Click Here!

Reviews for In Their Hands *Complete*

By : Desert_Sea
  • From Remarkable on March 26, 2016
    Oh. My. Gawd. This story is completely amazing! Trite, I know, but I don't know what else to say! The way you break everything and everyone down, furthering the reveals, the hidden dynamics, the inner core of each person - its nothing short of amazing. It's really difficult to find a story that can achieve this level of sophistication and smuttiness while maintaining plot, dissection and surprise. I almost feel like this is a murder mystery without the murder. Thrilling. I'm going to rec your story on a FB group I'm in. Loving this so much. I'll be patiently waiting for an update, because God only knows I'm slower than a frozen sloth at updating my own.
    Report Review

  • From Rosajean on March 26, 2016
    Well, shit. What a cliffhanger! I can't wait to read the next chapter!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Portia on March 26, 2016
    I did not see that coming. Well done! Less formally, Holy crap! I love it.
    Report Review

  • From professorflo on March 26, 2016
    I'm just so excited when I see a new chapter up. Love her revelation at the end of this chapter!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Chea on March 25, 2016
    'Sigh' Another magnificent story so far. I need more! LOL. I think Hermione is coming out if the balloon thrust is any indication. I want to play. Reminds me of a game I played with lifesavers once. You hold a toothpick between your lips and attempt to pass the lifesaver onto another's toothpick without hands. Or the game where you hold a potato under your neck and another tries to remove the potato with their chin. That was always fun because hands and dips were usually involved...potato usually forgotten. Lol! I'm rambling I know but I always have something that relates to your stories. That's why I love them. That and I'm always interested in anything with Severus. :) Loving it..don't stop, please.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Annie on March 25, 2016
    I was liking this story. But I abandoned it in the middle of chapter 6. When I first read that Hermione was a sex therapist I thought it was going to be interesting. But she ended up being really uptight, with no work ethic (discussing one patient with the other), with double standards (she got 2 patients expelled but not Snape because she wanted to shag him). And Snape is a self-righteous bastard, who thinks he's better than the therapists at knowing what the patients need... Just no...
    Report Review

  • From OracleObscured on March 24, 2016
    I guess I do expect more from Hermione. It's her job to be accepting; by not being honest with herself, she's failing those under her care. Who could ever trust a sex therapist who can't accept something as commonplace as BDSM? Of course she's intelligent and sympathetic enough to help people even with this massive flaw, but she should know that you can't be a productive therapist with those kinds of limiting opinions. I've never been to sex therapist, but I know I could never truly open up to someone who had such a narrow view of the world. You don't tend to be honest with people who are judging you.
    "In the wars," seems to be a Britishism from everything I read (which would of course be appropriate in an HP story). I actually really like it and am wondering when I'll be able to slip into into my own speech/writing.
    "I’ve been quite deliberate in not beautifying the language in this one too much as I think it is sometimes complex enough without the floral tributes. But, then again, I’m not sure if it is too straight, what are your thoughts? ‘"—No, I don't think it's too straight. I actually didn't totally notice that you were toning it down. But now that you mention it, I rather like the idea. It's kind of a cerebral/clinical story, and the writing reflects that. (I don't mean clinical in a dull or antiseptic sense, just that it's very mentally/medically involved.) It has been harder for me to pick out lines I like for pure writing reasons, but that doesn't detract from the story in any way. I'm still emotionally drawn into the story and characters without the aid of florid wording. While I like clever descriptions, they aren't necessary to make a scene pop. I agree that making this story any more complex might be overkill. Being understood is the most critical aspect of writing, and verbose prose isn't always necessary. Simplicity has a beauty all its own.
    Weasladol—Hahahaha. Now I can't stop think about Weasley based meds. (SudaFred. Ronitussin. Pepto-Billmal.)
    I always like a chapter that starts out with stripping Snape. You can't go wrong with that setup. (...more academic interest, than anything else.—Take out the comma.) It seems as if the stripping is symbolic of her tearing down his defenses. She's leaving him vulnerable (but not completely; he's not buck naked). I liked the imagery of "allowing them to ripple open down to his navel." And "narrow window of flesh." And "she gently grasped the shaft of his cock through its tight satin skin."
    I can't figures out how fucked up Snape is. Is he just keeping himself safe by avoiding people or is something more going on? He seems pretty damn uncomfortable with her touch (but not enough to lose his erection). ("Not one to ever particularly think about the quality of men’s cocks she was, again, surprised to find herself so entranced by his."—Comma between cocks and she.)
    (regarded her with an, almost pained, expression.—Take out the commas.)(Pulling his cock slightly toward her she lowered her head—Comma between her and she). I like this whole scene, but I love the manual and oral descriptions. I don't know if I'm simply aroused by his arousal or if I just like the way your phrased it. Either way it's exciting to read not only for sexual reasons but to see how he's going to react (emotionally not physically).
    Torsional is great word. Word notebook.
    For some reason I like how he touches her hair while she's sucking him. I might be the affection of the gesture, or it might be because it's his acceptance of her "help." He's not grudgingly going along with things, he's inviting her in.
    And she's trying to make him feel as comfortable as she can. (Gulp. Salty acceptance.)
    I'm intrigued by George's balloon game. Particularly the pairings. I like Dennis with Sarah. Cute. And now I suspect that George knows about Snape and Hermione. It seems as if he's trying to diffuse Lynch's possible jealousy by pairing him with Hermione. He might also be trying to spark Snape's jealousy. (And/or Hermione's.)
    And obviously I loved Luna's suggestive comments and George's adorable reaction.
    I can't wait to see what happens next. As always, eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
    Report Review

