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From OracleObscured on March 18, 2016
Oh sweet lord, yes! I loved this chapter. And I'm not sure why. Perhaps I'll figure it out as I write this. Oh, and yes, Lecter does sound like Snape. I often think of Lecter when writing "serious" Snape lines. And no I didn't notice that you weren't cursing in this story. See how observant I am? I'm too immersed in the story to notice such things. It would probably seem odd if you did. (Cursing's not very fucking professional, it it?)
I liked the whole first bit with her reflections on her uncontrollable arousal when in his presence. Been there. (Although my arousal is cued by talent, most notably of the music and acting variety. Auditions were always surprisingly erotic for me. Damn tricky boys with their voices and crotches.) (and had been on the receiving end more times that she could remember.--than she could remember.)
"and perceive it intellectually, adding to its value as a tool that might be employed with greater precision and, hopefully, more beneficial outcomes in the future..."�So she's kind of got a mixture of personal and professional growth going on now. Almost there. He's told her several times that it's all about her; when will she see that the point of this isn't to be a better therapist? That that will come naturally when she's more whole as a person.
"He was so accepting of other people�s diverse sexualities. She sighed deeply. Everyone, it seemed, except hers." *Snort* You have to have some sexuality before he can accept it.
The scene with George was, once again, fabulous. Carefree and follicularly abandoned might be one of my favorite lines this time. I like how she's already loosening up. The hair is coming down and she's a bit freer.
And I'm loving Sarah's poem (which could be about a lot of things). I see Hermione is still jumping to conclusions and letting jealousy skew her perceptions.
And in wonderful contrast to Sarah's poem we have George's Sprout limerick. God, I love limericks. :)
And then on the touching/serious side we go back to Creevy and his "lost song," which is obviously helping him find himself. Wonderful. And Hermione is already seeing him differently. The Snape sex therapy is paying off.
I found the staff meeting very interesting. First there's the bit about Spout, and then there's the bit about Sarah going into the woods (which Hermione is shaken by, but I see as a continuing attempt to ground herself). Then Ellory drops the bomb about Snape's massage therapy session and there's the whole part with Lynch being short with Hermione and Hermione freaking out. Very, very interesting. Was Snape's "release" the "handiwork" of Ellory, or just a natural outcome of his relaxation? Is Lynch no longer enamored of Hermione now that she's getting "therapy" from Snape? Is he jealous, or has she lost her mystique?
And then you end the scene with �Do not mistake our �arrangement� for a relationship,� he hissed. �I will give and receive, to and from, whom I wish. And never attempt to make me fit into your narrow view of the world.� Damn! Harsh. For Hermione that is. But she should know to keep things professional. (But I know she's becoming emotionally involved in all this. She can't separate the two. But maybe he knows that too.)
I loved the whole ending scene. I see the fire as representative of her passion. And, surprise surprise, she runs away from it. But Snape is there to keep her from fleeing too far. He becomes the therapist again, reminding her what her jealousy really means, and suggesting a way for her to cope with her burgeoning feelings. And then he fucks her against the tree, which was incredibly hot and well-written (...his iron cock shining in the light of the Lumos spell.--Loved it!). I assume he's trying to ground her too. She's in her head too much and not enough in her body. Sarah should share the secrets of the forest with her.
But Snape's cracking a little too. He may have called things off early, but he's enjoying her awakening. I'm curious to see how far he takes their relationship, because no matter how hard she tries, I don't know if she can open up all the way unless he breaks down some of his "professional" boundaries. "This is not about me," No? You're completely without feeling on the situation? Starfish boys have feelings, hence the reason they help. Is Snape in denial too? (Or just stubborn?)
