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From ANON - bill560682 on December 12, 2012
so you know there was in fact a great deal of thought about the pairings of susan, hanna, collin and dennis with harry. susan and most likely hanna are from old families and only children. those families will need someone to carry on those names. so any children by susan would have the name bones and the same with hanna, collin and dennis not really having a family name as such can give birth to the potter and black heirs.

you really can not stick susan as a dom with any other pureblood otherwise you run into the question of who the kids are named after such as do we name them bones or longbottom.
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From ANON - bill560682 on December 11, 2012
since harry was not able to even hold off needing relief in the form of a wanking an was only a few hours at most into the train ride it would seem that he will likely need to shoot his load several times a day maybe as many as 4 or 5 times a day. he will likely need relief in the morning, at lunchtime, right after classes let out, once after dinner and once before bed. the problem with him needing relief that often is your rule about the subs have to come to him and offer the first 4 times. collin and dennis are not listed as dom or sub yet so harry could in fact ask them for blow jobs when ever he needs one and not be breaking the rules.
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From ANON - Emily on December 11, 2012
Please make Harry bigger then the other i love the story, very well written. guys...hes the alpha. He sud be bigger or it be wierd. But great story, very well written.
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From ANON - bill560682 on December 11, 2012
as far as harry's four mates go i would say collin, dennis, susan and hanna. an as far as draco goes and him hooking up with harry you would need to wait till at least christmas since draco is still likely whining 'that the ritual was wrong and that there is no way a malfoy can be a sub'. an since your rules say the sub has to make the first move then draco would likely have to end up in the hospital wing several times because of his own magic attacking him before he is even willing to think even in his own mind he may be a sub and needs a master or he will die. an one of the other things that keeps running threw draco's mind is the family motto of 'a malfoy bows to no one'.

you need to remember the things that brought ron, harry and granger together in cannon did not happen. there was no troll or sorcerers stone or heir of slytherin or sirius black the mass murderer out to kill harry or harry in the tri-wizard tournament or umbitch teaching defence or trip to the ministry to save sirius. harry was likely raised to be very smart but also to love a good prank and to love quittich. an those things would likely be the only things to connect the group ron being a quittich fan and granger being smart. so unless granger would be the one to give in then they have no chance because ron is to lazy to ever be smart.
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From ANON - bill560682 on December 11, 2012
well you had reviewers asking how muggleborns would handle this as well as their family. i think they would need to use compultion charms on the parents to get them to agree with this. of course that is only for those who have a strict upbringing be it the parent or the child. of course in most cases i think this thinking by the parent would have been spotted early on when they first found out about magic. strict religouse parents would have already been weeded out by having their memory changed to think their child died in a car crash and the child was told that their parents would likely kill them for being a witch or wizard so as a result you are only left with open minded muggleborn parents.

as far as ron and granger go oposites do not attract. those 2 have nothing in common other then being friends with harry. look at everybody you know who are dating or married they have things in common such as they both like football but both like different teams. granger would never settle down and be happy having molly weasley's life which would likely be the kind of girl ron would want. ron would want a woman who would have his dinner ready when he gets home and listens to him whine about the fact that if his boss only listened to him the company would be much better off. plus his wife would stay at home and raise his 9 kids. an if you are going to use the idea that the little rich girl dates the biker guy. ron is no bad boy biker guy and the little rich girl only dates mister biker so she can feel as thou she is a 'bad girl' but in the end the little rich girl ends up married to the bosses son. money marries money and brain marry brains. as far as the brain dead jock goes he marries the cheerleader gets hurt playing his sport and ends up working at a used car lot and moving to a trailor park and gets devorced within 5 years of losing his job playing sports. now since there were no horcluxes then there was no ron helped save her life so ron would likely keep on being an ass to her for at least the first year or 2 if not more. an harry is not the outcast that has no friends coming to hogwarts he is in cannon so does not need to keep forgiving ron for being an ass. so if anything harry would be friends with granger and ron would always try being a tag along till he of course stuck his foot in his mouth at which point harry would dump his sorry ass an a few weeks later ron would try to make up for being an ass which would only last a short while before he did it again.
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From ANON - bill560682 on December 11, 2012
now i know it is not likely but i think the 2 most likely to throw themselves at harry would be the creevey brothers. an yes i know in this story harry is not the boy who lived but he still has many things going for him such as looks, titles, money, and quittich which are several reasons for the creevey brothers to drool over harry. an of course the question of if the creevey brothers are doms or subs is meaningless when it comes to harry seeing as he is an alpha which means he rules over both doms and subs.

an yes i know the creevey brothers are not at the ritual but this event is likely to be headline news. so the creevey brothers would likely show up 3 hours early to the train ride to hogwarts hoping to get picked by harry to have sex with them. not to mention the fact they are in the same house as harry so it would not be uncommon for harry to wake up to getting a blow job from one of them. heck for all we know he may have already been getting morning blow jobs from them already.
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From ANON - Kain on December 09, 2012
-Applauds- loved it!
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From Woodlandspirit on December 09, 2012
Love the fast update! Nice chapter, hope you can update again soon.
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From ANON - tori on December 09, 2012
Hi I um ok I like this story and was wondering if hermoine and draco could be the mates to harry its just a thought and wonder, cause her being with ron sucks...great story and thanks for the writing
tori
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From djaddict on December 09, 2012
"The talk" was absolutely hysterical! Thought I was going to choke I laughed so hard.

Can't wait for more!
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From ANON - Blur on December 09, 2012
Very cool start! I think this story will be very entertaining! Lolz... Harry needs to find 4 mates! That is cool! But will he have a all male sub mates or mixtures? Keke I don mind if it is a mixture of subs. But will Draco be one of them? Lolz... Cannot imagine draco getting along with other subs. Unless he is not as spoilt in this story as others potray him. Anyway! I really like this story! Hope there will be surprises in every chapter you write! :)

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From moodysavage on December 09, 2012
Four! Draco for one... and with Snape already taken... I have no clue about the rest! Maybe Colin next year? That would be two.
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From bloodshound on December 09, 2012
okay, that just annoys me. it's a pet irk of mine. i'm assuming you meant shuddered rather than shuttered (meaning to pull a shutter across a window) do keep an eye on that, huh? still, far less typos this time out. well done.
anywho, at least har took their advice to heart. even if dear lav was more the toilet brush than the flower type atm, he's right in that she might calm down and he should never turn away a free service. still, crap. finding four mates that will be able to get along will be no easy task. it would crack me up if he got draco though that would be just asking for trouble. draco is far to pampered to share well.
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From Master_Kalla on December 09, 2012
Wonderful read!! May I suggest the Patil Twins in a Threesome with Harry?
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From xDAISUKIx on December 09, 2012
YESSSSS !!!!

Finally, a fellow Australian who writes Dom!Harry *virtual high five.

I'm looking forward to the uh... smuttier chapters. My own story is more story focused and as so i'm not allowed to write smut as of yet.... I SWEAR I WILL WRITE LOTS AND LOTS OF SMUT ONE DAY....just not yet....

Poop.

PLease write more. Dom!Harry is a bit more of a challenge to write...cus he's a GUY GUY and not Sub!Harry, which means HARRY with female mind and who has an awful tendency to sound like the author.

I love Snarry with Harry as the dom- think thats gonna happen here?
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