Reviews for Detention at Headmaster's OfficeBy : hermionesrini |
this is great. please update more
Duh! Missed there was a 2nd chapter and promise of more. Which changes it from a short smut piece, to one still with some good sex but also an interesting plot depth.
Interesting short story and a randy Ginny gets a salient lesson that she can push things too far at time. Even if she seems to have enjoyed it eventually. Plus getting an important job done, albeit one that Snape in this universe wants to happen.
Since you asked for feedback there was one point early on when you switched between 3rd and 1st person. i.e. " Ever since,he became the Headmaster, Ginevra Weasley has been a thorn in my flesh ", which is slightly off-sounding.
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