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By : pepperdoc

From ANON - margiere on August 13, 2013
Wow....I think that chapter may have started a small forest fire behind my house! If taking a few extra days to handle RL get us a scene like that feel free to take as much time as you need for the remainder of the story (which I'm begging to be several dozen more chapters long).

RL gets the best of everyone it seems. The last chapter I failed to review as I planned. I was so surprised by Harry's supreme animosity toward Draco. I understood it in a way, Hermione had a similar response to see Draco again. But Harry had to have been briefed on the situation with Hermione while waiting to approval to travel. He acted as though he didn't care that Draco protected both Hermione and a school full of students and teachers. He really treated Hermione like she was a 16 year old who was clueless how the world works. And to blast her prior relationship to Draco like that...whoa that was crudely move. I was so happy when Hermione aired Harry's dirty laundry too. Just a reminder that we all are humans and he was no saint either (ok, that really sound lame to me so just forget what you just read).

Draco handled the situation with maturity and dignity. He proved in that one conversation just how much he has grown as an individual and a man. A lesser man could have taken the information aired before him and caused far more damage.

Now back to Hermione and Draco's 1st date. It was absolutely perfect. The environment was ideal for both of them to feel at ease. Neither one seems tense or anxious. I love Hermione's bouts of jealousy. She certainly has a nasty glare. And Draco seems to be a very observant man. Is that a good Dom treat or is that just Draco's natural given all that he has lived through?

I do hope you continue this story as there are still several question left open like, how in the world did a 15 year kid like Rowle get so powerful, was he acting alone,what is going on with Draco's business interest back in the UK, is Hermione going to teach at the Mission or act as assistant to the other professors, why the blatant disrespect from Al, the Potions Master and Landon, the DADA Professor? You do NOT have to answer any of these questions at all. I can wait for more to come, I was just letting you know that we are paying attention and adore what you have written.
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From ANON - Aranel on August 07, 2013
Oh you are dragging this out!
Loving the story so far. I've got a feeling that this isn't the last we've heard of out little neo-deatheater. Very concerned for this school and interested in the aspect of them having a priest on site. I know that is a sensitive topic potterwise and I'm kinda interested in how it would affect the students who are wizards and Christians. But since its all fictional, what the hay.
Harry on the scene always excites me, a good old fight between Draco and Harry over Hermione is just gold. Can't wait for more. These characters are delightful! So full of personality and passion!
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From ANON - Victoria on August 07, 2013
Another good chapter. The only thing that didn't ring true was Harry would revealing a very private aspect of Hermione's sexual history in front of Draco. But, Harry is a bit of an impulsive guy so maybe I can accept that it just slipped out. Still, seems like a topic he'd have kept between just the two of them in a private yet tense discussion -- maybe a conversation that Draco could have overheard accidentally so his awareness of Hermione's experimentation with dominance and submission became part of the story in that way. Oh, well. Not a big thing in a generally excellent story.
Such a disappointment that their steamy scene got interrupted. Looking forward to that continuing.
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From ErisNight on August 06, 2013
So i immediately got excited once I saw the title was "control". Sexy Dom Healer Draco FTW!

The whole "she's to come with me" reminded me of the ultimate pissing contest. If Draco is a Dom, wouldn't he not like some other man especially Harry trying to take what's his? But Harry's clear prejudice (As well as Draco's) Ten years later makes me shake my head lol, what did he fight a war for? Kudos to Hermione for sticking up for herself!

But AHHHHH Hermione is a sub! I like that! That was quite literally the best way to introduce the BDSM aspect into this. I bet you Draco was like "Praise Merlin" when he heard that ;)

But AWWW Draco being the voice of reason was NOT what i was expecting! Maybe he was in such an awesome mood because hearing about Hermione's past made him so damn happy he couldn't possibly think of arguing with Harry lol:)

But Harry is rather damn agressive isn't he...?? Gripping her arm tight and demanding answers... Bah Humbug! Go back to England! I was just liking him again too until Draco left them alone. But ultimately I was glad for Draco's explaination, it made Harry think twice about how he was treating him.

But all of that aside... here i am reading minding my own business when BAM Draco goes "
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From ANON - sheedy on August 04, 2013
Keep up the great work. I love it!
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From ANON - Victoria on August 03, 2013
This story continues to be a delight. It makes sense that Hermione would enjoy the anonymity of being away from the constant attention of the wizard community in England, but also makes sense that she would miss her friends if she stays there. Having Harry show up may make her choice to stay more difficult. I'm curious, if Draco bore no lingering ill will for Hermione, why would he show disdain for Harry? Or is it mostly a jealous reaction to Hermione kissing Harry on the cheek?
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From ANON - Guest on August 03, 2013
I'm really enjoying your story. It's an interesting idea. I just happened across the first nine chapters and will have my eye out for the rest. I don't usually review but you said you only had two, so...
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From ErisNight on August 02, 2013
Oh my heart just dropped...
GAHHH PLOT TWIST
I love Harry. I mean LOVE Harry but his sudden appearance in your fiction not so much lol! If too many people invade this cozy little world that Hermione and Draco have then she'll be more likely to go back home.
I was so freaking happy for them too ugh . "Star crossed lovers" exactly! I was loving the whole "let's give this a shot" conversation. It was very realistic and I could almost picture it.
BTW Luis working out... oh yea Hermione haha. I love that she still finds Anthony (YAY He's back!) and Luis attractive. I feel like any woman would and so i love that she's having those reactions.

