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From ANON - margiere on June 21, 2013
Nooooo......you can't leave us just as Draco and Hermione get to have some sexy time again. Cliffhangers are so cruel. More strange wolves and quite a few of them were she-wolves? I hope these new players are messing up Voldermort's plans as much as they are throwing off Harry's and the gangs. Lupin was being very argumentative with Draco when he made it inside of the cottage. I wonder just how much of that was sleep deprivation and how much of it was him being distrustful of Draco's intention toward Hermione? I think Lupin see Hermione almost a daughter to him and no matter how much he knows Draco really cares for her he just can't let them get down like that. Most of the wizarding world seems to be like the Victorian Era for muggles. So sexy time might be difficult with old fashion, super hearing, pseudo-parental figures hanging around. Oh Grandma what big ears you have (laughing like a loon).

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From ANON - margiere on June 21, 2013
The Red Wolf certainly surprised the heck out of me. Now I'm wondering who in the world is his 'new father' and the lady who let him out of his cage? You have just amped up the story several notches with this new tidbit.

Thanks for explaining parts of Ron's reasoning for selling out everyone to Voldemort. He really has a serious inferiority complex with the world at large. How flawed is his mind set that he believe that Voldemort would be the means of making himself important? Makes me wonder if he wasn't caught who would be alive to think that Ron Weasley was an important man? Death Eaters would see him and coward and turncoat. His own family would most likely be killed. Even Greyback said he didn't want him. Draco had it right, a cursed life would be the only life for him.

Poor Harry. How much harder will this be for him? Who will he be able to completely trust now? His best friend and almost brother was willing to turn him over to Voldemort for nothing more than his own glory and the death of a school yard rival!

I can't wait to see what happens when the transformation is over. That little wolfie has a lot of explaining to do....hehe. I'm loving this.
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From ANON - margiere on June 17, 2013
HOT, Hot, Hot! This was a perfect introduction for Hermione into the BDSM lifestyle Draco prefers. In no way was it too graphic. One of my pet peeve is when writers make the first intimate encounter between Draco and Hermione overly sensational. These two are just beginning to find out how each other works and this chapter captured this beautifully.

I don't know if a whole chapter should be about Ron's interview. It is really about where you want the story to focus. But you can always add snippets into any of the other people who were in attendance POV. I think it is entirely plausible that Draco and Harry would talk candidly about it while out on their Horcrux hunts. And Lupin could speak of Ron's treachery to Hermione to help her come to grip with it. Even Arthur could speak to his family members about it. Ron's defection would have a multifaceted reaction to every member of the Order but none as much Harry and Hermione. I'm dying to find out why Ron sold Harry out. Wanting Hermione is one thing but is Ron really that obsessed with her that he doesn't see anything else?

The Dragon is too cool. I had feeling it was more than just a statue. I can't wait to find out what the newest dream is about. Also, what happened to Lucius? Was he sent back to Azkaban? Was he given the Kiss? Does this make Draco the permeate Head of the Malfoy House?
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From Draconis on June 16, 2013
it's rather amazing. I love it. can't wait to see where it goes! I would like to see the interview of Ronald. what a jerk lol. more lemons ate always good and there's no such thing as too graphic. keep it coming!
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From ANON - margiere on June 16, 2013
Whoa! There was a little bit of everything but the kitchen sink in this chapter. Ron, the rat-fink is unbelievable. He ultimately sold-out his entire family, the Order, Harry, and the English Wizarding World all for what, a woman who doesn't want him and would hate him if she found out! I can't believe he is that incredibly stupid. And that lame excuse for being gone 2 weeks, I know Ron is supposed to be this great strategist but that excuse is wild. Ron's own self inflated worth knows no bound. Voldermort should have given him a plan or something because Ron obviously thinks entirely to much of himself.

