Reviews for An Hour of SnapeBy : Desert_Sea |
Well I loved your first foray into oneshots. I liked the length (I know, that what she said). I'll have to come back and revisit it recreationally now that I've read it for word pleasure.
I thought the writing was particularly good this round (but I'm not sure what exactly struck my fancy about it). The idea was great and the sex was hot. That's all that's necessary for a successful oneshot. You even got in an emotional twist for both of them. So I think you hit every goal possible.
--Fav parts--
Abstruse--Word notebook.
"trying to dissuade it from vacuum-packing her pussy"--Bahahahaha! Love this so much.
"Less like butterflies and more like randy hornets dive-bombing her uterus,"--Excllent description.
Breech her gusset--I just liked this phrase.
"Picky? Was it picky to desire someone with their own teeth? To insist upon them having less facial hair than himself? To seek an intelligence that surpassed that of a troll, or to crave a level of sexual attraction that didn’t shrivel his gonads to the size of knuts?"--Yes I love this whole thing. Brilliant.
"She licked him. Without warning, she leaned forward and dragged the tip of her tongue from the bridge of his nose, up through the crevice bisecting his eyebrows."--Aaaaaaaand this is where I started uncontrollably laughing.
"Oh my God! It’s huge! Did you know that?” & "Did he know the dimensions of his own cock?"--Can't stop laughing.
"His baritone was so deep it was practically being siphoned up from the soles of his boots."--Unh!
(and so fucking hot he was found himself--I think you want to take out was.)
"this most unusual and impetuous Granger-shaped desk ornament"--I don't know why this amused me so much, but it did.
"his cock tasked with the job of strangling him in his sleep."--This is where I hurt myself snorting.
"nestling his nose into the shallow bed of her bellybutton"--Love this visual and the words chosen. Shallow bed was great.
And don't think I didn't see all those pitches. You can't sneak a pitch by me.
I've been a silent stalker of your stories since I stumbled across them a few months ago, and haven't left you a review yet *blush* I hope my review counts in spurring you to keep writing.
You have such lovely plots; this particular one left me laughing more than it aroused, but it was a good thing. I can't really understand Hermione being driven to pay someone for sex though, and hopefully you could explain it better with another chapter?
Something new! Finally!!!
Thank you for making me happy, happy puppy :D
I do like the story, but I have to confess you spoiled me with your other works. This is, for my taste, too short. And that is my only complaint.
Waiting patiently for something new, and preferably longer (I know that is not fair to you, but I'm spoiled fan ;) ) soon! XOXO
You're too good at this. But I'm not complaining.:)
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