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By : Almister

From Darksnider05 on June 20, 2014
Darn was hoping for fertility.
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From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2014
Well, at least you didn't tease about it. This pretty much destroyed my interest. Not just Harry screwing a hermaphrodite, but having his "fiance" suck someone else.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 18, 2014
as far as snape and dumbledore go threatening to toss harry out of hogwarts is really not a threat since any school would be happy to have harry potter as a student. detentions and loss of house points are meaningless as well since to force harry to detention you would need to kidnap him and imprison him during said detention which is illegal. so harry should get big points for screwing snape and dumbledore in one move.
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From ANON - tTT on June 18, 2014
Ignore the bitches whining about how Harry was dominated. It was a reminder that he shouldn't become over confidant. It's a nice set-up for a future revenge scene. Hell, he was under the control of kind-influencing magic from something at a much higher 'level,' it's no surprise he ended up capitulating. The hermaphrodite comment was interesting, and I'd like to see at least one scene with one, wether or not Harry takes it. I would enjoy it more if Harry is, at the very least, in control and dominating his partner when/if he's taking it, but write what you want to write- so long as he doesn't become a complete bitch. That would be less satisfactory.
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From harpy81 on June 18, 2014
You should add this story to other sites like fanfiction, ficwad, hpfanficarchive, or archiveofourown

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From ANON - Nishimura on June 18, 2014
The vampire encounter was the best thing on this chapter, easily. Harry should sub to more enemies, like Luka did on MGQ~
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From ANON - C.C. on June 17, 2014
And now I'm less interested in this story. The vampire meeting ruined it for me. Yes, Harry doesn't need to dominate all the time, however such an unfair encounter so early in the game that forces the protagonist to become a little bitch/pussy...

Also Harry at no point has tried out the save function. Well he might have in the latter half of this chapter, whic hI won't be reading for a long time until I can get over my disgust so as to try this story which had a very good first three chapters before going down the drain faster than you can say "Squeel for me piggy!" once more.

In my rushing down the page so as to let my disapointment known I did notice that apparently a goblin is met. Quite possibly a better sex scene...but if it follows up the complete demasculation of Harry...I could tollerate, and even understand, Harry being mollested. Even the fact that he thought about the finger being uncomfortable. However the moment the prostate was pushed he became...well...I'm more inclined to believe he was swapped with a Yaoi story protagonist.

I hope, sincerely and from the bottom of my heart, that you alter this chapter. Otherwise, after two amazing days of returning to see if this had updated, I'll be left for a long time with disgust at the thought of having read this. It's like my experience with Mass Effect. I loved the games until I got to the end of the third game. Haven't been able to pick it back up and I still have hateful feelings towards the writers.

In short: Harry being molested is fine. Pushing an uncomfortable finger in his ass in an attempt to torture/pleasure him is fine. Having him enjoy it and then becoming a begging little bitch is NOT! Heck, have Harry use the pause function before discovering and using the load-save option so as to return before the event and avoid it...just please, get rid of that scene!!! Harry can lose a fight, but not his...well, his essence. His self. His pride. Whatever you want to call it.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 17, 2014
as far as potions goes harry should in fact have no problem with that class. if you think about it he has been learning that since he was 4 or 5 years old thanks to his aunt who has forced him to do the cooking. an harry had much worse punishments from his aunt to worry about then a simple detention or loss of house points such as having his hand put in a skillet of hot grease, those were much more life and death punishments.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 17, 2014
an yes i know you are going to say what about harry's social time? that is what he has weekends for as well as studyhall and the time between the end of dinner and curfew starts. an 3rd year harry would likely take runes and arithmusy an he can knock out those classes during his study time from 9 p.m. to midnight and do them in the commonroom since they are just written work. so the only class that leaves him to worry about is herbology.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 17, 2014
since harry does have his invisableity cloak he can pretend to got to bed at 9 p.m. and sneak out to an unused classroom and practice magic for 3 hours a night. if it takes 30 minutes to learn a spell he can learn 6 spells a night which is 42 spells a week. now the students at hogwarts seem to only have each class once a week so that would mean they learn one spell per class so 40 spells a year per class. so harry could learn all of 2nd year charms and transfiguration in 2 weeks, and all of 3rd year in 2 more weeks and so on so that in 12 weeks he has learned all that hogwarts teaches in these 2 classes. harry will have those subjects finished before christmas break. he could then search the library and start on defence against the dark arts an finish that off in 6 weeks. an this way he can devote the rest of the school year to potions brewing and finish off that for all the years before summer holiday.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 17, 2014
how come harry almost never has the brains to make compulsion charms and confounding charms on a braclet with a muggle notice-me-not on them to get the dursleys to treat him better. he knows what his home life is like so that i would think would be top of the list of things to do with magic. an if you say those spells are too hard for him have him trick the weasley twins or oliver wood into doing it for him.
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From ANON - bill560682 on June 17, 2014
now of course harry will have to use his brains to kick snape and malfoys asses verbally all over hogwarts when he gets back. an of course any time snape tries anything such as loss of house points or detention harry threatens to go over dumbledores head to the board of goveners with pensive memories of the event and also memories of snapes classes and even go to the DMLE about abuse of power assult and atempted murder seeing as snape KNOWINGLY messes students up at just the wrong or in his case right time to cause the biggest mess possible in potions class. as a potions master snape SHOULD know how to counter any problems the students may have in class and have the items needed to counter it ready instead of just letting the potion blowup in the persons face. an when you point out that the parents, aunts, uncles and grandparents of current students are going to be the ones voting on if he goes to jail even dumbledore and all his blackmail will not be able to keep you out of jail since he is going to need to use it up to keep himself out of jail since he will be the co-defendant in the case because it is his job as headmaster to look after the safety of the students and he has been doing a piss poor job at that. so yes snape will need to get his act in line but of course if his slytherins decide on their own to go after potter it would not be snapes fault right? the problem with that becomes pensive memories can be used in court when these children are carged with assalt and attempted murder, because yes use of a curse such as reducto is in fact trying to kill someone. an harry should have brains enough to swear a wizards oath in front of the whole school that he had nothing to do with the attacks of the students now in the hospital wing and also have enough brain to threaten to sue the families of anyone who says he does after he swears his oath.
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From ANON - shadeirion on June 17, 2014
Yo,
love the story so far. The last kink really isn't for me but hey, everybody has something else that gets them off.
Love that while sex is a mayor player in this story at least there is still some plot plus the monster girls are always fun to read, shame not more of stories like this are around.
Ik know you will keep up the good work but if you need any tips or ideas i'm all for giving them. For example polyjuice fun :D if you hadn't already thought about it yet.
Keep up the good work :)
and update soon :)
Shadeirion
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From ANON - JK Reader on June 17, 2014
I get the feeling that this was inpired more and more by "the lemon games" story for the Naruto fandom, Monster Girl Quest of course, and Corruption of Champions.
Am I right?
Ahahaha~
Anyways keep up the good work, I enjoy this story a lot.
-The Reader
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From ANON - Anon on June 17, 2014
Thanks for the update, I just hope that the scene with the vampire wasn't foreshadowing of more of that along with dickgirls fucking him.
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