Reviews for Debaucery *Complete*By : Desert_Sea |
Mmmmmm, waterfall Snape. Very tasty. And pronounced. (By the way, bathing in boxers is cheating.) 8P
And now Luna comes to the rescue. You know how much I love Luna. I also love a sexually frustrated Hermione who can't pack her tent. I was snorting the whole time she was trying to shrink her shit. Hopefully Luna's advice will spark a change between Hermione and Severus and they'll (at least) open up a little more. Or maybe they'll just keep spying on each other in the buff. Whatever works. :)
Oh, and lavishaggadelic made me laugh. Excellent word coitus.
I hope Hermione comes soon so she does bust a blood vessel from all the pent up stress. Free the clit!
Ch. 9 - loved the discussion H. and G. had. Very eye-opening and 'true' to H.'s character. The introductio of an Amory Potion is a great plot device - this could be used in many ways to shape this story and although I've a few ideas I as a faithful reader of your tale will leave this to you. I particularly in this chapter enjoyed the stark differences showcased between G. and H. further highlighting her role as a 'calming' and 'virtuous' influence in S.'s grounding. Now, I'd be cautious with my use of 'grounding' however you've painted an overbose image of a sinful and unrepentant S. thus far, and a little guidance back to his true self is necessary. I defintely don't believe that the S. you've created is the 'real' S. and H., due to their vast differences (@thismoment) will help him discover who this is (I actually don't think, based on his working for multiple Masters he has ever had the opportunity to find himself - Oh how I want him to find himself! W/ H. ofcourse - ever the true romantic... XD).
Kudos also on the heartfelt conversation b/w A. and S. as this connects well w/ my understanding that S. is lost. So far! Thumbs-freaking-up! Bring on the field trip.
Ch. 10 - Firstly, I must applaud you on your creation of character consistency. S. and H. are as they were in the first chapters, there's nothing worse than when the characters are so suddenly OOC... this is just perfect. There are obviously minor changes, but this is due to 'external' factors, such as H.'s genuine concern (H.'s awareness of S. and his lack of food). Internal shifts in character imho need to take place over time, due to extrinsic influences. This is pacing itself every well!
Secondly, witness firsthand S.'s capabilities and just being able to enjoy S. in his element fills me with glee! Definitely a man worth saving. I'm a little concerned about the Amory Potion though - H. has no real interest in S. @ this time... what would be her incentive in taking it? Especially since she is fully aware of what the consequences could well be... So much could happen... w/ or w/o the Amory Potion. I am sure though that it is nothing H. would enter into w/o a good and real reason. I'm sure you've some idea - I am keen to see where S. and H. go from here.
I really liked this chapter (and I'm not entirely sure why). It had a little bit of everything in it (maybe that's why): bad boy Snape, humorous internal dialogue, mystery, feels, ass ogling.
Which brings me to my first fav line: so positioning herself directly behind his hypnotic arse was not a good idea.
Hahahahaha! It was a brilliant idea.
My favorite part was Hermione climbing the tree. It wasn't just the pussy clamp rescue maneuver (which I know is The Claw's tamer cousin), it was the cranial foothold that had me cackling. Excellent.
And now there's a dragon (?) mystery as well. I can't wait to see where you take this.
Snape actually adimitted that he has a problem. That's a step in the right direction. If he didn't aknowledge it, there would be no progress at all. It will be a struggle for him to pull himself out of the humongous hole he has dug himself in. There will be temptation everywhere.
Yay catfight! So hoping to see a catfight in a chapter one day. If I was in the Wizarding world, I would be putting bets on the catfights. And eating popcorn and enjoying the fight. (Especially at the Ministry. Sure to spice up a slow workday.)
Since Snape said himself he wasn't used to female company before the conculsion of the the 2nd war, he probably doesn't know to be careful who you screw and where. They may come back to haunt you in the future. Women can be vicious when they're angry!
Love the story. Looking forward to the next chapter~
This is an awesome story and well written. The one thing I didn't like was how OOC Hermione was when the troll showed up. No way she wouldn't have jumped up and fought and then for her to ask how she could help instead of starting to heal him? I just hope she is a little more of the smart and action-based herione we all know and love in the future.
Also, it's all SO SEXY! Can't wait for more. :)
Cue Hermione. (Duh duh daduh!) Snape wanting to change is a whole different can of worms. Very interesting. I love that Ginny's fucking Draco and they're both meddling in Hermione and Snape's lives. Everybody's a little naughty in this one. (Just the way I like it.)
Oh, and I keep forgetting to say I'm loving the chapter titles. Deciphering which two words you've squished together for each chapter is my brief brain-teaser before the reading. (I'm easily entertained.)
