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Reviews for Deception

By : valkyrie136
  • From A_Diva on October 06, 2014
    Good action sequence in the forest. It got my heart racing, lol. I really enjoyed the showdown b/w Lucius and Draco. It was intense.

    Great job.

    Also, if you like dark romance where women are held captive...go to Good Reads. I randomly ran across a bunch of them one day. I've been meaning to recommend the sight to you, although I'm not sure how you would find them. I guess the search engine.
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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    I have to disagree with you on Dramione.

    Draco, in canon, isn't actually evil. If he were evil, he would have had no problem killing Albus. Draco is more of an arrogant bully, who cowers in the face of adversity. Draco becomes a deatheater to save his mother. People seem to forget that Narcissa and Lucius (as much as he's capable) loved their son. Draco was spoiled and indoctrinated into racist beliefs. The Draco Malfoy in the novels is someone who had a lot of growing up to do..

    Draco and Hermione are not total opposite (and we know what they say about opposites). They are both intelligent, manipulative, and family oriented. Hermione's a do gooder, and Draco will do what it takes to get what he wants. They balance each other out.

    Also, some of the best love stories involve two people who dislike each other in the beginning only to later fall in love, which is the appeal of Dramione. As I've mentioned before, I love Tomione. You want to talk about a perfect pair that could never be, and yet a good writer makes it work. Creating a convincing pair out of two unlikely people is what separates the good writers from the mediocre ones.

    Now, as for me, I love possessive, dominant Draco. I like a Draco who will hurt others to get what he wants, but won't hurt the woman he loves...too much. I also like a Draco who will destroy anyone keeping him from getting Hermione. It's hard to find a good dominant Draco with a strong, but submissive, Hermione.

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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    What is Mr. Malfoy up to? I know he's not letting Hermione go out of the kindness of his heart. I don't think he's capable of having one.

    I oddly like him sending her to her room. Treating her like a recalcitrant child is another way of getting under her skin. Although it doesn't seem dark, because of the lack bruises on her person, mental abuse is often worse than physical abuse, especially to someone who prides herself on being a free thinker.


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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    Poor Hermione. She can never escape Draco now...unless she kills him.

    Draco seemed really crazy in this chapter. He's seemed crazy before, but his calmness was just plain creepy.
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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    ooh, what did the Veela mean by seeing her again. I think you've done a good job of separating Draco from the Veela. I can almost feel pity for him, especially the idea of being lied to by your parents. There spell is the reason all of this is happening. If they weren't so obsessed with blood purity, they would have let nature take its course.
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  • From ANON - hugo on October 05, 2014
    Wow for a moment there I thought Draco was gonna die. So glad that his mom came to the rescue though I do feel a bit sad for Ginny.
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  • From ANON - Ariel on October 05, 2014
    The drama keeps getting more intense. I feel it was a bit rushed to bring in Narcissa to confront Lucy Goosie, but I realize that only she is on pair with Lucius in terms on strength as Draco is a young veela still. It seems like a psychological/horror/thriller where Narcissa is the only sane person as the girls are too damaged.
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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    Finally, a normal conversation between them. It was good to get some insight into Hermione.

    Draco's acceptance of the situation was interesting. He seemed to nonchalant about the whole thing.
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  • From ANON - magi on October 05, 2014
    that was awesome! what'll happen now? if Lucius dies then ginny would too, and if draco dies then there's no more dramione :0

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  • From ANON - Ariel on October 05, 2014
    Don't. Kill anyone yet at least
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  • From ANON - Ariel on October 05, 2014
    Talk about vicious sex....l.hope the baby is okay...
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  • From ANON - Ariel on October 05, 2014
    I like how you update frequently throughout a day since your chapters are not so long. I got confused with the Ginny chapter and how she owled Hermione for help. Shouldn't she have been able to do that long ago or is she able to now because Lucius has gotten less intense with their sons being born?
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  • From ANON - ccha on October 05, 2014
    This is getting very interesting!
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  • From ANON - Sherlocked17 on October 05, 2014
    I like this dark fix. It is quite disturbing. I'm curious about how he will mindfuck Hermione when she actually is 'allowed' to leave. My story looks lik a light drabble compared to this....
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  • From A_Diva on October 05, 2014
    It's interesting to watch Draco fight with the Veela. I like the twist of him doing bad things to her because he can fill it when she's miserable and hates it.

    I feel really bad for Hermione. She doesn't deserve this kind of treatment. I hope she finds some release, however it may come...
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