I can't wait for the next chapter. You didn't talk about Emily much this time. I'm still jonesing for backstory :)
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From ANON - Ice Empress on March 18, 2016
Simply magnificent. As a student of behavior who is interested in psychosexual disorders and how their effects can manifest this story is wonderful to me. I adore how the old adage that every good psychologist needs one themselves. Admittedly I sneered at Dr.Ellory, but she made good points. The Hermione we know is very rigid and while she might be enlightened with sexual mentality, sexual physicality flusters and is somewhat alien to her. Her handling of the Dominant/submissive sexual activities shows her bias of assisting sexual fetishes that are out of her comfort zone. She herself is guilty of sensual projection and that causes her to retreat into denial. Personally I believe it would have been her time to shine and to broaden her horizons by listening and perhaps doing a group session with the duo. Severus is amazing because with his history he is able to manipulate and categorize. Forget Potions Master, he is a Behavior Master. Knowing and accepting behavior and what it might mean to others and us is very different. He knows his flaws and accepts them while Hermione locks them away under the guise that makes life easier and adopting a cool, unaffected countenance that boards on severely repressed. It is always easier to focus on others' issues than to bring forth perzo al ones. The new wahs of thinking tbst Severus has her engaging in is poetry in motion. Please,keep up the phenomenal work.
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From OracleObscured on March 18, 2016
I always forget to respond to your A/N. I've remembered this time. Hahaha! I did know Raspail's name without looking it up (Garden variety manic-depressive, Tedious. Very tedious. Best thing for him really. His therapy was going nowhere.) I did have to look up how to spell it though. I never knew if it was Ras-pail or Ras-spell.
Yay, more yummy sex scenes. Sir Snape suits my tastes just fine.
I love this opening scene with George. I need the comic-relief/sweetness. �Why? Does it have words?� made me snort. The whole back and forth was great. �I�m not sure of whom you refer but she does sound like someone with taste.� Too true. I know what else she has a taste for. :)
Moving on from my George/Emily campaign, I liked the whole ear and Fred-loss part of the conversation. A nice heartfelt moment before the sexual games begin.
Then we jump right into the continued dismantling of Hermione. �In your bedroom . . . Now.� Mmmmmm, that�s my kind of Snape. I freaking love this whole sex scene. Making her get off with his hand is hot and diabolical. This has to be one of my favorite ideas of yours. I also love the part about keeping her shirt on so the focus is on her pussy. That's brilliant. I've never thought of it that way but that is why wearing some clothes can make you feel more naked than wearing no clothes; it highlights the missing element even more.
You already know how much I love saying "yes, sir"; so you've already won me over on that front.
"They would have some power over her? They could use it against her? She would be vulnerable to blackmail, to betrayal?"�This is such an interesting train of thought, and says a lot about the character. I can't tell if these are really her fears or if if they are projections of her fears. She's not focused on the personal humiliation per se; she seems to be seeing it from an almost professional standpoint. The fears aren't centered around her feelings or anxiety about what he'll think of her, but around how it will be used against her. I don't know what that really means. (Avoidance?) Her fears are legitimate, but she not seeing the deeper possibilities (good and bad). She does see that sharing the experience of vulnerability will help her empathize with her patients, but she's missing the emotional connection to that vulnerability.
But then she can't get herself off without touching him because she feels disconnected, which suggests that, even if only subconsciously, she does sense the emotional aspect. She's searching for a sense of safety and emotional support (literally holding his hand to take her first steps).
(not only her core, but her thighs, back, buttocks and abdomen started to clench ready for take-off. --Comma between clench and ready.)
I like how he made her taste herself. It seems to be a pretty common opinion (even among those less uptight than Hermione) that sexual fluids are gross (and you've already heard my rants on how disturbing I find that sentiment, so I won't go into again). Being open sexual means that you are open to all senses being immersed in the experience, and that includes taste. Denying that sense is a denial of pleasure. Snape agrees with me and tries to explain it to her with "...when you desire your own desire..." That is a great line. Hermione does not desire her own desire (yet). She doesn't even seem know what her desires are. She's a passenger, an audience, of her own sexuality, passively observing her life without ever getting her hands "dirty."
I had to read the part about "What desire are you trying to express?" several times to follow what he was trying to say. I forgot the theme of the day's lesson (that her core was to be the center of her attention). I think my slowness was influenced by own predilection for finger sucking. If Snape asked me if I was sucking his fingers for my arousal or his, I'd honestly have to say both. (But I concede that I wouldn't have been focused on my core.)
