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By : SpeedyTomato

From BAFan on March 31, 2014
Ch. 13 addendum

I forgot that Snape isn't teaching at Hogwarts anymore, so has never met Jamie. And also it should have been flashbacks, not flashbrcks. Stupid Kindle auto-correct....
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From BAFan on March 31, 2014
Ch. 13

A very interesting chapter! James and Lily have more problems on their hands than just Harry, it seems. Jamie is likely to get himself into big trouble if he doesn't start keeping his mouth shut. Of course, that may be the only way he'll learn his lesson. Too bad James has already poisoned his mind against Draco and probably Severus too. It would be interesting to know Snape's thoughts about him.

And poor Harry! I'm assuming that the nightmares are coming from Voldemort rather than flashbrcks. Hope he decides to tell someone about them soon.

Edited to add: Wow! I went back and read all the reviews, and I can't remember any of your other stories generating such controversy. This story is obviously making your readers think; you should feel good about that.
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From Potter-Malfoy4life on March 26, 2014
i love it. I am so glad harry isn't just going to roll over when it comes to albus lily and james. to many stories have him giving in to them. i just love it.
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From Mashkai30 on February 24, 2014
Great update! Keep up the good work:)
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From ANON - phoenix-rob on January 29, 2014
Loving the story. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - e.pressnell on January 16, 2014
wow brilliant plot.
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From Silverstargirl on January 05, 2014
I think that Lilly might be beginning to understand, but James is incredibly stubborn. He doesn't really think that they did anything wrong. Hell, even if they HAD made sure that Harry was safely taken in by Petunia (maybe by, I don't know, simply sticking around and watching from nearby, using the disillusionment spell, at the very least), it still would have been abandonment. They have made it quite clear (in my mind) that they were more concerned with saving their own skins and their unborn child's than they were about Harry's. They have no reasonable excuse for what they did, no matter what they are trying to claim, as they could have easily taken him with them. Harry has every reason to hate them for leaving him behind so callously. He is well rid of them!
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From ANON - paganwoman on January 04, 2014
Oh wow, I can almost see what's coming. I can see Dumbledore trying to talk to Harry and getting his nose broken again. Or an attempt at kidnapping him to "make him see sense". This is all going to be about the prophecy again and the horcrux in his scar. Anyway you see it, it is going to end badly. I'm rooting for Harry on this one though. Keep up the great work, honestly when do you sleep or eat when you are constantly updating and starting new stories? You are amazing and your little Rogue too!
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From ANON - Moon Whistler on January 04, 2014
I love your story, and can clearly see that indeed Dumbledore, James and Lily should be held responsible. Leaving a baby on a doorstep just spells heaps of trouble and a lot of neglectful actions, child abandonment, but especially exposure and the risk of dying as a baby on that doorstep. And they never bothered to make sure that the Dursleys would actually open the door and look down and take baby Harry in.

Also there's something in what Albus said: "...he would have plenty to level out whatever the Dursleys may have done." Doesn't that sound a little suspicious? Possibly and knowingly leaving Harry in an environment to be neglected and abused, by people that clearly hates magic. No matter if Harry was simply a child and blood related.

In the books Harry was emotionally and psychologically abused; locking a child in a cupboard for several days apart definitely constitutes abuse. Verbal browbeaten and denied food; which are a forms of abuse and should have resulted in legal actions against the Dursleys. Whom should have been arrested.

