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By : TheDarkWonker

From ANON - Sera21 on April 23, 2014
Its a good read but I do object to the way you are describing Harry as a bad lover because the size of his dick. Thats like saying a girl is less attractive because she has smaller breasts. Size is not something a guy can help. and premature coming isn't either as far as I know. As far as I know thats largly psychological which wouldn't surprise me with Harrys shitty past. If you are going to make him a bad lover make him inconsiderate or selfish or something. Now you have just made him an over used stereotype and I feel sorry for the poor man :( Also huge dick does not equal good time. That shit HURTS like hell if it hits your cervix. Suspension of disbelief aside in the name of hot porn I do wish you wouldn't completly base your story on stereotypes...
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From jamescun on April 22, 2014
hey when you break ginny you can have her say I love you master draco if you what you can fuck me infort of my husband and kids and get me pregnant
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From jamescun on April 13, 2014
plz write more I'm wondering if Ginny's kids are of an acceptable age (in your book) to be involved in Ginny's second life. It'd be hot if she invited Draco over for a meal, on,y for Draco to have the entire family submit to him only after a couple of visits to the Potter residence. and draco fucking harry kids

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From jamescun on April 12, 2014
plz write more I'm wondering if Ginny's kids are of an acceptable age (in your book) to be involved in Ginny's second life. It'd be hot if she invited Draco over for a meal, on,y for Draco to have the entire family submit to him only after a couple of visits to the Potter residence.
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From Valehtelija on March 26, 2014
See, now you're grasping at straws here, with Gwenog implying Ginny can't be satiated by one man, even if Harry were to resort to magical means to improving their sex life, so naturally she must crave cocks and what nots. But the crucial thing here is, if she is truly as such, why stay married to Harry?

What could possibly indicate, from his entire past life, that Harry would be accepting of this? This will only lead to more bad writing and characterization further on, I think, on your part, if you try to write him appearing as accepting, or even potentially submissive, for his wife's wayward ways.

Hell, for what Malfoy alone did, Harry could invoke the life debt that is owed and strip him of his magic, not to mention that Ginny owes him as much, if not more due to the events with the Chamber of Secrets, so her betrayal of Harry would be even more catastrophic for her.

The only plausible way for the continuation of this story, with Ginny getting sluttier as time goes on, would be Harry finding out, forcing her to agree to a private divorce, and she ends up having to rely on Malfoy, as she would be cut off financially from the Potter fortune. Malfoy would most likely suffer in some way as well, as you've implied that Harry very much so remains magically powerful, so the thing would be dealt in a private, if humiliating, manner, so as to avoid a scandal.

Hell, it'd be more fitting to have Malfoy dressed up like a girl, seeing as he already has the looks for it, and then pawn him off for a night or two to some brothel in Knockturn.

Ah well, that was two minutes well spent.

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From ANON - Anon on March 11, 2014
I have never liked Ginny so I am only skimming this. COnsidering you still have Harry as a powerhouse that even Draco acknologes as superior to him in magic I am hoping he loses it in the end. It would be interesting to have a solid reason for a later Dark Lord Harry. Most are done when he is young.

More pissed about Luna actually.
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From ANON - Jo on March 09, 2014
Story and smut scenes very nice. I especially loved chapter two when the girls were used by all those men

I'm wondering if Ginny's kids are of an acceptable age (in your book) to be involved in Ginny's second life. It'd be hot if she invited Draco over for a meal, on,y for Draco to have the entire family submit to him only after a couple of visits to the Potter residence.

Keep it up
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From Valehtelija on March 05, 2014
If you were referring to me, you're mistaken. As I've already stated, your story doesn't evoke disgust (nor arousal), let alone hate or contempt. I mean, I actually figured out why your story (both of them actually) is so silly to read: you're basically transcribing Japanese doujins, the stuff from exhentai. Every single little thing is straight out of them. What you failed to consider is that when actually writing that stuff, it's worth more for a comedic value than anything else.

That's why this whole thing is so hilarious and ill-fitting. Not to mention you fail at appropriately using the setting you've chosen for venting of whatever fantasies of your own you have there. Like the small dick, which you attribute to Ginny's husband, and will no doubt do the same to Hermione's in the future, which could be just as easily spelled to be bigger. Or a spell to make the man last longer. Really now, there's probably a lot of possible/potential spells just waiting out there.

Don't get me wrong, I understand why you yourself chose to write this kind of story, where someone's wife gets 'stolen' from him, but you honestly just chose the wrong setting for such a fetish. Not to mention the wrong characters.

I don't get it. Why use Harry Potter at all?
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From Valehtelija on February 28, 2014
You're a rather shoddy writer.

I say this not in contention of your chosen theme for this smutfic, but your writing skills which make it as unappealing as one of the more simple-minded, simple-driven, poorly written, poorly conceived of fics that I've ever read in a long time. Which says quite a bit.

I can't pinpoint exactly, down to the 't' that is, why your writing is sloppy, it just is. I mean, the last chapter kind of shows of how you flounder about with no idea on how to push this any further, so you add some kind of predestination shit from Luna, of all characters you could have chosen/corrupted (and I'm not saying this as a compliment, mind you), to justify the stuff that you had happen to Ginny and plan on happening further.

Furthermore, there's the whole Malfoy aspect. Disastrously hilarious would be one way to describe him being anyone's lover, let alone so good that women turn to wanton versions of themselves, bereft of controls, absent of morals and care for their families, should they have in the first place, but I suppose this is probably some form of self-insert.

Because the only people that write Malfoy in any form or way that doesn't illustrate how daftly incompetent he is are the people that just choose to go against the grain simply for the sake of it, or due to harboring delusions of the highest kind that his is a character worth writing about.

Ah well, best of luck with your... I can't call it a smutfic, not really, when it fails to provoke a strong enough reaction from me (neither disgust nor arousal are present, and that alone is an accomplishment I guess). But looking at the other reviews here, there's quite a hefty amount of those who dwell on the very bottom of the smutfic spectrum, so you'll be quite occupied with keeping them fed with the substandard stuff.

Cheers.
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From mattcun on February 02, 2014
plz write more this is hot
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From ANON - Restricted on January 16, 2014
I like your stories. And I wouldn't call it 'sick'. Haha, you could have written about Ginny getting aroused by a bowl of fruit. Personally, I like the adultery and depravity if this much more though. Honestly, you work reminds of a really good hentai turned into a story. So five stars! This rocks!
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From jamescun on January 11, 2014
Still waiting for the Cuckoldry aspect of the story, I wanna see Harry watching Ginny fucking Draco and liking it, and licking her creampie afterwards, lol.
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From ANON - Instigator Majini on January 10, 2014
Still waiting for the Cuckoldry aspect of the story, I wanna see Harry watching Ginny fucking Draco and liking it, and licking her creampie afterwards, lol.
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From jamescun on December 27, 2013
plz write more get ginny pregnant with draco kid tell how harry raise someone kid
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From ANON - curlysupergirl on December 16, 2013
oh and ignore the haters- if they want to read stories about how amazing harry is they can read the original series (which i loved). but this is fanfiction :) we take our favorite characters, pair them up with other favorite characters, change peoples backgrounds and turn innocent stories into smut :D thats the whole point lol. i loved it. keep writing the way u do :))))
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