possessed Harry in the face, for mostly the duration of his appearance. I'm enjoying the slow reveal, but a little confused/ upset that Hermione didn't mention the wand thing at all. Or maybe she does and it's just details that were rehashed that we didn't need to reread, or she's forgotten with the shock of everything. Not sure, but I hope either way she recalls it and tells someone, because someone needs to start really worrying about that.

Keep up the excellent work, as always, I'm very much looking forward to the next update!
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From Talented_Mrs_Lupin on January 16, 2013
If i thought it would work i would offer to tell you what would happen in my next chapters for my stories if you told me too...but wheres the fun in that?

Loved this chapter and i'm very happy that she is back with Draco though i am very mad at him for keeping the others away from her. I hope he feels like dragon dung!

Please update soon because i am positively aquiver with anticipation!!!!
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