Obviously I loved the ending. The descriptions were fabulous, and who doesn't love an oral finale. Bravo. And it rewarded her vulnerability with pleasure and breaking down her walls even more. Tricky.
Now that I've gotten my sex fix, I'm dying to know what's happening to everyone else. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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From ANON - lovey_reader on March 16, 2016
That's it! I need therapy too! Cause that was HOT!!!
Okay...
I really liked the whole " the bath" conversation. I especially loved that when he left the wood that he was whittling was a butterfly. That was beautiful.
By the way, I just wanted to say how much I appreciate the names of your chapters. With Grape juice and this one the titles and the title of the story all correlate. I think it's BRILLIANT!
I can't wait for more therapy, I mean the next chapter.
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From OracleObscured on March 16, 2016
Mmmmmm. Tasty therapy.
Now to start back at the beginning so I don't forget anything. I'm curious about Emily's backstory, so I'm looking forward to her therapy. Why is she all burned up? (BTW, "Are you sleeping,� she asked quietly...�should have a question mark in it.) I'm going to continue to cheer for George's help for her (also finally remembered to ask is George's ear missing? Or were you not going canon on that bit?)I also feel for Emily's sleep problems (as I'm sure you do too).
I'm not sure which scene was my favorite�the sex scene or the "bath" scene. I love the whole calm, carving, meditative Snape. I like their ideas (or your ideas) for Mollison and the mirror. I liked their discussion about Sarah, and his explanation of receiving gratification from it. His response about avoiding attachment by dressing like a farm hand cracked me up.
I'm enjoying Hermione's self-realization as the story progresses. She's trapped herself in a box that is slowly shrinking. She wants to break free, to be a better/more open version of herself. The psychological sword fight with her own wants and shortcomings keeps me on the edge of my seat. His decision to take all control from her by not offering her an out is the kind of extreme abandon she needs to break through her self-imposed barriers. Obviously this would dangerous with anyone NOT a Legillimens or anyone with questionable motives; but I think he's proven that he does have good intentions and that he does know what he's doing.
And now we get to Lynch's secret. I suspected lust due to his visceral reaction and horror, but having your heart outed would be equally horrifying (especially if you're married).
"The world twisted and warped around her like a kaleidoscope." This was one of my favorite writing parts.
I love the butterfly symbolism. (But now I can't stop thinking about Benjamin Raspail's head in SotL and hearing Anthony Hopkins asking "Was it butterfly?" I know. I'm fucked up.)
Then you end with this aggressively wonderful sex scene. Honeyed baritone was a wonderful description. Besides the carnal delight of reading this, I very much like how his opening move with her was to force her to witness and face up to her own desire/arousal. For someone who spends so much time denying her sexuality, this is a brilliant way to not only keep her from hiding but also to keep her focused on her own animal abandon. (He delved in, rhythmically�take out this comma.) I feel like she thinks sex should fit into this narrow definition of what she thinks is proper/acceptable, but sex is messy and wild (two things that are anathema for any asexual, perfectionist, control freak); it's never neat and tidy, it's spontaneous and resistant to societies rules. Looking at it from that perspective, it's easy to see why she has such an aversion to anything kinky. Missionary is predictable and safe; doggie style leaves you vulnerable to the unknown. And she seems to avoid vulnerability like the plague (which isn't surprising given her past). Her rigid rules come into play with that idea too. She does like vulnerability when it fits with what she deems acceptable (Sarah and Emily and Creevy). But when Calder uses vulnerability in a sexual situation, she freaks out. As long as she feels sympathy for the person's plight, she's okay with it.
So now Snape can help her see that there's more than one way a person might experience vulnerability. Sometimes you have to embrace it to find freedom. (Your last "yes" has one single quotation mark and one regular.)
You know I can't wait for more. I want to see what he does to her next, but there are so many other little stories going on I want to know what happens to everyone else. And I want to see how her shifting perception changes her professional approach. So much to look forward to.
