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By : PrettyDesdemona

From kadajclone on February 18, 2013
Holy fuck....You know shit has hit the fan when

1. Hermione is 1 cunt hair away from blinding some fools.

2. She contemplates torture.

3. Ron Fucking Weasley goes to the defense of Draco Fucking Malfoy, now for this one hell froze over.

Granted Ron does not know that Hermione and Draco slept together for if he did he just might have egged her on lol. But anyway shows a real growth when HE is the one trying to get Hermione to calm her tits down. I enjoyed the show of loyalty from Isobel in regards to Draco and while I am not usually taking the sides of Slytherins, I will say this, to have fear is to be human, not everyone can play the Hero of the story and their is no shame in that. It just sucks that he admitted that he would go back if called, that is when the fear becomes a fucking problem and ya need to reel that shit in and grow a set. And it looks like Hermione knows that Theodora could get into a spot of trouble if her name is gets connected to the dividing lines magic. I honestly don't know how else to put what I wanna say down so instead I shall use these Gifs as a visual to my emotions.

Hermione Tearing into Draco and loosing her cool with her Girl Isobel:
http://25.media.tumblr.com/0c097b7a12cc70f05bd31ddc8500337c/tumblr_mi8lp49iSq1rktmoto1_500.gif

you is a cold momma Hermione lol.

When Hermione is dishing out orders and laying down the law to her Toravasi and showing that Voldy is on borrowed time, cause she is coming for that ass:
http://24.media.tumblr.com/36fda3cbf7db56bdda010ee45af7b456/tumblr_mif4490iAj1rdb06mo1_400.gif

When Ron stops Hermione from going full lioness on Draco sweet succulent ass......no homo btw :

http://24.media.tumblr.com/20537496cf36a680a656a6f489a148ff/tumblr_mhareb5wFO1s4u0cso1_400.gif

-waits patiently for the next chapter-

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From ANON - Bogarto on February 18, 2013
My second review of this story and I realized it is coming with very similar circumstances. You've setup a scenario where I am left thinking, "Please don't make bad_scenario_1 or bad_scenario_2 happen!" It also comes after another disagreement which again (at least IMO) has a tad too hasty reactions from one or both of them.

I'd really like to smack Draco around for being such a wimp. I could understand him being reluctant or even unable (unwilling to risk his family's lives) to revolt against the dark lord during the second war. In fact, it's his seemingly hopeless situation that I think myself and most other Dramione (or other Draco fics) fans cling to when believing he could seek redemption after the war. Now, with what seemingly is just a single horcrux and a possessed Harry, his first reaction is to throw in the towel and just assume that the world will collapse around him again!

Then to Hermione...deciding that based on Draco's first reaction and giving no time to sit back and actually think rationally, that Draco is just scum. I disagree with the notion that *this* Draco (IE VotF version) can not love or is not truly in love with Hermione. I will concede that Hermione's emotions have been haywire for the past months and that likely helped cause what I see as a knee jerk reaction. Still, I am saddened to see her turn so quickly against him and push all of the emotions and love they've developed away.

I think the suspense is added on since we only get to see Hermione's reactions. Again, I want to smack Draco myself, but I think there are probably a wide range of emotions going through him right now. His first thoughts are probably to his Mother, his Father (if maybe somewhat less), and I'd guess mostly to Hermione. He can probably envision many horrible things happening to all of them. Instead of thinking first how to stop it all from happening, he reverts to his past and thinks of despair first. Given time and especially given Hermione's influence on him over the past months I have no doubt he would come around.

So now to my begging:

Please don't make this ruin what they have built! Continuing obstacles are great and needed, but not a clean break!
Please please please don't make this somehow push Hermione back to Ron!