Now Draco's explanation to Hermione about his taste in pleasure was perfect. I don't know if it was intentional but it seems as soon as he crosses over the threshold of a bedroom he changes. Case in point the following morning when he woke Hermione up. He call her to task for not thanking him for the compliment. When talking to Hermione initially, he constantly touched her to reassure her. Hermione seem to unconsciously picked up on his dominance because she asked to be able to get dressed and did not tell Draco to leave so that she could get dressed.

I how the interview with Ron brings out the truth if not totally then enough for everyone to doubt his trustworthiness in the future so that no lives are inadvertently jeopardized.
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From ANON - margiere on June 12, 2013
I forgot to review last chapter please excuse my unintended mistake. I was so happy that you did not make Molly an overbearing harpy when it can to her conversation with Hermione. Although Molly loves her children and treats both Harry and Hermione as hers canon Molly was always quick to judge Hermione as the evil temptress when it came to the boys (Harry and Ron). Your portrayal was refreshing. Molly knows her children's good points and their flaws. She just want them happy.

Now this chapter (ch.9) wow. Harry is so perceptive when it comes to Hermione. He is a wonderful 'big brother' and protector. It just makes me wonder what is up with the whole not speaking to Ron thing?

Hermione's gift to Draco was perfect. I'm very curious about the Dragon being warm to the touch. It if belonged to Dumbledore than it is definately more than just a plain statue. Keep up the great work.
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From ANON - margiere on June 08, 2013
Snape's dialog was great. And the Auror timing was spot on, I thought it was hilarious that Draco pretended to being trying to hold in the truth. Hopefully this time Lucious will serve the full term he is sentenced too.

Hermione and Draco's breakfast conversation was delight full. Coffee better than Veritasium (laughing) too right. I glad Hermoine recognizes that Lupin and Harry are treating Draco different. And it seems as though Molly is on that path too. Good chapter!
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From ANON - margiere on June 04, 2013
Yeah...that was a great chapter. I personally don't know what you didn't like about the conversation between Draco and Lupin but thought it was terrific. Lupin got some very juicy details from Draco about his feelings and observations. Draco didn't take note of it yet but Lupin seems to have given Draco his approval to express his interest in Hermione. Hermione's dream at the beginning really thru me off at first. Who would have thought Hermione had so much unconscious passion. I can wait for the next chapter. I really hope Draco can avoid a major run in with his father until his birthday. Thank you for the update.
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From ANON - AtlanteanDiva on May 28, 2013
The first chapter was well written and interesting. You're prose are fluid, and each character's voice is distinctive.

You may want to post your fics on more than one site. I've noticed that some people who do so, so on here do better on other sites.
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From ANON - margiere on May 27, 2013
Great chapter. I loved the fact that both Snape and Lupin have decided to take care of Draco and get him thru the coming struggle. I'm so surprised that Hermione is so authoritative the chapter (Girl Power....smiling). I'm looking forward to the coming interview.
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From ANON - Gabby on May 27, 2013
I'm so excited to see where this goes! however it's really rather odd to not have Draco snarking off to Hermione.
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From orcadarwin on May 27, 2013
Still very intriguing story. I'm hooked now, I want to find out what happens with Draco.
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From orcadarwin on May 26, 2013
I'm impressed with this story. I hope you continue. I love your style of writing.
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From ANON - Gabby on May 25, 2013
oh please continue this...
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From ANON - margiere on May 25, 2013
Wonderful chapter. Harry's passionate defenseman of Draco' s character was amazing. It makes me wonder just how much Draco has gone through with the Order to garner that type of reaction. Hermione stated in her testimony that they had two years of war torn bliss with each other. That must have been two very explosive years. Both Draco and Hermione personalities are extremely stubborn but very vulnerable. Draco's weak spots seemed to be his family and his lack of a say in his own life. Hermione's weak spots spots are her insecurities and her family (both blood and adopted). Those two appear to not only have changed each other but those close too them as well. I hope you decide to continue with this story, I would love to read more about what is ahead for Draco and Hermione but also their friendship with Harry and what happened in the past to get them too this point.
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