  • From Severus1snape on March 24, 2016
    oooh hell I love george, that game was to funny, I could easily picture it!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Maral on March 24, 2016
    “Do you wish to continue?” ... YES YES YES! Awesome chapter. I love Georges game. It made me laugh so hard.
    Report Review

  • From OracleObscured on March 23, 2016
    Well first I had to look up dab hand, because all though I've heard the phrase a few times before, I never knew what it really meant. Word fun.
    I liked this whole opening scene between Luna and Hermione. I don't know how this will change their professional relationship, but maybe Hermione will turn a corner with her. Snape isn't the only one who can affect change.
    Had she been so concerned with avoiding Luna’s scars that she’d not allowed herself to really see the woman?—Ah, the therapist's dilemma. Maintaining professional distance can be a blessing and a curse. I don't think it was the scars that blinded Hermione, it was her inability to be fully aware of anything, including herself. It hard to look below the surface of others without facing your own demons (or at least being aware of their presence).
    "It was the Thestrals that saved me—they woke me up, helped me through the smoke and flames.”—Snape is a lot like a Thestral.
    "I became close with my grandmother,"—Luna's grandmother didn't happen to take her on wine tours, did she? :)
    I loved the bit about Snape recognizing her and Luna's assertion that he was a man of compassion.
    "You have been in the wars." —I have never heard this phrase before. My first thought was that it was a line from a movie, but a simple search told me I was an idiot who doesn't know her idioms. This is my new knowledge for the day.
    And Snape has been saying things about her to other patients...because he looooooves her :D She's stuck in his head. Like a bushy-haired tumor.
    “Yes, but you haven’t been spit-roasted.”—Hahahaha!
    And obviously George should be the one feeling up Luna in her bed now that she's getting better. It's the Weasley remedy. Cures what ails you.
    "In side profile, his frown was less visible, he appeared to be focusing on a distant object. Perhaps a memory."—I don't know why I like this so much, but I do.
    "But, then again, at least the way I was, didn’t have me hitting innocent people around the face.”—Feelings can be dangerous like that.
    I liked this whole pond scene. It seems like a turning point for both of them. Hermione is recognizing what she needs and is ready to explore other possibilities. Snape is letting go a little too, admitting he has problems by saying he's willing to work conjointly with her. They're both very honest with each other.
    And it was funny. :)
    Onto the spanking. I quite enjoyed your descriptions. I think you covered a damn good range of reasons for her to find release in the act. Excellent. The trust she found in it was great.("If anything it was caring, as the level of trust was higher than she’d ever allowed before."—Yeeeees.)
    Obviously I liked the part where he made her come too—particularly the writing/visuals.(Favs were: the sound of him stirring her honey pot made it even moreso, Her clitoris and labia were kneaded together in a mash of swollen flesh, she almost couldn’t believe that her own body could make such a racket, He was alternating between massaging her clitoris and rubbing it frantically, and when he started on the next set of rapid-fire jiggling, it pushed her over the edge."
    "I’m going to show you what that level of acceptance and trust had done to your body."—Love this. (Should that be has?)
    I can't wait to see what happens next now that things have all shifted a bit. What will he teach her next? When will George shag Luna? Who will Shaun stalk next? So much left to discover.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Portia on March 23, 2016
    Thanks so much for this amazing story. Cerebral, plot driven, and sensual with more than a touch of mystery. Thanks again.
    Report Review

