Reviews for Smell of SubmissionBy : dweek |
This story was so littered with grammatical errors and spelling mistakes that one could almost overlook the mockery this makes of bdsm. It's not even the unsafe or unrealistic nature of it that is so ludicrous, it's the continual overuse of cliches that cinches it. There's also the fact that calling this a "dark Harry" story when the only example of him being dark is an immoral and poorly developed "harem" of sexual servitude is ridiculous; there was less magic in this story than in the original books (and they were pretty damn mundane for novels about a magical world, hell Rowling actually admitted as much).
Hi, great Story you have here, really believable for the Characters. I´m going directly to the sequel, just wanted to let you know that still new People find this and like the Story.
More updates pls
The author wrotes well - they get feelings avracr, good characterization, and grammar.
But overall I couldn't like this fic for two reasons:
1) they make most of the girls outwardly say no and fight against the dominant, whole secretly loving it and wanting to hurt. That's ridiculous, even for BDSM. It just promotes the notion of "she wanted it" rape or "her mouth said no, but her body said yes" bull. There are no safe words, etc
2) it ends abruptly, like it's half a fic
I love Hermione's realistic reaction to being dominated.
Harry is being a dick, but it's still a great story
I love it already. Dominant Harry is delicious
THAT UNDERHANDED LITTLE SHIT COLLARED HER WOTHOUT HER PERMISSION!
This is my favorite. Love the store.
that's friggen great
this fic is just on the right side of too much.
I am so wrapped up in this story! What do you mean the end for now? please tell me there will be more?!!
How could youuuuu, I wanted I wanted!! I will go hunt down this AU. Also. I would love to like...go back to your other story, before this one, and correct everything from before Electric * pet started betaing.... >:D just minor mispellings and wrong words that were just random things. Hit me up! My email is this guest name with gmail :D its possibly all lowercase but yea. XD. I loved le story though I didn't like how stubborn Hermione was being but that was the point, yea? Other than that, keep it up!
Are the other stories of this series up? If so which ones are they? I am completely in love with this story!
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