I know you probably have had the plot outline figured out for quite a while, but I figure just in case to beg against going a direction I would hate to see. Needless to say, great writing as usual!
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From DeliriousMuse on February 15, 2013
Desdemona,

I have been perusing this site for nearly 8 years. I have never made an account, however, due to the fact that writing fanfiction consumed much of my teen years, and I want to publish my own book before I resume this line of creative outflow. Two days ago; approximately 34 hours ago actually, I came across your story. I greatly admire your story telling ability, your grasp of emotional depth in writing, your expansion of characters' psyche and your general grasp of grammar and spelling on the whole. I have, through the years, come to expect short, sweet, OOC, grammar and literary error ridden, depth-lacking, stories from most of the writers on this site, not all, and to be honest, it fulfills the purpose when I peruse once every 4 months or so, to give me a smile, or a chuckle and a sweet feeling of recaptured youth(though I suppose I should say pubescence, being only 21.) You, with your true to life character development, proclivity for the use of reverentially over reverently, the innate writer's sentimentality I sense in you, your wonderful story telling, your love of good music... You have made me laugh, and cry, and FEEL so much in the past day and a half that I have lost count. You have warmed me. Renewed my love of fanfiction. You have reminded me of parts of myself I had been missing.

Because of this, you have broken my deference to becoming a member of this site. I had to thank you. I had to praise you. As a life-long fan of Ani Difranco, I feel the only way to laud you with praise is in a way only a writer and a fan would appreciate. "You are a rare bird, the kind I wouldn't even mind writing in the margins of my books." I do hope you grasp my feelings through use of this particular song.

You have a gift. I do hope you use it for original fiction as well.

Graciously(and impatiently awaiting the next installment),
Delirious Muse
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From Green_Eyed_Aunt on February 13, 2013
So, I've gotten completely addicted to this story. Your writing is fabulous. I introduced a friend to this story (she and I both devour books and loved the HP series) and she is now totally hooked as well! If you chose to write a story on your own and have it published, I would absolutely buy it!
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From ANON - Cat on February 11, 2013
I honestly laughed out loud when I read your response about Draco. Tho, to his credit at the end of this post I'd not have moved either after she said she needed to go to Ron. Your mind must be a wonderful place to come up with half off the stuff, though all I could think about with the attached magic was like a fake umbilical cord and I'm gonna say thats not what you were going for. Poor Hermione though not feeling his love for her, or understanding it if its there. But the thought of fucking while basically on a magical trippy experience sounds like a blast. As if Hermione didn't have enough going on now shes off to fight voldyshorts again, can you say huge distraction from helping herself?!?! I hope Draco decides to take a break from the jerk side for a bit and talk some sense into her.
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From ayVrrtak on February 10, 2013
Awesome story. I couldn't stop reading once I started. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Aranel on February 10, 2013
Oh my, voldy refuses to die. Oh Harry baby, he will never have a break will be?
I'm super excited that you are getting a trailer. I don't think any of the music I listen to would fit very well though. Maybe 'keep breathing' by Ingrid michealson.
Daddy issues are the main ingredient for great writers.
Hermione... How can you miss Ron!?! I guess he is what she knew and she didn't ever really grieve losing him. It was all very abrupt.
Can't wait for the next chapter, stuff is getting crazy.
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From kadajclone on February 10, 2013
This is too piggy back off of my last review for the new chapter. I had typed that everyone had assumed the worst about Harry without really looking outside the box too what might be wrong with him. It's like they always had an inkling in the back of there minds that he would go bad. Even the Auror's who at one time would have jumped through hoops lit aflame to get him to join them or even his own girlfriend who spent years crushing on him bad. And EVERYONE was telling Hermione things like:

"People change, Hermione"

"Potter is now a criminal, Hermione"

"He's not your best friend anymore, Hermione'

And she was on the edge of buying it. I understand that her Toravasi/teachers/and the Auror's were only looking out for her and all..........But outside of perhaps Minerva they know next to jack about the Trio's bond. Hell they know next to jack about Harry beyond the rumors and mystique. It is not something that could be defined as simply "friendship", All 3 have shown the willingness to die for the other with no regrets and the last time Harry was in danger of possession by Voldemort........It was thinking about Ron and Hermione that allowed him to fight back. If they had known Harry as well as she and Ron had they would have stopped for a moment and really considered whether something else was at work once the obvious theories did not pan out. Those 3 were at their happiest when they were together and once they broke apart, things start to go to hell. Ron's off globetrotting(damn ginger), Harry is locked away in his own body(his sexy sexy body........no homo) and Hermione( lets not try to kid ourselves.......Emma be one smoking babe) has no one to turn too who would truly understand the horror they went through trying to save the world. Draco is a close competitor for a fellow traumatized teen but at the end of the day he was kept relatively safe in comparison while the trio had to evade death on a daily bases. Despite being in the serpents den for a time, they were the serpents prey ALL the time.

