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Reviews for Differences

By : midnightlioness24
  • From ANON - linda on July 23, 2013
    This is a great story. I would break up the paragraphs a little. Its hard to read
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  • From Phoenix5 on July 23, 2013
    Hi, I like this story so far, It's just a bit difficult to read with all the the dialogues put together. I would be more easy if you start a new line with each person who talk. as for my review, it is also not that easy to read, it would be better this way :

    Hi,
    I like this story so far,

    It's just a bit difficult to read with all the the dialogues put together.

    It would be more easy if you start a new line with each person who talk.

    As for my review, it is also not that easy to read, it would be better this way

    Please continue the wonderful work, I will read it none the less.

    Phoenix 5
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  • From ANON - nyks on July 23, 2013
    I like your story so far. Only it's a bit difficult to read when dialogue of it is all together. It would be easier to read if it was like this:

    'Sirius walked into the library and saw Severus reading. When Severus heard the door open he looked up and smiled.

    "Come on Sev, lets go out to eat."

    "Okay love."

    They flooed to the Three Broom Sticks and sat down. Tom came over and they gave their order.

    "Be right back Sev."

    "Okay love."

    Sirius walked over to Tom and told him what was going on and Tom agreed to help. Severus was watching the entire time Sirius was gone.'What is he up to now?' Severus sat there thinking. He knew something was going on but couldn't figure out what it was. He saw Sirius give Tom some money and then he walked back over to the table. '

    Otherwise, keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on July 20, 2013
    Sounds like Harry's life is about to change.
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on July 19, 2013
    The pairings sound interesting. Dumbledore and Weasly bashing sounds good as they deserve it. I'm not sure where you are going or how you are planning to get there so I guess it's early days yet to say if I like it or not.
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  • From ANON - HEARTSTAR on July 19, 2013
    very interesting more plz sorry for the typo in firt review
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