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Reviews for Yes, Master

By : Haydron
  • From ANON - anaidra on April 21, 2013
    Well, that was interesting ;). Cant wait for update. Hopefully, you will explain why Draco didnt want to let Hermione touch him and why he didnt touch her. Also, hope that they will talk (if possible :)) more to each other.... Anyway, look forward to reading more.
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  • From ANON - Selena Malfoy on April 20, 2013
    Whew! That was hot!! Not bad for Hermione's first time. Draco was surprisingly cognizant of her comfort (not actively participating in the event). Why couldn't he touch her? Or why can't she touch him? Is it simply because he thinks of her as a mudblood and beneath him? Or is there an underlying reason?
    Personally, I don't like the font you're using. It makes it difficult to read and, believe me, I read your chapters fast!! Please continue to update! xoxo SM
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  • From CU_Spacecowboy on April 18, 2013
    It's hard to read with the cursive font
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  • From pepperdoc on April 18, 2013
    Holy crispy crap!! It's Christmas!! No... Wait... It's April... right? Can't be Christmas... But... THREE new chapters!! YES!! Great story so far!!!
    What a weird dynamic Hermione and Draco have right now. Especially the last bit of chapter 7.... I'm sure someone else will point out what is weird about it, because I have no idea to explain what I am thinking... Anyway, great chapters! Thanks for updates! Gotta work on final papers now!
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  • From HeavyMist on April 18, 2013
    ok i thought of reviewing each chapter, but I kept on reading and clicking next ;) I am irked by Draco chaining her for her first time, jerk! lol I don't know how to explain it, but the sex scene , lacked an element on both their parts, passion was not in their reactions to one another, I felt them more on the clinical side of things, but this is my impression, so maybe the next time ( i hope there is a next time lol) they will start to open up to one another beyond the mechanical intercourse fit for 40 year maried couple lol . good chapter thank you.
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  • From HeavyMist on April 18, 2013
    I liked Draco's conflicting feelings in this chapter. you described his growing attraction towards our brilliant Hermione in a very subtle andconvincing way. Her allure is starting to weaken his defenses, slowly, which is the right way to go about it. good chapter what can I say. the dream , i think is kind of foreshadowing , hinting to future events? heehee I hope so. last thing, I found it a bit hard to read this chapter with the new font you have chosen, since i am one of those who read during lunchtime on their iphones. is it too much to ask for another easier to decipher style? thank you for the update :)
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  • From ANON - Joy on April 14, 2013
    I like master servant dramiones and I usually don't mind if Draco is a dick in the beginning. However, the degradation is a little hard to read- like him trying to make her eat off the floor. I suppose canon wise he'd probably do that or worse. Hope though there's not too many more chapters of mean Draco. Odd I don't mind non con, but the other acts of humiliation Draco inflicts on hermione in fan fiction turns my stomach.
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  • From pepperdoc on April 14, 2013
    Oh no!! Is Voldie going to show up?? Harry and Ron risking their precious sanity to go to Azkaban?? Hermione dripping all over Draco?? (that last one could be taken two *very* different ways, haha!) Oh, Bella, you are in for a little impromptu plastic surgery, I hope... If only Hermione could find a compatible wand....
    I like it. It makes me all giddy every time I see "Yes, Master" pop up. Which speaking of, she sure hasn't been calling him Master, has she? Although, I can see how easily it would turn into a very dark story quickly if Draco were to punish her every time she forgot to use it.
    Also, thanks! I was really worried ever since I wrote that 'unsolicited advice' that you may take it in a negative light... I'm really glad you didn't!! Love the story!
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  • From ANON - anaidra on April 14, 2013
    I like your story so far. I like the way you are describing the dark Draco :).
    Cant wait to know what will happen next. How will Draco and Hermiones errr relationship continue.
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  • From ANON - Selena Malfoy on April 13, 2013
    I really like this story so far! Thanks for the little bit about Harry and Ron...it gave done added context for me as to when this is taking place. I loved the interactions at the dinner table. What was Narcissa's motivation for trying to subdue Bellatrix? Pity for Hermione? Sympathy for Draco? Not wanting to be disturbed during dinner? Just a general question. I do like that Hermione, although starving, humiliated and beaten, still retains some of her inate fire when dealing with Draco's commands. Please continue to update...quickly! I can't wait to see what happens next! xoxo SM
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  • From HeavyMist on April 13, 2013
    Haydron,
    Intense Chapter, Draco is indeed vile in this one, and cruelly wickedly dark, but I like that you kept him in character despite his more than vicious treatment of our amazing Hermione.
    I hope you will let her have her moments of victory as well, small as they might be in her horrible circumstances, but she's resourceful, intelligent and knows how to pay him back.
    Very well written chapter, the suspense for me is going crescendo, I am eager to read how it is going to peak between these two
    Are you going to keep Draco as dark as he is now or are you slowly but steadily going to "rehabilitate" him ? hehe is he redeemable ? :)
    You are doing a wonderful job with this storyline. Thank you :)
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  • From ANON - hypergurl221 on April 13, 2013
    This story has me intrigued. i dont normally like reading seriously dark Draco, however i have hope that this story will make him loving in the end. upload more, the wait each day is killing me :P

    Hyper x
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  • From HeavyMist on April 12, 2013
    I like your writing style. You are nailing the dark side of Draco , as well as the conflicting emotions he is letting through, that is if I understood the last part of this chapter.
    Great job, I am anxious to read more. thank you for sharing.

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  • From pepperdoc on April 12, 2013
    Yay! Honorable mention! I love it! This story could amount to a lot of happiness for me! I always love it when Draco is so incredibly evil in the beginning but the light seduces him. I can see that seduction happening already!

    Can I offer unsolicited advice? I would love to see you work on your imagery and character analysis a bit. Sometimes it is unclear what the action is in each scene. For example, when Hermione begins crying, I was confused. So, in this scene she only uses her own voice to tell the reader what she is thinking, but it also might be helpful for her development as a character to have an interior monologue to justify her words.
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  • From pepperdoc on April 10, 2013
    I like it. Seems short though, by two parter do you mean two chapters? That would be nowhere near enough to satisfy me!!
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