  • From OracleObscured on March 21, 2016
    I am so addicted to this story. I didn't realize it till I got the the end and said, "Nooooooo. I need more." (Which seems to be a popular phrase for me.)
    This whole chapter was delightfully intriguing.
    So Mollison is a guilty stalker (?). Oddly, it doesn't make me like him less. Who hasn't had an unhealthy obsession they liked to masturbate to? (*cough*AlanRickman*cough*)
    I'm not sure I followed Hermione's logic about accountability. Is she saying that guilt doesn't make you more accountable, it's just skewing your perception until your mind is a twisted distortion that can't see reality?
    If Mollison feels guilty then punish him. Snape might be able to help. Or Hermione could come into her own and take command. I like to think of it as paddle therapy.
    The part with Dennis was interesting on several levels. He's moving right along. He took the lead in their hike, he took an active role in physically helping her, he discussed his mother and his own issues honestly and succinctly. “When you love someone, you let them use you in the ways they need to. (Ooooooo. Foreshadowing.) "Being useful, needed by a person can be part of who you are, like your identity. (Starfish boy.) And when I finally left home, when I did it for myself, to give myself the space I needed, I felt like I’d lost something and that I’d betrayed her. (Good thing Snape taught him the lost song.) I still feel guilty." (He needs sex therapy too. Probably not from Snape. :) And probably not a spanking. He needs to fuck somebody and be his own man. So many choices.)
    Her correlation of Dennis's comments with Snape was masterful. There's too much goodness for me to pick it all apart.
    "Maybe he didn’t have trouble using people he didn’t care about."—Baaaaaah! How can she be so dense? When has he ever given the impression that he didn't care about anyone? You don't help people if you don't care. Just because people maintain a safe distance doesn't mean they don't care. It usually means they care too much. (Empathy is a confounding bitch like that.)
    The fear of rejection part of her musings seemed logical, but she still has this warped vision of him.
    The session with Snape was interesting too.
    "I left because I was confident you could find your own way back.”—Tricky. But she doesn't get it. She says he's avoiding the question, but she just wasn't listening to the answer. ("I thought I explained that last night?"—This is a statement not a question. Switch to a period.)
    Even when he blatantly tells her that her focus on him is distracting her own growth and negating the point of their "arrangement," she still doesn't catch on.
    Then, with what little she has probably guessed right about him, she proceeds to pry out a bit of the truth. I think she's right about his fears of rejection, but I think she's wrong about why he's doing it. And I don't know if denial is quite the right word, but it's close. I think he knows very well why he does the things he does. He may not want to talk about it, but that doesn't mean he's unaware. He is obviously fucked up, and she could help him...if she weren't so fucked up and blind. Maybe she'll be able to help him if he can help her find herself like he did with Dennis (and Sarah...and Jaeger/Katherine). Oh shit. He's helping everybody find themselves. That's bloody genius. I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that he'd helping her find herself so she'll be good enough to actually help him get better. (I don't know if he's conscious of that desire of not. I'm going to guess not, since he's so resistant and angry when she hits on something true.) Now I'm curious if he's done something to make Lynch find his own truth (and stop obsessing over Hermione). But what about Ellory? Is she just a pawn, or is something else going on?
    “I don’t deserve anything,” he spat, before rising from his chair and storming out.—Oooooo (I'm feeling Frankish tonight). Someone just showed his hand. :) (And take out that comma after spat.)
    I can't tell if Snape is using Ellory and Sarah to punish Hermione for getting too close to his secrets, or if he's still just helping Sarah (and doing god knows what with Ellory) and is just pushing her with the jealousy.
    And now Emily is Luna. WTF? I didn't see that coming at all. Was she just going to keep her identity a secret the whole time? Why did they think her name was Emily in the first place? Did she tell them that?
