Reviews for Fragmented SoulBy : StrawberryGirl87 & Bickymonster |
Just wondering when chapter 96 will be posted... I really love this book, and I'm extremely excited to see it through the end!
I'm so emotionally invested in the story and all of the characters. You both are amazing writers. Please tell me you plan on continuing the story.
Please please please update soon I've been enjoying this story immensely and I'm looking forward to it being finished... I want to see how everything unfolds with niko... Rosie... Aspen... Mocha(because of the strange man at work)... Seamus... Lukas and Nell... Even Robin as much as I hate to admit it lol... Cassie for sure... Pretty much just everyone in this story period if I'm perfectly honest even with the repetitive scenes ;)
If you do update soon i Suggest Reading what you have wrote already because you seem to be repeating some information that you already said but in a different way like Harry asking slughorn for Veritaserum
I really hope you write more soon
You already had Draco get the Dark Mark!
Chapter 4 "He tugged nervously at his sleeve of his left arm that covered his burning skin that had just been freshly branded with the dark mark"
I've just read all of this (up to and including chapter 94) over several days and wanted to leave a review, so here it is (in no particular order):
Oh fucking hell I hate Robin! I feel sorry for what happens to her with Amycus, but she is still a bitch! I did read the chapter that introduced her and literally said out loud "Oh shit..." when I saw what she thought was going to happen to her with FG. (I'm being vague so I don't spoil it for others) I really can't see her ever settling into pack life and becoming a decent person.
I was on TeamDraco but seeing Clay and Romy together I've changed my mind as they are sweet, even if they do keep bickering. I understand why Clay is reluctant and why Romy is pushing it, but I think he is right on this one.
Micha is adorable! I felt so sorry for him when he was with the spy (name has slipped my mind, but you know who I mean) and I'm so glad he's now with Damon. Although I was worried that you were going to not get them together, cos you two do enjoy torturing people, don't you? Oh, and quick question: is it pronounced Me - ka, or Me - sha? Or something else entirely?
Severus - GET HIM SORTED! (And breathe). So want him to be okay, but at the same time him coming back into the picture will cause problems. Not sure how pleased he'd be at the idea of being turned.
Glad Remus is joining the pack, although I was not happy to see he was still using the Wolfsbane.
Poor Seamus! But he seems to be getting a handle. And what is it with Ron and Hermione being just enormous assholes?! I get Ron's upset about Ginny and Neville, but he is SUCH a dick I want to smack him.
I don't actually like Fenrir/Harry stories, so why I began this is anybody's guess, but as I've stuck around for 94 chapters I clearly liked it! You made Fenrir actually nice, and I liked the way you explained why he had bitten children. Although he seriously needed to take better care of them after! I get he was struggling to rebuild his pack, but for crying out loud!
It's so sweet seeing Jaylon falling for Aiden and Dean. I was a bit surprised by that, given his own experiences at the hands of two other werewolves, but I guess instinct over-rides.
And as for those two, there are some phrases you don't want to read and seeing "You're Omega" said to them in the strays pack made me, again, say "Oh shit!" out loud. Even Jack, little toad, doesn't deserve that.
Harry really needs to get a move on. If Voldie keeps bringing the strays extras, then Fen's pack will be unable to survive soon!
And finally Harry. I was reading this and had to stop at one point (damned RL), and I was going about my day to day life and found myself worrying about how Harry was doing (it was during his punishment) so good job on writing characters that I care about. On his punishment, it was clever and I'm glad he has stopped being so bratty, but we've seen far brattier now! (Robin, I'm looking at you). I think it's nice that he's started thinking he wants pups. Cute!
So, er, yeah, I think that's me done for now. More whenever you can please! SP
I really love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter.
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