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By : Sealpotter
  • From BAFan on March 02, 2014
    Ch. 16

    Whew. Peter's fate was pretty horrific. I'm surprised only Harry got sick; pretty sure I would have been puking in the bushes. The real question is whether Fudge will believe the witnesses, since they're all friends of Harry. At least, I assume they're still trying to clear Sirius's name?

    "'Every now and then, old thoughts seep in for what he once was. Forgive me.' Severus condoled." I don't think "condoled" is the word you want. It means to offer sympathy, which doesn't seem to fit the context of what's happening. If anything Snape was apologizing for reverting back to his old habit of sneering at Harry's actions. Or did I totally misread that part?

    Anyway, another good chapter. And I'm off to the next one!





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  • From BAFan on March 02, 2014
    Ch. 15

    "'Adding permanent silencing charms on all the rooms.' Harry replied with a grin that grew larger with the deepness of the blush sweeping over his godfather. Severus did not hesitate, and his expression remained as flaccid as ever when he responded. Inside though, he was enjoying the deep color washing his lover."

    I'm pretty sure you meant "placid," meaning calm, not "flaccid," which means soft or flabby. Harry was evil, teasing Sirius like that. I mean, come on, that was some pretty hot sex, if a bit rough for my tastes.

    Good chapter!


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  • From djaddict on February 27, 2014
    Well... now I see why you split Christmas day into multiple chapters. Yes, Harry's days are very long.

    It seems that justice for some people will be harsher than others. Actually a little more horrific than I thought you would get but seriously deserved. I had thought that he might use him to clear Sirius' name but I am sure there is a plan for that. Right?

    Wish we could have lingered in the afterglow with Harry and Draco but when they come together like that ( pun not intended) it is just so moving, beautiful and hot.

    I like that Harry pointed out to Severus that the darkness inside of him is not necessasarily a bad thing.

    You had a typo in the author's note, lol, anticipated.
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  • From ANON - Meechypoo on February 26, 2014
    So Peter is punished in a way only known bu Augurs and though witnessed is still a terrible burden to be beared by Harry. One can see just how important Draco is to Harry in anchoring him to a calmer reality when his gifts overwhelm him and ask more of him than can normally be tolerated. Christmas was still al lovely affair and Severus is coming to understand the depths of the emotion he feels for Sirius and that Sirius already acknowledges in himself. Lucius' apology was in expected but welcomes but the horror of the basilisk will make his guilt rise to new heights. I love that Harry gave Molly a house elf! Brilliant.

    ~~ Meechy
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  • From slmncpm on February 23, 2014
    oh wormtail, you dirty rat, you are about to get yours. *hands you scones* i LOVE this story!
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  • From djaddict on February 23, 2014
    So much to love in this chapter.

    I love how Draco was THERE for Harry when he needed him most.

    Severus and Sirius were hotter than hot and I just love your characterization of Severus and his dominance.

    Harry's vision of the tree was facinating. Is that going to come up again?

    The presents were great, Kreatcher's especially.

    I still want to know what happened with Harry when he left to study the book!

    No nitpicks this time... I must be slipping. lol

    I love that you like the bing, tiddle thing but I can't take credit. Stolen fron Dr. Rodney McKay and Stargate Atlantis. Lol
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  • From ANON - delia cerrano on February 22, 2014
    Ewww! Pettigrew? Your story continues to surprise me...in a good way.
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on February 22, 2014
    Way to go Kreacher! That was Pettigrew, wasn't it? The sex scene between Severus and Sirius was hot. I love Draco and Harry's reaction to the fact they forgot to use silencing charms! It was disturbing that George went dark. Excellent update!
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  • From djaddict on February 22, 2014
    I am sure that I will have more to say after I go back and re-read but please tell me we wil "see" what happened when Harry went and got the book!

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  • From ANON - Meechypoo on February 22, 2014
    Oh my, so much deliciousness all in one chapter!! Severus stakes his claim on Sirius and I find it hilarious that Harry and Draco are informed immediately due to the very loud nature of Sirius when in the midst of pleasure! **smirking**

    The gifts are lovely but Harry's are extraordinary! Unfortunately finding out the George was the " Elder" is horrifying. Harry definitely needs to prevent the final battle as losing his twin was devastating to everyone but had to feel like losing half your soul to George!

    Kreature's gifts were the best. The removal of the portrait that will make everyone much happier and the capture of Pettigrew. It will help Harry towards his goals and finally allow Sirius to be free! I "siriusly" can't wait for the next chapter!

    ~~ Meechy
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on February 21, 2014
    This chapter was perfect and the sex scenes hot and sweet(like chocolate syrup).
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  • From djaddict on February 21, 2014
    Ok.............. WOW! Speechless.
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    That scene with Severus and Sirius was so so hot, you could have written "Bing, tiddle, tiddle, bong" for the next few paragraphs and I probably wouldn't have noticed!

    That being said, that was a wonderfully written section.

    Enjoyed the presents and the tree scene as well.

    Harry and Draco reliving Harry's past Dursley Christmases was heartbreaking. And the sex was just as hot as your other pairing! I can really feel the emotion between them in your writing.


    My one little nitpick is at the beginning of Severus and Sirius' encounter where you said Sirius whirled himself toward Severus. Whirled around is usually the phrase used.
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  • From ANON - Meechypoo on February 21, 2014
    Nit pick? About what? That was an absolutely delicious chapter. Severus claims Sirius and was sinful in his domination over their first sexual encounter. Christmas eve festivities were sweet and delightful. And finally, Draco gives everything to Harry and Harry relishes in becoming one with his true mate! Nothing to pick on here but the bones left I. The ashes of their passion!

    ~~ Meechy
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  • From ANON - Mocca on February 18, 2014
    That's amazing story . I really like it no I love it . *huge grin*
    That's very complicated story yet is easy to read . When you will update ?! It's that need long time ?? Well, i like the idea 'bout Siri and Sev . They will cute together . Hmmm , i want be more seeing elder Malfoys become open . Maybe more time with Harry n Draco alone ?! And Will Harry will have his child ?? That's one Harry happinies though . I want Harry more happies . He deserve it . And thank you .
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  • From ANON - ChaosLady on February 16, 2014
    Another wonderful update!
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