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By : PrettyDesdemona

From pepperdoc on December 13, 2012
You know... I check to see if there is a new chapter... like hourly. This is such a wonderful story, you are a really excellent writer. Anyway, the point of all this gushing is to thank you for introducing Ani DiFranco to me. Never heard of the lady until I started reading this, looked her up, and fell madly in love with her lyrics... thanks! :)
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From ANON - dh_reader on December 13, 2012
You're back! Last time I checked, I couldn't access the story. I was so afraid I wouldn't be able to read this again.

About this chapter: "phew, Hermione is coming back! Yeah!" lol
I like what we learn about the Dividing Lines and I'm asking myself the same question as Hermione: why was it banned? This actually makes me think of a fantasy novel I read about ancient kind of magic using sex and blood, just like what is described here (don't remember the title of that book though). Anyway, I don't feel too confused about this plot thanks to that and, in the end, it makes sense. Magic can't have always been about wands and such.

I'm dreading one thing: being curious is sane BUT has its limits. I'm afraid Hermione doesn't know them. I really don't want her to try the spells and potions here. Call me prude but I'd be a little disappointed if her first sexual encounter with Draco was only to gain power - it can be more acceptable if it was to help someone though. For me, it would just be too easy to say that whatever the 2 of them feel when they have sex, it was because of a spell or something. Just too easy and I don't want to imagine Hermione as a power-greedy bitch. She can be a bitch if she wants - well, she was more than once close to it in the past chapters lol - but I don't know if I'll like seeing this side of her personality.
I'm writing that but I already know that whatever you have in store for us, I'll still follow you since I can't help being drawn to the way you write and the way you portray our favourite characters.

To finish, I just have a 'little' question: will we have news about Harry and Ron too? I love the Golden Trio as a whole. True, Hermione has now a new circle but aren't Harry and Ron the ones who used to be the closest to her, her very first tovarasi in a lot of ways? I just hope Harry and Ron won't be forgotten in the process of her getting better, learning to know the members of her actual tovarasi and getting closer to Draco. In most of Dramione fanfictions that I read, Harry and Ron are alienated in order for Hermione to get close to Draco. I don't hate it but being an addict to the original series, it's sometimes hard for me to read a story dealing with the Golden Trio being estranged.
I have to precise: this is my own personal opinion, don't change what you planned because of me. As I said, I'll follow your lead even if I don't entirely like what you write. I'm already too immersed in the story to stop reading just because one or two things don't go as I wish they would.
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From ANON - carly on December 13, 2012
What I do is go to schools and discuss relationships and authority and bullying. We encourage students to talk to us about what happens around them so we can assure them that these things happen all the time and are totally normal. A lot of times, in our youth, we think that the things we are experiencing make us weird or different when really, everyone is going through the same thing. I'd like to talk to the counselors we work with to see if they have some sort of support group or if they'd be interested in implementing one.

What's this? Civility between Draco and Hermione?! Can it be!? I can't wait to read more!
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From ANON - Kain on December 12, 2012

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From two-Five-One on December 12, 2012
uh oh. slippery slope she's on. but i can't lie i'm intrigued as well.
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From deathraven on December 12, 2012
AHHHHH ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!! This chapter is great, I love where you are going with this, I love my goddess fiction!! What a great idea about dividing lines and what power you can get from them, ohhh make her powerful ohh do it plllllllease heheheh **maniacal laugh!! powerful but good, with draco as a mate ahhh loving where youre headed or where it looks like your headed, i don't know but i like it!! update sooon!! pretty please with sugar on top!!
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From two-Five-One on December 11, 2012
wow! i looooove this story! is there anyway I could keep track of it so i can read all the updates? I'm so intrigued? You rock!
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From ANON - Carly on December 10, 2012
Again, just stunning! I am so excited to keep reading to know how Draco and Hermione might work through their incredible differences. The tovarsi is a great concept. Actually, I work alongside local students once a week and that is an excellent way to build compassion for one another. I wish all teachers were more like Teodora!
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From ANON - dh_reader on December 09, 2012
Okay, now I understand why you said we were going to hate her. I don't precisely hate her here but indeed, she behaved like one childish girl! Draco & her were going somewhere after their little talk at the beginning and now it's ruined... or is it?
I'm kind of happy he let that out of his chest. Besides, she asked for it, didn't she?
I'm quite sad to know what happened to Draco's mom. Who made that testimony? I guess that's another mystery to solve in your story!

So, that's why Draco got so ill? Just like Hermione, I wonder what he saw exactly while in her head. You didn't answer all the questions, you tricky writer!

The second part of the chapter made me laugh, especially the end! I can't believe Malfoy still wanted to save her but that's good. Good boy, good boy. *patting his head* And thanks to that, we're getting closer and closer to resolving the mystery of the Dividing Line. *squealing* lol

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From ANON - B on December 09, 2012
Definitely the best chapter so far. I love the fact that Hermione is having conflicting thoughts. Giving Draco a human side to her in that fashion seems very fitting.
It's almost as if her thoughts are betraying her former beliefs in him. Is this due to the groups union? Is it slowly bringing them closer without them realizing it? Is it possible that the magic in the group is creating a bond between them?

Anyway, great chapter. I'm glad Hermione is one step closer to a book and that it gives reasons to have more of Draco in the chapters. I can't wait to see where this dividing lines plot is going...

