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Reviews for Peverell's Children

By : Zakaira
  • From ANON - Kuroi Karasu on July 29, 2014
    Hi,
    I've just finish this story, and now I feel that I need to write a review. I read that you never planed to finish it at this point, and to be honest, I'd prefer if you wouldn't. I'd prefer to read an unfinished story and wait if you'll have the opportunity to finish it properly than like this. I loved all the 36 chapters except the last bit of the 36th.
    Erm... maybe you could write in the preview as a warning that it won't be a happy end. :S
    Anyway... thank you for sharing. :)
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  • From ANON - csweaver on September 06, 2013
    I doubt you are still here I am continuing the story on aof and noticed something in your author notes. I have found that you are to eager to please your audience it comes across in your work as timid and weak. I have seen you have strong writing so this isn't really the case. if you want someone to wank then make them wank if you want to give sex scenes a break to start growing an actual bond between the two then do it. I will admit it drags a little more without the action but it is still your story to fluff up as you see fit. If you want to put Ron on Ice for being a royal prat do so (and I might have serious problems if he gets invited to the wedding after draco said no but again this is your story not mine) Ideas and brainstorming are great but your the one who makes the final decision not us. keep up the story.
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  • From ANON - Lily on June 15, 2013
    What!? Please for the love of god don't end this! Or at least do a sequel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! D:
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  • From ANON - Tolu on June 06, 2013
    Well, this was a terrible ending, regardless of what you have planned on another site. I wont follow you either. Fed Up! Is right, this isnt that good of a story to follow to another site. Harry accidentally raped Draco but he falls in love? Wow. It was rather bland and their fights are remarkably boring because all that happens is Draco bitches, Harry caves and then tries to make Draco love him.
    I tried to read the story and keep up to hope it got better, but in reality, this ending is likely better than your planned one.

    Feel free to not return to AFF.
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  • From ANON - blj.14 on June 05, 2013
    I'm a bit shell shocked,stunned. While I appreciate your giving this story an ending instead of just leaving it hanging,this chapter wasn't the answer. The abruptness alone was jarring but what you did to Harry... I truly hate this ending and don't accept it. Like you I abhor authors who begin then abandon stories. I respect you have reasons to leave this site,but you're 35 chapters in! Surely you could have stuck it out,unless you plan on 60+ chapters. Anyway,thanks for what you've written. My first thought when I came across your story was,how in the world can you accidentally rape someone? It's unfortunate to call it that because Harry believed he had a willing partner. I have never heard of AO3, and doesn't ff delete m rated stories?
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  • From ANON - Fed up! on June 05, 2013
    Oh rapture! Another writer that seems to think they are all that with a side of chips! No, I won't follow you to another site, no matter how much I like a story of yours. If you think so little of your readers that you're willing to pull this kind of stunt to them on one site, you're going to on another. You'll just find another excuse there to pull the same kind of stupid thing. It's not worth it so I can't be bothered to try. There are far better authors on this site that are most certainly worthy of being followed and me paying attention to what they write. You aren't one of them. The fact that this story is in serious need of a beta not to mention has a weak plot that makes little sense is bad enough but to just basically screw your readers over as a means for revenge because you're stomping off in a huff is a childish act if I ever saw one.

    No thank you.

    Have a nice life.

    Colour Me Disgusted
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on June 05, 2013
    This is a sucky ending, but I've read the other version of this story on Fanfiction.net and read your author's note from last time, so I understand why you are ending this version so soon, but it still sucks.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on June 04, 2013
    That is a horrible, sad, unfair ending!! If I had known I wouldn't have read this story. Not all have happy endings but I stay away from those that don't. Enough sadness in my own. The ending seemed quick and like Malfoy (I won't even call him Draco) was acting like a very spoiled brat! When Harry kills Voldemor & has all the power of the Boy who killed the dark lord then Draco will wish he stayed with him. And Draco will be a loser on the losing side bound for Azkaban. I bet he remembers Harry then. That's me wishful thinking. I'll bet Harry forgives the brat. The rest of your story was good. Just the end seemed kind of like you wanted it done with. Don't you love us anymore?
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on May 31, 2013
    Harry always seems to be trying so hard to be normal & fair! You gotta love him. So under appreciated. And Severus, Narcissa & even Draco seem so tight and sort of keeping Harry out of their little circle. I hope Draco shows Harry a lot of appreciation & love soon.
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  • From TalisRuadair on May 22, 2013
    I am still really loving this story. I hope that they have arrived to discuss the marriage contracts. Also wouldn't it be nice if they decided to stay there instead of Snape's quarters, but I doubt the likelihood of that one. Professor Snape on a beach...well I think you understand that unlikely situation. I'm sorry that I haven't reviewed in a while, but I've distracted lately. I look forward to your next update as always and I am happy to hear that your biopsy came back benign.
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on May 21, 2013
    Wonderful update! Why is Draco, Snape and Narcissa looking for Harry at midnight? And why is Draco willingly taking them to the Room of Requirement?
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  • From ANON - Diana on May 20, 2013
    Update soon!
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on May 19, 2013
    I didn't expect an update from you so soon. Thank you. Looks like Harry can kick ass the muggle way when he really wants to! Nice update.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on May 19, 2013
    Poor Harry and poor Draco! This should be a happy time in their lives. I'll bet Narcissa & Snape are going to try to cut Harry out of Draco's life. I hope he will catch on & so will Draco. I don't think I could stand the angst.
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