Loving this story and hope another chapter will be soon!!!
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From ANON - Tlyna on January 04, 2014
Christopher you are way wrong. Harry is not a spoiled brat and the only one acting outrageously is James Potter who is acting like a spoiled brat. For one Lily admits that Petunia would have refused to care for Harry if they had tried to give him to her. That proves she knew they would not care for him and probably would not treat him right. I have a friend who went through a chunk of what Harry did at the hands of her father and a few of his friends and certain family members to this day proclaim they didn't know and that she should just get over it. She has no use for them and would spit in their faces. The damage is still there decades later. As someone who has worked in psych for over 30 years I have seen too damned much of this shit and people who tell victims to get over themselves, that they are whiny drama queens show an appalling lack of understanding reality or having any compassion. Personally I find them just as bad as the abusers themselves. This story is underlining the psychological reactions to such severe abuse quite accurately
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From picabone99 on December 17, 2013
fantastic story! you are blood brilliant. loved the contest, hope you will include the outing to the tower of London in future chapters. I want the rabbit, so awesome! really like what you've done with harry, very well developed.
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From ladilyndi on December 16, 2013
The latest chapter really highlights for me just how delusional James is with regard to the relationship with Harry. The story clearly states that Harry was not left with RELATIVES, he was left on a doorstep. Regardless of the fact that it was the relatives doorstep, it was still a doorstep and the relatives were not informed that he was there. That, by law, is ABANDONMENT. Even if they thought they were leaving Harry someplace safe, with safe being a relative term as we know from canon that Harry was not safe inside the Dursley home, at no point after dumping him on the doorstep did they check on Harry. How then, can James think that Harry would just accept him as a parental figure? Other than provide the genetic materials, there is nothing that James and Lily contributed to Harry's life in a positive way at least that Harry remembers.

The first part of the chapter clearly gives credence to the opinion of Sirius later on with regard to James' actions and reactions. Clearly these adults do not want to take responsibility for their actions. How could a mother just leave her 1 year old child and not check on him? Even if they felt they could not return to the UK, how could they not have some type of monitoring in place? I won't even get into them knowing there would be problems with Sirius being accused of their betrayal and not doing anything to make sure an innocent man did not spend years in prison for their fraud.

I adore the chat between Sirius and Harry as we learn more about their relationship. I still have a lot of questions but that's what happens when you read a chapter at a time. I must wait to see if those questions get answered and I'm sure they will at the proper time. I am glad the author didn't lay out all the problems Harry has overcome already as I get the feeling that we will learn about them during the mind healer conference and then it would just be a repeat and would have lost its effective shock value which is what James and Lily need to wake them up.

Great job Speedy Tomato. This story is realistic and addicting, just what I like in a story.
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From Christopher11 on December 16, 2013
To ladilyn: I am sorry but I have to disagree, ladilyn. To write a story like this that has NUMEROUS plot holes and vitriols people who thought that they were leaving Harry somewhere SAFE speaks to a person who has had this happen to them and has not been given the proper wakeup call that they really need.

To be blunt, Harry was NOT abandoned. He was left with RELATIVES who James, Lily and Albus thought would take good care of him. Let me give you a wake-up call and tell you THAT HAPPENS EVERY SINGLE DAY IN THE UNITED STATES AND THE WORLD!

Taking a child with you when you are going on a hunt after a dark wizard would TRULY be abusive and would be putting them in needless danger. Now, I know that you are going to yarp and yipe about "What about Harry's siblings!" We have no idea when they came into the picture or if they were kept well away from their parents dark wizard hunt.
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From Christopher11 on December 16, 2013
I've got to say it again: one's acting outrageously: everyone but the Potters.

Seriously, Harry is STILL acting like a spoiled brat. I get that he was abused but to take it out on people who THOUGHT THAT THEY WERE LEAVING HIM SOMEWHERE SAFE is just plain and simple, period and done with forever, no more argument allowed..... WRONG!

The story is going into dip territory.

I hope that the therapist gives Harry and the others a wakeup call on this subject, because if I was that therapist and after showing this story to others, they agree... that is what needs to be done.
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From stormsmother on December 13, 2013
Just had a mini day-dream after finishing this chapter. When they're at the museum sometime in the next few days, after the dinosaur exhibit and looking through the Egypt one, Harry gets distracted and excited and starts reading out some parcel-script to Sev, Remus and Sirius. After being asked by one of them to "talk in english please" he starts telling a partially known story that's end has been unknown for ages. One of the curators overhears. Nothing ends up coming of it, as they leave as soon as they notice a muggle but it would be kinda cool to read it actually play out.
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