Reviews for The Power of TwinsBy : AquamarieneStardust |
awasome i love the delightful shower scene and where the story is going :) please keep up the wonderful work i cant wail to read more.
Well that was an interesting review you referenced... I don't think the story or characters are predictable at all. I thought the concept of an American Hogwarts that was burnt down because of "Lord baldything" quite clever. And the powerful twin vs normal twin a twist on the the "evil twin" plot line intriguing. I found the earlier story elsewhere so I started reading that one too. I can see clearly improvement and a change in your writing style. Sorry you got a bad review, don't let the haters get you down. You are being creative, improving your skills and I am applauding you as you go. 👏👏👏 Well done!
Half of the twins sound like Mary Sues :/ You havnt said a single bad thing about any of them . I thought for a sec you were only explaining their looks but then you said the one was also brainy so clearly your narator is all-knowing. Which begs the question why you couldnt also mention any negative points. And I dont count short as a negative point. Your reader should be able to identify with your OC's. They need to be human, not overblown ponces that one wants to punch in their pretty mugs :P Plus it would be cooler if the twins didnt mirror each other so much. Why is Nevilles twin dumpy just because he is? Why couldnt Harrys twin be average looking and Nevilles twin be hot? very predictable
well im happy to see you posting again. :)
i really like this new story and am excited to see where it goes from here. we have so many possibalities and im excited to see what comes next for our newly reunited twin, and what havac may come as well! please update soon :)
your devoted fan, Nari-chan
wow really different but good...so hope to see more soon :):):)
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