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By : PrettyDesdemona

From ANON - LadyChaos on January 15, 2013
I've caught up to chapter 25 I love your story still! Your absolutely amazing. I feel every emotion it seems.. I hate what happened with Hermione and Draco :(( Teall me you'll fix them peasssssse? :) I really don't like this Harry but I can totally see it happening with PTSD. It's very real. I can't see how she is going to get herself out of that situation but I hope she can find help for him, or at least be done with him once and for all so she can help herself!!! I wonder how Ginny is feeling through all of this... I know her and Hermiones friendship has been tough but I hope she is doing okay with how Harry has been acting.

I just hope Draco comes to the rescue *swoooon* :)

Keep up the good writing I can't wait for more!!
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From pepperdoc on January 15, 2013
Ok, let me start by saying sorry, I haven't reviewed in a long time. I have been reading, and I love the new chapters!
This whole dark side of Harry is wonderful. I always hate it in other stories when he's always sooo good, its boring to me. Its a huge relief that you are showing the growth of the characters so effectively. I am a teeny bit confused how close to the cannon you are keeping, though I'm sure you will be going into that soon. What I mean is, with Harry being so dark, is it that he is not fully rid of the horcrux? Is there still some of Voldemort within him?
The defense class seems to have slipped into the backround a bit, which is somewhat nice to me, not that I didn't like them, don't get me wrong, but Hermione seems to not need them as badly as she once did. So it's logical that you would not talk about them as much.
God, I'm trying really hard not to gush about it, but I think I may be coming off like I am.... so I'm just gonna stop trying to hide it.
Anyway, Isobel! What is she gonna do??? Oh, I like Isobel, she has been such a mysterious character to me. She went from nearly killing herself over Draco to being able to hide it? Or is she really over him? Has she noticed how distant Hermione is being?
And Ginny!!! Coming to the rescue? Maybe defending Hermione against Harry's insanity? Oh, how nice that would be...
I am so anxious for new chapters!! I hope you enjoyed the holidays!
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From ANON - Cat on January 15, 2013
What the F. Is Voldyshorts part of Harry or is he just off his rocker? And why did the rest of them not feel what happened to Isabel she was mean they felt what happened to Isabel how could they not feel her being tortured or her fear and know something was wrong? Seriously tho open mouth insert foot with telling him about his cloak. This chapter felt like an episode of criminal minds which is totally my favorite show and now I'm gonna go watch an episode or three, but I really want to know what the group will do about this. What will Draco do/how will he react? Will she find a way to leave a clue? Will the blood she and Draco shared through the potions play a part? Why did Harry pick those books Gah post soon!
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From ANON - Melusine on January 14, 2013
So first I spent the last, I don't know week, moping about lack of updates, so I decided to read your reviews, and behold! You had updated on ff.net!! So I devoured those and then moped some more, because I'm fantastically impatient like that... And then this chapter! In the middle of my morning! It was a long wait until lunch, but so worth it!

I'm pretty concerned about Harry, and I have a lot of questions, but I'd rather wait and see what comes of this in the next few chapters before I say anything. This broke my heart a lot, to see how far they both fell and that they both aren't that great at putting themselves back together again; but at least Hermione is really trying and getting somewhere.

Is it terrible that I either want the line to activate and help her somehow or just have Draco say screw her telling him to come back later and just break the door down and save the day and apologize for being a complete ass to her the other day?? And they can have another amazing kiss or more (I won't complain) to make up?

Anyway! I love it all and am really looking forward to the next chapter and hopefully some happier feels. :)
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From ANON - tori on January 14, 2013
O Prancing children crumpled dances
Blood be swift and heart be true
O Swirling skies and warping tides
Let me bend you from light
O Children dream and drown in nightmares
I sit in wait for you my children
To come back to darkness

O harry let us be one again...

Whoa! where the heck did that come from. Yes your favorite review has been silent waiting to review waiting for the moment when everything would make sense and still I review with more questions. Why won't she call upon the divine line. Or her friends, did her filters get broken again, will her friends come back with surprise. I mean fucking nice chapter though, I mean harry is a victim of the war so is the rest of them but he more than others because of the killing curse, maybe being brought back one to many times really does mess with your soul. And where the fuck is Draco, he should fucking man up and come see his girl! And the plot thickens!!!!! My head is everywhere my mind is a buzz with questions, and little answers. But I know this for sure it won't end well for herms...
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From Talented_Mrs_Lupin on January 14, 2013
AHHH where is Draco??!! why does'nt her friends feel that shes in danger the way they did when Isobel was trying to kill herself??!! I don't like Harry anymore...that's it...kill him! So either Voldemort still lives within him or He's off his rocker! Which one...or both?

