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By : PrettyDesdemona

From ANON - anaidra on February 28, 2013
OMG!!! What the... I cant believe what is happening. Oh Draco, do something... take things in your hands and finally do something to make your life and future better.
You know sometimes I just wanted to scream and cry for Draco and Hermione while I was reading. Cant wait to see what else is there for them. Hopefully, they will make up in the end! :)
Look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Aranel on February 28, 2013
Jeez, things are getting dangerous now. I don't know how they are going to do this! I'm on the edge of my seat woman, don't leave me here too long. Oh Harry, the adventure never really ends for you.
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From kadajclone on February 28, 2013
Alright, no Bullshit this time, this will seriously be a short review as I have work in a bit.

My feels for this chapter:

1. On the outside: http://img191.imageshack.us/img191/1697/pdkqnc1325823263.jpg

2. On the inside: http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lt33771vrj1qjwwfh.gif

I loved the re-bonding of Hermione and Isobel or 'Hermisobel'. In my opinion Isobel has gone through the most character development than anyone else in this story and what makes that so impressive is that it was ALL from someone else s POV. The reason I give this to her and not Draco is because unlike him she has stuck to her guns and has not reverted back to her old self. Hermione's thoughts on them both this chapter perfectly described them. Draco made all the pretty speeches and made nice with people and apologized for being a douchenozzle.........but only because he thought it was the opportune moment to do that and did not have full conviction in his words. As I said before he is a silver tongued devil but actions reveal true intent he while he talked the talk he most certainly could not walk the walk. in the end he turned out more like his father than even he may believe, which is just tragic. Isobel on the other hand didn't make any fancy speeches, did not apologize for shit that was not her fault but was still given shit and spat upon until the point where she wanted to die.....and instead of going out by going back to her old self and insulting Hermione before she went to kill herself...she treated her like a friend and said thank you and goodbye,she maintained her change to the very end. She has been to the other side now and seen just how she perhaps used to treat people and has grown from her experiences and isn't just putting on a show to please people. Draco 'needs' the worlds validation that he has changed for the better even if he knows it's false..........Isobel only needs Hermione.

ahem...now that the sob fest is done,HOLY shit Harrymort, Hermione caught him with his pants down last time, now he is ready for her. He practically H4XED her god mode with his uber shield. Hope Ginny is not too hurt. At this point though even if Hermione does manage t save Harry, his reputation is all but in shambles and even though it was Voldy pulling the strings, it was still done with his body and his is the face that people who have been hurt are going to remember even if they know the truth.

-waits patiently for next chapter-
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From ANON - tabitoo on February 28, 2013
Oh no, Harry is much more powerful than her. I think it's time to add Draco into the mix.some
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From ANON - floispez on February 27, 2013
Is it normal to be this disappointed when the chapter is over so soon? Why must you do this to me? D:
I honestly love your story so much.
haha its so full of angst and greatly written
you have talent and I'm glad we can enjoy it
Please keep up the amazing writting!
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From ANON - MegWebs94 on February 27, 2013
OMG. Your story has me up until 3:30 I'm the morning just so I can read it! This is quite honestly one of the best stories I've read in a very long time. I really hope you update really really soon!
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From ANON - lisha on February 24, 2013
Well as long my baby Draco is happy at the end then I'm happy too haha.
P.s you should make your chapters longer. The cliff hangers destroy me. :-( x
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From kadajclone on February 24, 2013
Green_Eyed_Mist, if you, me and Desdemona ever went out drinking together....I can assure you that we would put the whole plot of the movie the hangover to shame with our antics. The world is simply not ready for such destruction. The last time I tried to go beast mode with my liquor.......I woke up in a monastery in Tibet having lost 8 weeks of my life with a ring on my finger, my hair dyed a beautiful shade of blue, 623 missed calls all from someone with the alias of "frisky dingo" asking 'where the drop was supposed to happen' and various illegal things and according to a blood soaked note in my left pocket(the entire right half of my jeans were gone) someone would quote, "fuck my world up" if I ever returned to Spain. To give you a scope on just how blitzed and how out of my comfort zone I was...........I live in California. And just the other day some Russian chick who looked like someone straight out of the movie hostel came by my house asking if I could "cut the shit" and just hand over what I took. as of this moment I still have no idea as too what I took but apparently short term memory loss is not a good excuse with these people and I am currently on the run even as I type this from a Starbucks in Canada that has some pretty smooth Wi FI and the service here is too.....ah shit they found me AND the bitch looks even more pissed than last time I gave them the slip. What is the last time you ask? well I gotta make this quick since they are literally three tables away from me and this chick looks ready to pounce on me. So their I was in the local Tattoo parlor laying low when Tito, man giving the tattoo's catches a bullet right in the dicdnfsdlkfnsdsnmlkfsnmklsfnmlkvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvv
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From Green_Eyed_Aunt on February 24, 2013
Phew! INTENSE! While impatiently awaiting the next chapter, a thought comes to mind... 'I would love to go drinking with PrettyDesdemona and Kain. That would be a RIOT!'

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From ANON - Bogarto on February 24, 2013
Gah, why does Draco have to keep moving further and further from the better man that he had become!? We have Hermione giving him opening after opening to redeem himself and he is just ignoring them! Then she goes all goddess and flicks away a killing curse like it was a musquito, saving his life in spite of his stupidity! That all happens and he reverts even more back to the arrogant, stupid boy of his past!? Aaaaahhhhhhh!!!!

My only hope now is that you are building up a complete breakdown for Draco. Perhaps he needs to lose any and all love and respect from Hermione before he will wake up and become a man. Then maybe that can happen when he is needed most and he can actually prove his loyalty and return the favor to save her. At this point with his regression I just can't see how they can end up together in the long run without a dramatic, powerful event to bring them back. I really hope that can happen since my hopeless romantic side is never happy if love doesn't win out in the end!