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From ANON - Bell on March 13, 2016
Interesting story so far! I look forward to were this goes next.
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From TenderQuaintWitch on March 13, 2016
Well, let me start off with this: Guess who's not anonymous any longer? And at this point I've got five chapters to review because I was slacking waiting to get my account up and running again. I think this could be my favorite story so far; do I say that every time you start a new one? It seems to me your writing style is totally different with this story. That's pretty impressive. The set up is great here--impersonal, inexperienced sex therapist gets thrown in the deep end and is (presumably going to be) rescued by a patient that is better at her job than she is (this is kind of the trend I'm seeing in chapters 4 and 5). That has to hurt a girl's ego.

I'm no fan of Ellory (not that she's not written brilliantly, just a personal dislike), however she has a fabulous name and hypnosis is fascinating. I'm loving George--the idea of him using some sort of humor therapy on Snape makes me feel like there could be a whole other story written... anyway, that "Why would I need a man when I've got you?" made me actually snort.

I find it interesting that "after all this time" Hermione is still marginally terrified of Snape. It is totally pavlovian. And enjoyable. One expects she'd have grown up a bit more than that, the fact that she hasn't adds a nice layer to the story.

So, some of my favorite moments:
Helium Gum, obviously.
"she knew enough of his history--his sexual humiliation as a student and unrequited love for Lily Evans," I somehow think she doesn't know as much as she thinks she does.
"She sometimes wondered if this bubble of sanity they were attempting to create was, for some clients, nothing more than a half-way house for a soul already on its way out of this world." DAMN.
Insubstantial case file, eh?
Mr. Quidditch and the Museum of Abominations--Snape's humor is priceless.
"I found him to be... enigmatic." You don't say.

This is getting really long and I need to pack it in--I can't wait to see what happens next.
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From ANON - lovey_reader on March 13, 2016
Man I love this story! It's like everything is in reverse. Hermione is the stoic one rigid, unfeeling while Severus is the one going around and helping everyone the only way he knows how. This is AWESOME!
If I stop talking for a while, can he do therapy for me too? That seems like the bestest therapy ever.
I am so curious as to what Calder said to him? Are we going to find of soon? Until next time...
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From OracleObscured on March 13, 2016
Yeeeeees! So Hermione's seen some of the light now. And she wants Snape to help her. Very interesting.
I loved the scene between Sarah and Snape. Unlike Hermione I knew exactly what he was doing ( I think I need some similar sessions). That's sexual therapy.
And the scene was just fucking hot. I don't know if you planned it or not (I suspect you did), but although Hermione was appalled by what she saw, as the reader, I wasn't. Maybe I just like Sarah, but unlike Ellory, I felt no indignant fury that Snape wasn't with Hermione. Of course we're made to feel protective of Sarah, so it's no surprise that when she has this "oral" breakthrough, I'm in her corner. (And was I the only one answering Hermione's "isn't this the same as Calder and Jaeger" question with a loud no? They were worlds apart in intention...but I didn't see either as wrong.)
Then Hermione and Severus have the enlightening conversation/argument, and that was great too. It's clear that he's trying to push her to overcome her own issues now. And I'm guessing he wanted her to see him with Sarah to push the impending revelation out into the open. Sneaky Snape.
Hermione is finally being honest with herself. She obviously has some serious sexual repression. (Or possible trauma? Puking is a pretty violent reaction to a sudden sexual revelation about oneself.) For a sex therapist she's awfully judgmental towards Calder and Jaeger (but more Calder...which is probably because of her hidden feelings about Snape; but she also seems repulsed by the idea of submission, which I would think would be a red flag for a sex therapist since they're taught to not judge anyone's kink.)
I liked the piano bit at the end too. Very nice solidification of her suspicions that Snape is more starfish boy than sexual deviant.
I liked the opening part with George and Emily too, and it contained one of my favorite lines, �Sometimes I go for a whole day without feeling myself.�
But my favorite bit of writing this time was "His words hung in the air between them like the dark mark after Morsmordre." Excellent.