    "she’d also revealed that she’d managed to get a few hours’ sleep and was interested in taking up meditation."—Gee, I wonder who that sounds like :) I fucking love Luna, so you can mould me into her as much as you like.
    "She’d found the woman to be extremely insightful and an excellent listener and, to some extent, confidant."—If Luna/Emily starts compulsively masturbating and singing, you're just going to have to start calling her Oracle. :)
    ( and now the raw pink scars scoring her pale face, shocked her all over again.—Take out the comma between face and shocked.)
    "...tears trickling down the chaotic rivulets of her cheeks."—I love this description. Chaotic rivulets.
    So I take it Snape knew it was Luna. But for how long? (BTW, don't capitalize love.) And how long has he been helping her? (Once again he has helped someone find themselves.) Now I'm dying for backstory even more. What the hell is going on?
    While I don't know if Hermione was hitting him to protect Emily/Luna or because she was jealous (or both), I found the scene enthralling nonetheless. He has no visible reaction, but I'm dying to know what he's really thinking. Is he pissed off? Is he impressed by her passion? So much drama :)
    I definitely need more.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Maral on March 20, 2016
    Ahhhhh, what a cliffhanger! Emily is Luna????
    Thanks for the beautiful chapter. I loved the sensitive characterisation (especially Dennis). I'm looking forward to read more.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - LeWyKi on March 19, 2016
    Wow, it's only been two weeks and you're 6 chapters further in this story, already - I am impressed!
    And happy to have something new to read on my first free day in a while. My thesis project is coming along quite well: I've been planning a little perception experiment and it is now just about ready to go online :-) The theoretical writing part will fall into the next two weeks, while everyone can take part in my listening test and afterwards I can evaluate the results - In short: All is going according to plan.
    Reading The Count ist still just that, a plan for when I finally have the time to read and concentrate - but I'm working on that.
    As to your story - I am finding myself more and more confused. For one I'm really not good with new names (that is just one more reason to read fanfic - not so many unknown characters), which results in me constantly thinking along the lines of "Wait, wasn't she the one who...no, that doesn't work. Hmmmm."
    Also, how can Hermione be a sex therapist without actually knowing and understanding the subject in all its facets? At least, how could she have been successful, so far? Another point I can't get out of my mind is, why is starfish boy actually there? Did he have an agenda coming there or was he really tricked/persuaded? I think it rather likely that he might have some issues that need solving - and real therapy, not (just) massages or hypnosis (which obviously didn't work, anyway). I do find it his advice and methods interesting and quite clever, of course, but if he needs therapy himself, what exactly is he doing? Does he know himself well enough that his "helping" the other patients and H. is beneficial to him as well? Or is he (in my opinion the more likely option) in denial? And perhaps trying to evade the only person with the intelligence to actually be able to give him what healing he needs without being constantly outwitted? While it is true, that psycholoists may sometimes need help themselves, why does he offer that help? Doesn't H. feel like a hippocrite now, for sending the other 2 away? And finally, did either of those 2 really think, they and/or the other could keep this arrangement detached and professional? Okay, he, maybe - he is practiacally a therapist, already, while she's got the title. But on her side, I believe, that would me more denial. Then again, she did acknowledge her own jealousy (finally, she has behaved like it almost from the beginning).
    Oh, and I really like George in this story :-)
    Well, that is all my unstructured mind can think up, for now. And, as ever, I will be waiting for new chapters.
    Have a nice weekend!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Maral on March 19, 2016
    Dear writer,

    I just want to say THANKS for this wonderful, complex Story. I love how Snape turns the table on Hermione.I gotta read with a dictionary, because I'm not a native speaker. But It's so worth the effort. Can't wait to read more!

    Greatings from Germany!
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!