Rose and her "Draconis" had me laughing, I loved that entire exchange between them. It was very playful however I'm glad Hermione told her to shut up when she was over reacting about the kiss lol. I was feeling the same way like Primrose do not make this awkward for them! All the UST is already killing me!!!

PLEASE Let this be a happy ending lol. Please let Harry be reasonable although from the sound of Draco's voice... I'm guessing not lol.
I mean maybe Draco is still carrying resentment that is unnecessary but I'm on his side all the way in this lol!

Another great chapter. Quite literally dying for the next so that I can see what happens!

Eris
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From ANON - margiere on August 02, 2013
This is a fantastic story. I started reading last night and could not stop reading. I love all of the new characters (Anthony sound delicious and so does Lt Benjamin Ptyalin). I'm blaming my sleep deprivation on your wonderful writing skills.

I find Draco's and Hermione's slow progression into a relationship beautiful. Their pace is realistic and full of sexy tension. Whenever they do get together its going to be soo good! One thing though, Hermione is very secure in acknowledging her submissive side. She mentioned her first experiences with 'Sir' and how good that arrangement was for her. Is she going to ask Draco if he has any preferences or kinks in a sexual/intimate relationship? Or does she just know Draco has it in him to be a Dom? He does not seem to like bragging at all (and I like that about him).

Why is the world is Draco have so much disdain for Harry still? Is it the same problem he had with Hermione when she first got to the Mission?

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From ErisNight on August 01, 2013
So I'm not gonna lie, I'm one of the more invested kind of readers and so when Draco was like "Oh, my dear, the things I would give to you". I nearly and very shamelessly creamed myself. Not in a gross actual way but in a That's too fucking hot to handle way.

My heart breaks over my cowboy lol... but with all the sexy deliciousness going on I think i'll survive. I like that your Hermione can be honest with her attraction to Draco. It makes every scenario that much sexier because the possibility of something happening is that much more poignant.

But then... right as I was getting into the super sexiness and Hermione was on the bed... BAM there comes Rowle.... You evil evil woman! *shakes fist*
But I'm glad Anthony was still alive, I've been wondering that they entire time. I mean in order to have a constant supply of polyjuice he needed to be alive but hey you never know.

But oh hot damn your ending for this chapter?? Three some!?? Super sweaty sex with the cowboy and Draco... lol well Hermione said it best "A girl can dream" ;}

I love this work sincerely and whole heartedly! I'm waiting with baited breath for the next installment!
Eris:)

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From ANON - Victoria on July 30, 2013
I love this story more with each chapter! Suspenseful, sizzling, and such an unusual setting for HP fanfiction. Fascinating at every turn. Please give us lots more soon.
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From ANON - Gracie on July 30, 2013
I'm sorry this is the first time I'm reply Im just not used to this site oter than to actually read stories haha

Actually this is the first ever review I've written on this site :)

I just wanted to say this is amazing! I absulotely love the storyline it's so original and keeps me wondering what could possibly be next.

Cannot wait to learn more :)

~gracie
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From ErisNight on July 29, 2013
Oh yes, I really love the whole "we're dating" thing as a ruse. It plays a two fold cover story and excuse for our protagonists to express how they feel openly. I really like the moments when they are discussing something and then they slip into romance mode just for the sake of characters like Anthony. Granted they don't know who is who, or if it's even safe but still it's a sweet thing you've got going on there.

I really like Primrose and Luis, I can't express why the OC's are catching me so much in this one, but I'm finding myself completely insatiable for more interactions with them.
Except my heart is breaking lol... what's up with Anthony's "strange grin" sounds pretty nefarious to me...
Oh my sweet cowboy! Lol and Draco's brief frown... I'm pretty sure Draco has had enough encounters with Anthony to know something was up. But at the same time, why would a bad guy that is trying to use stealth and disguises be sulking openly even if his plan didn't work. It seems like an amateur move on his part if he's Rowle...
Oh well He deserves to be caught!

I really liked the flow of this chapter and the little interactions between Hermione and Draco. Reading your fictions are such a nice reprieve from writing them lol.
Please update soon and let me return to your amazing world in Texas!

Eris
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From ANON - lemonade on July 20, 2013
curious as to who Rowle is now. I like that Draco seems a little twitterpated.
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From Trelweny on July 19, 2013
oh thank goodness it wasn't really Justin. Even though we know so little about him I was hoping it wasn't in his MO to change so much as to atack a school. Not to mention I believe he was half or muggleborn so sirens wouldn't have surprised him so; not really up to checking atm.
So sad about Mr. Greene and the students.

Loved their kiss. Is Draco really not going to talk about it? For shame, Draco.
I wonder what it is Hermione wants to speak with Draco about before telling the Aurors?

Thanks for writing.
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