Hope to read more soon!
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From ANON - tori on December 09, 2012
Let me fill us with Strife and discord
remembering day of old
staring in the mirror I see myself
I see you in me, we see yesterday
You Shadows lurking, me shrinking from madness
Monsters my allies my power my weakness
come and rip the line asunder
Till the time comes and we hold hands
We ache and bleed for better days

Hiyo my pretty writer I send you happy tidings and greetings on this wonderful day. Can we start off and say that my words of poetry is something I have always elected in so when my words flowed and wanted to express themselves and I let it flow and I glad you liked it. The heart of this story is with within the words and characters you weave and the situations they cohere to, you bend them and they bend back and it flows. And yet I feel this chapter was missing something, it felt almost rushed but oddly enough it felt to get a couple of good points across, but I have this feeling that something is missing. When we see the world through your words you manage to convey a certain detail or a fact or even a closer look into the minds of what is happening, or some detail you have woven that we would have better insight into. Weather it was hermoine or draco or even ginny or the others there was an attention that was grasped, an interaction that gave more and added to the plot and story. That was hard to write because I think I'm wrong and a bad review and I don't ever like to tell someone how to do something because your creative freedom is what I like best about your work, and that you are able to think the way you do. Your not normal, your you and always remember that your work is just that your work. By the way very clever of putting yourself in the chapter but it felt I don't know cheap, like a quickie, you felt hesitant, if that even sounds right, or was that just a filler. All in all everything you do everything you write is a plan well thought out and considered.

Tori

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From ANON - Kain on December 09, 2012
"You'd have to get used to that now that there's no more care packages from mummy. *

"That was a comment worthy of the Dark Lord."*

"Fuck you."*

corrections from previous review, don't know why they came out looking all funky.

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From ANON - Kain on December 09, 2012
"You�d have to get used to that now that there�s no more care packages from mummy.�

.....first thoughts when reading that line:"oh snap!!! better gets some ice for that burn malfoy lol"

...then the full implications hit me and i felt like a jackass. THAT was a low blow to end all low blows. The best way to hurt and piss off a mommas boy( and lets not lie to ourselves...Draco loves his mummy lots), go right for the jugular. And when Isobel said:

�That was a comment worthy of the Dark Lord.�

i totally thought for a second Hermione would turn the hellcat mode back on and respond with something like

"yea you would know seeing as how your family kissed the dark lords arse for so long"

but luckily she saw that she had gone to far. Although Malfoy gave as good as he got and called her out on her Moral Myopia(love TV tropes) and that it wasn't only the light that lost loved ones and even if she couldn't forgive those who were guilty she could at least have a 'little' empathy for the ones left behind. War creates scars on both ends and the monsters that the light side stopped did have loved ones and while they got what they had coming to them for aiding a madman, NO ONE has the right to judge those left behind, hate them privately all you want but practice what you preach and don't rub their faces in the mud and condemn them. This right here is the Grey area you mentioned. Both Draco and Hermione stepped over a line and were looking to hurt the other, albeit unintentionally from Hermione's end and they needed those day's apart to cool down.

I honestly didn't think the tovarasi's bond would have progressed so quickly and thought that there would be a few more bumps along the way but aside from Draco and Hermione they all seem to be making an effort to understand each other. And although i am a lover of conflict and internal strife....i actually enjoy the pace at which they are uniting. Did I also mention how much of a trip it is that GINNY freaking WEASLEY is adapting quicker than Hermione in that she seems to have gotten over most of her dislike/hatred for the Slytherin tovarasi when not even a couple chapters ago she scoffed at the idea of it ever happening and showed open disdain for Blaise and i am sure didn't think to fondly of Isobel. Girl has come a long way in a short time.

And speaking of Isobel, any chance of her becoming a bit more centric? Like Draco she is someone who had ties to the dark lord as her father was a death eater and it would be interesting to see how much of their views she actually bought or if she was just going through the motions to please her family and to stay safe. Beyond Draco/Hermione and Ginny she has my interest piqued the most. I have also been re-reading the books and i should have said this a few chapters ago but.....doesn't it just warm your heart that Luna, the supposed school weirdo,bully magnet who had spent several months locked in a dungeon and possibly tortured....does not have a single hateful bone in her body. Anyone else would have cracked but that girl just has the 'gives no fucks what people say or think about her' type of mentality and next to Neville the single nicest person in Canon. Every scene she is in..she's just NICE.

Loved seeing Draco playing the hero even when he didn't need to and getting the last word in with

�Fuck you.�

Malfoy is still Malfoy till the the end lol and it was nice to see Hermione just laugh it off.

You continue to produce top line art.

oooh boy this was a long one......

P.S I did NOT mean for this review to drag on this long.

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From ANON - chester25 on December 09, 2012
I really love this story! I check daily to read the new chapters. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Tori on December 08, 2012

O children, let out the hate and let it burn like cinders
Let it wither and turn to ash
as the blood of war harm the best of us.
Let madness take you to a dark place
O comrades O children peace be with you

Ho hum my good writer am I impressed. I made that just for you, and your story, I love the energy, the passion the, the person flaws as each person takes the time to look at each other and find themselves in dawning times, a new they are born. I want to be honest your story is like a drug to me I love your style your reinforcement of what you write. Everything you say is backed up by a truth or fact, ever detail has merit. Every choice is consider you stick to your guns I see your hesitation but continue there's nothing you don't say or write without facts.
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