Great writing as always!
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From ANON - tabitoo on February 24, 2013
Oh no, Ginny! I was getting worried about her and how she was feeling about all of this. I hope Ron and Hermione get back together though I think Draco will grow from all of this.
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From kadajclone on February 24, 2013
Once again this one will sadly be a short review.

Holy

Freaking

Frog legs

Shit got real in this chapter, what with Hermione going all sailor freaking moon on Voldemort and jacking him up with love lol. Harry can brag to his kids that he reflected the killing curse back due to the love of his mother.........Hermione -do not fuck with me- Granger absorbed that shit like it was nothing and turned it into love. While I initially feared she would get some massive power up I must say this was tastefully done and when ya stop to think about it, absolutely necessary. Voldemort may be using a different body, but it is still fucking VOLDEMORT. They barely managed to put his ass down last time and at that time they had YEARS of Dumbledore's pre planning/scheming along with a FUCK TON of luck and the slim assumption that Harry would not only last till after all of the other Horocrux's were destroyed but manage to come back from the dead and Voldemort's wand would fuck him over and Harry would get the winning shot.

-sigh- and once again...Draco's mouth gets him knee deep in even more shit lol. Boy needs a good slapping and then a hug. His parents set him up for failure, that kid cannot function like other people. It's like douche is coded matrix style into his very dna and I get the odd feeling he was expecting Ron to fuck him up after his last comment and wasn't expecting:

"Ron took a deep breath and stared back at Draco head on.
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From ANON - Aranel on February 24, 2013
Crap, you found me out. On the Internet, nobody knows you're a awkward black chick addicted to fanfiction (of the naughty variety). But you and all your wonder found me out. I think I love you. And I do! I scream at my phone at two in the morning when I should be working on my projects for paying clients, I laugh and sob a bit and swoon over Zabini and evil Harry (whom, by the way, you have turned into a crying bitch which I love and hate and love. Love a crying Harry, love an angry rough Harry even more, can't stand weak whiney Harry).
Oh lawdie what has Ginny gone off and done now!? WTF DRACO!!!! I love that quick tongue of his but he is a fucking idiot when he is cruel. It is only after he shatters everything around him and his feet are bleeding does he realize that it can't be fixed with "I'm sorry". Now how will he get hermione back...anything to piss off a Weasley, which I kinda understand...for horrible reasons.
Now as I have never said "oh no he didn't grrrl" in my life, I will reserve them for the final chapter. Shock me woman!
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From ANON - Trista on February 23, 2013
Long time listener, first time caller. Lol. sorry. I had to.
I just have to say, you have given something to this world that I dare say is more brilliant than stars. I have not, in all my years of reading fan-fiction, been as addicted to a story as I am this one. Your mastery of language and prose is unprecedented in the sad state of stereotypical fan writings being produced right now, and the story itself is certainly nothing close to stereotypical. I have been reading this since the day you posted Chapter Six. That was when I stumbled onto this piece of art. I wept. I felt such a deep sorrow because you wrote Hermione's pain so realistically and in a manner that made sense for the aftermath of the war, that I felt a reflection of my own deep-seated turmoil. I understood what she felt because I had felt something just as deep and harrowing. Not many writers are capable of that. I read your words as if they were what brought me air to breathe. I bookmarked this story.This in itself is a miracle, as I am the girl that begins to read a story and, if it is incomplete, will most likely forget it after I navigate away. I didn't want to lose this. So I checked every day for new chapters and devoured them as you posted them. And after every chapter, I hovered over the review button. But I'm just not that girl. Sometimes, I will leave a review after I finish a piece in its entirety, but never during. You have invoked my desire to tell you that You amaze me. This story, this legend, is so remarkably enchanting and parallel to how I feel the immediate reaction to the Second Wizarding War would be. You have somehow taken all of the despair and anger and futility and guilt of being a survivor and made it seem as truly insurmountable and survivable as it really is, and placed that into somebody else's fictional characters while still keeping the basic nature of those characters intact. That has to be magic.
Now the story, the twists, how broken Harry is. I can't get enough. I anticipate these final chapters with baited breath.
I'll work on that radio silence for the future.
And thank you. I haven't loved a story like this in a long time. I missed it.
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From DeliriousMuse on February 23, 2013
Desdemona,

I'm no good at this reviewing thing. Wonderful chapter. I have a big soft spot for Draco, so I can't take this. LOL
Ron reacted just how any man in his position would, I assume. I'd be pissed at Isobel too, and honestly, I wonder if she still has feelings for Draco and is just pretending to be seeing someone, but I digress... I am glad Hermione didn't just fold to Draco right away, but can't wait to see how it turns out, even if that means the two of them parting forever (though I hope not, sometimes love is that way.) I can't wait to see whence his love blooms if they do end up together, however. I do so know the hurt of loving more in a relationship. I often feel as though you're pulling thoughts and feelings right out of me.

I was reminded of Christina Perri's "distance" while reading about what Hermione saw when Draco thought of her and the general decline of their relationship prior.

"The sun is filling up the room
And I can hear you dreaming
Do you feel the way I do right now?
I wish we would just give up
Cause the best part is falling
Call it anything but love

And I will make sure to keep my distance
Say "I love you" when you're not listening
How long can we keep this up, up, up?

And please don't stand so close to me
I'm having trouble breathing
I'm afraid of what you'll see right now
I give you everything I am
All my broken heart beats
Until I know you understand"

I feel I can't really express myself well, unless it is through song; be it my own or someone else's. Sorry for a long review.
I was really happy yesterday to see you updated, as it was my birthday. I found that rather fitting as this story is the only thing I get excited for lately.

Patiently and Passionately,
D
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