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By : PrettyDesdemona

From ANON - Cat on January 14, 2013
So I think I may hate Harry. Damn him lol. Hopefully he'll not be so glum soon because I really want Hermione to step back from herself and realize she can be happy even in a shitty situation. I will say what I said before-Hermione should somehow get Narcissa free; however, now its not just to help the plot with Draco but because Lucius is an ass who deserves a worse fate than rotting in Azkaban. I'm glad you liked my tiedye reference it would be amazingly awesome and super trippy to see your own magic-well if you had it which common would be amazing in and of itself. I feel so bad for Draco in all of this, he's really just trying to be there for her and shes too wrapped up in the bad. When he said Ron must have been a saint I wanted to slap him even though he didn't know how shite Ron is. He needs to find a way to knock some sense into her before she ends up in the mental ward. Can't wait to read what happens next!
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From ANON - Aranel on January 13, 2013
Huzzah!! Specially ordered humpinh just for me!! More!!
Oh gawd my big fear is there. Highly unstable Harry. Ain't nobody got time for that. I just know it would ruin her if he did something to her...I mean I would like it. I take my Harry like I take my coffee, black. But it would just break hermione. Oh my glob why couldn't she just talk to Draco baby?!? Always internalizing! Well, wouldn't like her any other way. Gotta say, I'm loving the way you're painting this post war universe. It's always hard to decide how to draw out that world after the war, for the sake of the story should they move on or should they be lost and for how long should they trudge through the mud. You're doing an epic job. Two chapters in one day! Thanks Santa!! I'll be good this year so...can I has more humping please?
Oh gawd I don't even wanna think about Ron...
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From Talented_Mrs_Lupin on January 13, 2013
AH! i feel as if its 2 steps forward and 4 steps back! DAMN HARRY POTTER! KILL HIM...okay okay i know that wouldn't help at all and i love him too much for him to croak. Hermione has to have SOME pull with the ministry though right? She is a war hero and HERMIONE FREAKEN GRANGER, she could probably get Narcissa free, i would like to see that happen. Poor Draco!
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From LadyAngelEuropas on January 13, 2013
This is one of the best Dramione stories I have ever read. I really like that you were able to make their relationship realistic, with all the struggles they would have to work through. The dynamics with Harry are also very interesting and your portrayal of the characters fits them perfectly. Your original characters are so well built and interesting and fit right into Harry Potter's world. I am very impressed with you writing style ans story and I can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - Siona_the_green on January 12, 2013
When are you going to update?!?? it seems like its been ages!!
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From ANON - PRETTYDESDEMONA on January 07, 2013
PLEASE READ!
I hope some of you get to see this as it's the only fucking way I could figure out to communicate with you (can you tell I'm a bit frustrated?). I wanted to let everyone know that AFF.net has been glitching and not letting me post new chapters. I've tried everything to fix it but no dice. SO chapter 23 can be seen only on FF.net at the moment and I'll be posting chapter 24 in the next day or so. Really sorry guys.
You can find this story under the same name and pen name on FF.net.
Thanks!
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From Siona_the_Green on January 06, 2013
This was fabulous! I really love how you are slowly drawing draco and hermione together. It's so realistic and sweet. It makes me reconsider how sloppily I threw my own story together and a great example of how I can fix it :)
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From ANON - Aranel on January 04, 2013
Is it horrible that I want to believe the dry humping was just for me? A little gift to satisfy my sick needs? I love how you are wording hermione's overworked and overcomplicated mind. Draco is being such a patient love, I just wanna hug him. Darn that Issie (don't know why but I've started calling her that), butting in at a very lovely part. Guess it had to happen...lest they go mad and screw hard, sloppy, and embarrassingly satisfied on only one side of the coin. Would have been cute though, they always paint Draco as some sex god. Really, when in the world would be have had time for that? Its nice to see him inexperienced and scared and totally in love for the first time. Guys falling in love is so alien to me, I love to see it written well.
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From ANON - kateofallpeople on January 03, 2013
Let me tell you something.

I very rarely venture off of FFnet. Why? Because I just do. It's where I started, and I have found many good stories on there. Today, however, a quick search of my usual parameters (Draco/Hermione, Romance and either Hurt/Comfort or Angst or Drama, Rated T or M, and a preliminary read of a first chapter that almost always results in "Oh dear god I cannot read another sentence of this shit") revealed that I may have dried up my pool of choices to read on FFnet. I googled Adult Fan Fiction, looking for something with a bit darker theme but some humor, well-written, etc.

Your fic was the first one I clicked on, on this site, and I am damn glad I did. I love it. Your portrayal of Draco and Hermione both is spot on - his open, braggart-ly way of first announcing his changed allegiances to his reluctant way of sharing real details and actually opening up. Her raw, all-consuming rage and depression to her resignation of control, at points. I LOVE what you've done with it all. As a fellow writer it gives me great hope to read something that I enjoy thoroughly and then to see similar pacing and style to my own, because that's what's GOOD. My only disappointment with this story was that it is not yet finished - and a quick look at publish and update dates revealed why. It's still in progress! Well, that's good, at least I didn't stumble upon an amazing, half-finished and then abandoned fic as I have done before.

I'd love to talk to you more about a few elements and if you might let me borrow a few for upcoming stories, as I do find myself trapped underneath a massive writer's block. Eagerly awaiting your next update.
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From ANON - dracolover911 on January 03, 2013
OMG OMG how dare you stop there!!!! Finally a story which isn't afraid to tweak stuff! Keep writing!!!
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From LadyChaos on January 03, 2013
Please don't ever stop writing. I am addicted to this story. Im only just about to start chapter 11 and I can't get enough. Im so enthralled that I actually made an account just to tell you how much I love your story. The first few chapters brought tears to my eyes because it really is so very realistic. I still get that sadness when I read some of the other chapters. You do such a great job of explaining the details with out getting boring like some authors tend to do. Your story feels much more natural than the other stories I have read. I can't wait to catch up and continue reading this fanfic! Ill probably review more later, but I just couldn't contain myself! :)
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From deathraven on January 02, 2013
HEHEHEHEHEH!!!!! YESSS!!!!!! THE KISSS IT FINALLY HAPPENED AND I LOOOOVED IT!!! This was such an amazing chapter!! I love the New years eve twist so awesome! AHH another chapter please!!! I can't wait to see what happens when they take the potion!! So excited please update soon!!!
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From ANON - SillyGreenEyes on January 02, 2013
I was bouncing in my seat when I saw your latest chapter up. The bouncy-ness increased and little girly squeals came pour out when I read the last bit of the chapter. YAY THEY KISSED! Which has left me with a smile that won't go away! I love reading your story! It's fabulous!
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From ANON - Ariisha on January 02, 2013
Your story is my reason for living.
Just so you know...
Best thing I've read on this website since 2007.
You are incredible.
Thanks,
Ariisha
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From ANON - Aranel on January 02, 2013
Ah, the kiss, finally. And she let it happen!! Hermione, what's gottin into you! Love it. So happy to see this chapter, love Draco in muggle England. He is so cute when he is vunerable. Just wanna gobble him up! Oh I can't wait for more snogging and possible humping and oh god the magic induced shagging!...I have a problem...hope you feel up to replying soon, hope everything's alright in the neighborhood.
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