Now rest assured, I still like Draco and adore the ensemble dark horse Isobel but his and the other Slytherins opinion of Harry are always going to be biased. They simply did not like each other and Harry is a big part of why they are now on the bottom of the social ladder and would be less inclined to think better of him despite their character development.
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From ANON - DionysianDust on February 10, 2013
I'm not entirely sure exactly what I want to say, other than the fact that I feel the need to congratulate you on an amazing piece of writing. The story and the character development is engaging, and your flow has beautifully captivating 'ups and downs' - sorry for the poor phrasing, but I read your entire story in one go, and it's kept me up into the early hours. Hermione's quoting of Molly with "you are beautiful and kind and clever and you will be okay" did not go unnoticed and I thought it was a very clever way to show her character development as you're going. Lastly, omigod, Voldemort's possessed Harry~! I'm curious, if and when Voldemort begins to replenish his lost Horcruxes, will it just continue to split his own soul, or will it have some rather horrid and detrimental affects on Harry's own soul as well? Looking forward to finding out, every chapter you produce is a delight and I'll be sure to check out anything else you ever write.
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From kadajclone on February 10, 2013
.............So here am, just chilling reading the new chapter, watching our little lion Hermione devour the sexy snake....when this comes across my eyes:

"Suddenly Draco didn
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From ANON - tabitoo on February 10, 2013
Best HP story on the net at the moment. Lurv it. I had a feeling that Draco didn't love Hermione. He cares for her and he wants to love her but he's not in love with her. I don't hate him for it I just think that he's not able to be in love with anyone at the moment. Poor Harry, I hope Hermione can save him.
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From ANONYMONSTER on February 09, 2013
You brought out a side of Hermione that I think a lot of girls can connect with. The dark, almost sinister effects of being underappreciated. It's something that's present in my own life, and you seem to make it worse at times, and at others it's as if it's gone. Your latest chapter made me want to curl up on my couch and cry all day. Your book has been MY distraction (as well as Ani Difranco- I took the time to search her up, and she's amazing), and it's also helped me realize that I really need to stop trying to distract myself, and just confront my problems... No amount amount of music, tea, and stories about Draco is going to make them disappear for good. I think that you would make an excellent novelist, and I hope that you persue it, or if you don't, that you continue to grace Fan Fiction with your stories.
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From ANON - anna on February 09, 2013
THIS IS THE ONLY Fanfiction I HAVE READ WHICH IS SOOOOO REALISTIC AND COMPLETELY CANON COMPLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! REALLY LOVING IT!!!
AMAZING WRITING, AMAZING GRAMMAR, AMAZING SIMILES AND METAPHORS AND AMAZING STORYLINE. AMAZING CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT. REALLY. AMAZING.
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From ANON - Cat on February 08, 2013
So is there a wizarding version of Dr. Drew? Because we need a serious intervention right now. I have pandora on while I read, and somehow it switched from my normal mix to Pink but thats besides the point, the song sober reminds me of Hermione. Just a thought since you said you were wondering about songs ha idk how it would work but it reminds me of where shes at. Anyway back to the story-One thing I can say about distractions is that if she keeps on relying on them instead of really working through things she'll end up desperate to find new ones and wont know who she is anymore without them. She seems to be at the brink of that point but has her water wings on in the form of Draco since they do talk just skim things over. I tend to revert to making jokes out of a bad situation because seeing people smile makes me think things are alright so I get why she's looking for ways to feel normal. I haven't been through a war, but I've pretty much been through hell and back and it truly does change you even if you deny it you only end up living a half life until you find a way to accept where you're at. This is where I feel like we need the wizarding Dr. Drew, someone to knock some sense into her thick head lol. Can't wait to see how you keep this going. As much as it sucks that she got to the point of faking it, you have to admit Draco would be a lovely distraction from most any situation.
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From ayVrrtak on February 07, 2013
Like what I've read so far. Although, I didn't think Nirvana had been around long enough to have recorded on vinyl records. Unless I misread what she was listening to the music with or you weren't talking about the American band that I'm familiar with.
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