PLEASE UPDATE AS SOOMN AS YOU CAN!!!!
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From ANON - Kain on January 14, 2013
So kinda busy irl at the moment so once again despite what i said in my review on ff.net(which i think is the most awesomest of awesome reviews ever), this will be another short one.

Once again you hit the ball out of the park and it is very obvious that Harry is either possessed by something going by his line of

"I was the highest of priests".

or he is being influenced and subtly pushed in some way. Perhaps it has something to do with the Dividing lines or the books he has been reading. Or perhaps it has something to do with a lingering fragment of Voldemort's soul jacking with his mind. Kind of a last 'fuck you' failsafe put in place in the off chance that he lost. Hermione is seemingly never going to catch a break and if Harry is possessed then if/when he is saved, the revelation of what he has put her through is going to kill him. I will admit you caught me by surprise, i totally did not see things going this way, so kudos lol. I will also admit that while Harry(if it is still him) has absolutely no right to judge Hermione, what he feels towards Draco is not without reason. Literally from day one the kid showed Harry that he was a bit of a prick lol. I would just love to see those 2 in the same vicinity and have them (verbally) tear into each other, calling the other one out on their shit.

Now while this is not the end all void bringing review that i promised, rest assure that it is coming, and once it does arrive, pray to whatever deity you believe in because none will be spared. I.WILL.BREAK.THE.INTERNET and your tastebuds(Hellsing Ultimate episode 9 ending theme "Scars" starts up in the background)
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From Bogarto on January 14, 2013
I was concerned that as their relationship finally started to develop that Crazy Harry would show up and ruin it. One thing is for sure, whether she gets kidnapped to who knows where (hope not), gets raped (really hope not), or somehow gets out of this situation without any more harm done (my hope...pretty please!): Draco is going to feel like crap and probably feel very guilty for their last interaction. They both were at fault for allowing to part the way they did, but Draco will definitely be broken up during whatever mental and physical healing Hermione will need to go through. I'm interested to find out what direction you will end up going with Harry from here. As much as I like his character the way he was in the last chapter makes me want him broken, bleeding, and dying in some alley. Whether he is afflicted with some kind of dark residual magic from the war or is just plain crazy from it, Hermione better not let her old friendship trap her again. She was way too quick to forget their first odd/scary meeting.

That said, I love the story and your writing so far! I tend to like most Dramione fics that are well written, but very few of even those have the realism and care that yours does. Well done!
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From ANON - anaidra on January 14, 2013
First, I love this story! I cant wait to read the next chapter.
As for the last one (chapter 25), well, I just felt like crying at the of it or something like that. It just cant be... what is wrong??? No, no, no... someone has to help her... :)
Really good job. Makes me wonder whal will happen and as I said, I simply cant wait to read more!
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From ANON - ConjurerOfCheapTricks on January 14, 2013
I'm so in love with this story. Can't wait for the next chap! Glad you're back to civilization and posting regularly! :)
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From FaeChild on January 14, 2013
Okay, so I posted my last review just seconds before you posted chapter 25, and now I have to review the new chapter, for obvious reasons. I was like 'wtf Harry?', and the whole 'not like Ginny's' thing. I think I actually get it. And WHAT THE HELL is wrong with her friends!!!! There is no way she sounds like she has a bug, they should have just broken the damned door down! But I guess that wouldn't help your story any, would it... I want so badly to see how Hermione gets out of this, I need Hermione to get out of this one! Poor poor Hermione...
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From ANON - Kain on January 14, 2013
I have not read the newest chapter yet as i have to go to work......but when i return....well you saw what i wrote on FF.net heheheheheheh >D.
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From FaeChild on January 14, 2013
I'm not usually a big Dramione fan, but I think you just converted me. Because its not like all the other Dramione fics out there, with Hermione and Draco falling 'madly in love with each other' after only a couple of chapter. This is happening just the way it would in RL... The two being brought together by a mutual interest in something and then denying any feelings they might be beginning to have for each other and so on and so forth. I like that your fic doesn't have a lot of type-o's either, because even if the story was good that would have put me off. I really really really look forward to your next chapter, I can't wait to see how you bring them back together after this one!
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From ANON - Aranel on January 14, 2013
Oh yes! Dark Harry. I should be scared but I'm kinda wishing for dubious consent that I know will never happen. Oh poor hermione, and the things she must live through in my mind. Now that you mention it, Draco was being a bit of an idiot. But I feel I understand him a bit more than hermione. Poor wee lamb is afraid of rejection. Just wanna smoosh him. Oh emotionally unstable Harry, how you rustle my jimmies. Gotta love him.
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From ANON - Siona on January 14, 2013
Thanks for the update!
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