Fav lines (and fixes)
(clearing his throat as he clasping his hands enthusiastically--clasped)
(With respect Mr Parsons,--comma before Mr)
Hermione felt the air clotting around her until she could barely draw breath--Clotting made me love this.
watching Hermione slamming around her kitchenette like a pinball.--Unh! Yes! Love the simile.
Dredging a breath from the soles of his boots, he turned the door handle and stepped into the office.--This is how I breathe when I don't sleep.
the finest thread unraveled from the coils of pain wrapped around Snape’s tortured soul.--Love it. And all you need is one thread, and you can dismantle an entire sweater (or heart-shield as it were).
So glad Hermione is not a doormat when she is trying to snape. She won't make much progress if she takes everything he does and say badly. Although he went too far with that choking stunt.
I'm surprised he hasn't catched anything bad from his many encounters. I swear I am waiting for at least one cat fight in this story because of snape's actions. Either between Katie bell n hermione, or other women at hermione's workplace. Screwing coworkers like snape is doing, n some of them want more, is a disaster waiting to happen.
Let's see him try that shit again, Fucker. Dammit Sev she's only trying to help T.T arrrrggghhh. Alright. I'm done. I see how he's won her over but I'm also not sure if Ginny will be able to go near him after our fiery Gryffindor gets her paws in him. Yo. He's got to make up for that choking though. My heart hurts T.T
Sorry for not constantly checking for updates but a 64 chapter story stole me away xD I'll be sure to half and half next time :3
She who dares wins I hope. I mean I can understand him totally enjoying his new status as a sex god but the substance and alcohol abuse has to stop. NOW! Beautifully (witch)!crafted as always and yes you are playing with our sympathies. It is a close one to call but I trust you. So... off on a cruise around the Med this weekend with limited t'internet but I will try and keep updated. Best wishes, Love Ali xxx.
Oh! Snap! Absolutely dug when Hermione revealed the bruises caused by Snape's man handling! I found Snape's reaction telling. There's hope yet!
Still it is tricky:
Snape is engaging in dionysian behaviour - to put it lightly. Primarily to cope. While Hermione may well understand this... His (especially his recent involvement in an orgy), IMHO despicable behaviour - so contrary to Hermione's - makes me wonder how on earth is one to make their coming together believable! So far everything has proven to encourage the belief in the possibility ( she being his salvation )!
While I love a dark and dastardly Snape I too can't help but want to see him with Hermione. Regardless as to his choices... Still, I hope Hermione doesn't make it easy for him in that regard considering. He did... Shag her best friend.... Oh, and nameless/ named others.
Cant wait to see them both evolve further!!!
Yeeeeeeees! I love diabolical Hermione! She out Slytherined the Slytherin. And what will our devious but wounded anti-hero do now? Will the evidence of his own failures show him the error of his ways? Gah! Dirty OO says, "I hope not." But empathy OO says, "Break him, Hermione. He needs help." Once again my pussy and brain are at war with one another.
Whoa....hold the phone! I don't know about anyone else but I felt a delightful shiver of the Hans Grubers in the scene in his office. You know....What idiot put you in charge? Answer : You...when you started destroying yourself! This is wonderfully realistic and they are both totally in character. Hmmmm! Was her body glamoured or just her face? Will he think on that in the future I wonder? I'm almost beginning to feel sorry for him but not just yet. You...sorry...he will just have to convince me...soon!
Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.
No, Hermione, don't go! Snape needs you! Ugh! So much drama.
I loved this chapter just as much as the others (but for different reasons). Snape is so fucked up; maybe I just identify with that.
How will Hermione ever help him? (And if Ginny thinks a sorted out Snape is going to be a better lay, she is sorely mistaken. He'll only be a better stud for whoever helps him.)
I'm dying to know what happens next. 8P <-- This is my Debaucery face.
Hey!
love what you've written so far namely due to the dynamic of the characters. I am a big fan of 'opposites' and the polarity between Severus and Hermione - he being a hedonist and she being virtuous!
i like where the story appears to be heading! Enjoy that S is an unapologetic man-whore at the mo and I can only hope H soothes and 'tames' S - @least a little. XD
excited for what's next!
So you fucking should be..........a wonderful line that conveys perfectly Sev's anger and frustration with his life, his treatment from others, his views on women and himself. Oh and probably another hundred or so different things. So is it Hermione to the rescue? But surely not for herself. I mean that would just be greedy wouldn't it? Lovely storytelling. So fluent and a delight to read. So stop reading this drivel woman and write me loads more. Best wishes, Love Ali xxxxxx.
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