I'm eager to see how Snape "helps" Hermione. So many possibilities.
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From OracleObscured on March 13, 2016
I enjoyed the opening scene. I like the whole power play between Hermione and Severus. And I like how complicated Snape is as a patient. Not just the sarcastic dismissal of institution rules (which I love), but the conflicting persona he presents to Hermione. He's like one of the staff rather than a patient. He's smart and understands what's going on with the other patients, but he's also irreverent and difficult rather than totally helpful. For instance, he obviously cares about his roommate and is disturbed by his suffering, but he also goes along with Calder's flirting in what I can only guess is an attempt to rile Hermione. He's not cold and heartless, but he is playing a game. And he avoids her question about whether he wants to return to Hogwarts, redirecting her attention to Mollison; which just makes me more curious about his mindset. Is he pissed off that his motives are in question after risking his life for so many years? I would be. Is he reluctant to return to a school where so many bad memories have played out for him? Or is he just ambivalent about life? (I think fucking Hermione would reaffirm his desire for life :))
And then there was the whole bit about what did he say to Lynch. So I'm guessing Lynch's thoughts were of a sexual nature. Which makes me wonder what Snape said to freak him out so much. Did he threaten to reveal his fantasies? Even if they were criminally perverse, did Lynch think a sex therapist would be that surprised by something as common as a fantasy about a co-worker. Or is he just worried it would ruin their working relationship?
Then there was the bit about Creevy, which took the whole scene in an obliquely sexual direction. (The Master Oedipus line cracked me up.) He's, once again, making her talk about her sexuality (and drawing attention to his own via Calder). He already knows she's jealous of Calder, so he knows she's attracted to him. Is he trying to leave her self-conscious about her appearance by pointing out her attire? Is that just to torture her, or is he throwing the therapy back at her so she'll analyze her own sexuality? Is he motivated by selfish reasons (fucking her) or is the starfish boy? If I have to go by what I've seen so far, he is the starfish boy but in the most irreverent way possible.
Like most things dealing with Snape, I suspect his motives could be a complicated compilation: he does want to fuck her, but "rescuing" her is equally important to him.
I don't want Ellory massaging Snape (that's Hermione's job). But if she does, I hope Snape humiliates her in some way. Favorite line this time was "Ellory pulled a face as if she had just popped a piece of buttered turd into her mouth." Classic. And then Hermione wonders why she's relieved Ellory was denied her request. I hope Snape makes her realize her latent sexuality soon. Denial is no way for a sex doctor to survive.
�Degrade?� Ellory blinked. �Perhaps you should ask her if she found it degrading or erotic before you apply your own judgements.��Finally Ellory says something I can agree with.
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From ANON - lovey_reader on March 12, 2016
You don't just write sex beautifully you also do pain well too. My heart just went out to Emily. You can just imagine the pain and heartache for this poor girl. When she mentioned the cooking, I didn't know whether I wanted to throw up or cry. I think I did a little bit of both actually. That is not an image one forgets. Her anguish just reaches into your heart,grips it real tight and then twists. Argh.
You know at first I was like where's the heat? Usually by now there's some tension and mind blowing sex, but I am really liking that there isn't. It's so much more in depth. You're really getting into the psyche with this one. We're covering all kinds on the spectrum here. Pain, fear, jealousy, laughter, loneliness, grief, I could go on. I can't wait for what's next!!
BTW,the flower vase joke was absolutely priceless.
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From OracleObscured on March 12, 2016
This chapter was very interesting. I liked learning about some of the other patients. I'm enjoying all this set up. Something is going to happen, and I'm dying to know what. What will be the igniting spark? How is she going to deal with Snape? Why won't Sara talk? How did Emily get burned? (Or have you already told us and I forgot?) What did Snape say to Lynch? How long is he going to play along with Katherine's flirt routine? (And why is he playing along? Is he trying to make Hermione nuts? That sounds like him.) (And stop modeling characters after me :D I don't flirt. I'm missing that gene.)
My favorite scene this time was Snape grabbing Lynch. I have no idea why. Perhaps just the excitement of the moment. Or maybe I'm turned on by the mystery of what he said.
And it sounds like Hermione's jealous of Katherine. When will she admit to herself that her visceral reaction to his person is sexual attraction?
I also liked George's joke. I haven't heard that one before. And I like George. I kinda want to fuck him. (What's your diag-nonsense, Dr Granger? Promiscuous? Looking for a care taker? Escaping reality with literary men? Guilty :))
Or maybe I just want him to find a woman. I know one who needs some Weasley love. (Not me, Emily.) I know it would be unethical to screw a patient, but I want them both to have some fun.
I had three favorite writing parts this time.
-"Trying to open up someone who could expertly thrust and parry, before stabbing you between the ribs with your own argument, required both the mental agility to tap-dance along that sword edge..."
-�Well, whoever�s flocking has got a flocking screw loose,� muttered Hermione.
-"her white dress blooming around her like the translucent bell of a jellyfish."
I'm so looking forward to the next installment.
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From ANON - Robin on March 07, 2016
Wow, you are full of surprises.
This story has a complete different tone and structure ... melody ... to it than your other stories.
I'm looking forward to reading more chapters on that and see how the story evolves.
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From OracleObscured on March 07, 2016
I enjoyed the scene between Jaeger and Hermione to start off this chapter. It's not only interesting just from a psychological viewpoint, but it's also setting the tone of her work before you introduce Severus. Clever girl.
The masturbation accusation cracked me up and made me hate Ellory even more. Marvelous combination. Is that bitch hot for Severus? (Doesn't she know that Snape and Hermione belong together? :D)
The tension between Hermione and Snape was great. I loved how he went on the offensive and took on the role of therapist by using her own psych-speak against her. He's toying with her. Cat and mouse. And he knows just what to say to cut her the deepest. His insults are pinpoint in their accuracy. I also like how he's managed (or you've managed) to build sexual tension without talking about anything overtly sexual. Just the mention of her sexuality is suggestive when they're in such a dynamic situation.
I loved how she used the allegory to illustrate her point and throw him off his game.
I don't want to ruin any storytelling by stating my suspicions here, but I'll email you in a minute. I see lots of possibilities for Snape to make growth in this story.
Can't wait for the next installment :)
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From OracleObscured on March 07, 2016
Since you wrote a different kind of story, I'm going to give you different kind of review. I enjoyed the set up, and I'm intrigued by therapist-Hermione (especially sex-therapist-Hermione). Your writing this time seemed very story-centered, which I enjoyed. There was less of me drooling over words (although I still did), and more of me getting lost in the plot. In fact I read it through the first time without even trying to make notes. I wanted to get the full effect without breaking it down. The whole idea is engaging. I think everyone likes to see Hermione in a career where her brain is her greatest asset, so having her be a doctor is excellent. And she's also helping people with her "brain power," another plus.
I like George's part in this too. He offers the tension relief of levity--a much needed skill when faced with mental illness. (And I loved the "why would I need a man when I have you around?" line)
Besides the obvious questions of 'what's going to happen with her and Snape,' there's already some foreshadowing of more. I won't predict here, but I'm already eyeing the other characters.
Now for my rambling musings:
Is Galladon just a word you liked, or does it mean something? Is Ellory just a bitchy quack? I kind of want to spit in her coffee.
Helium gum. You've been watching AR YouTube clips again, haven't you?
Toot, toot indeed. --I loved this.
My favorite bit from a writing perspective was "Now gusts of it plucked at the limbs of saplings waving at her helplessly beyond the glass. If she�d been more maudlin, and she wasn�t far off, it might have struck her as symbolic, premonitory."
I liked the whole part where she was looking out the window at the scenery.
For some reason, I loved the part where Snape hands over his wand by balancing it on his finger; and his line "Or is this, in fact, the aforementioned location, whereupon the abominations in question are a gaggle of former Hogwarts students masquerading as professionals?� was hilarious.
You already got the next chapter up, so I'll see you in the next review.
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