i hope she gets pregnant and I hope no one overheard this... that would be awkward.

You are aware that I had to read this chapter twice aren't you? Only for the sake of research mind...and not because I am some sort of kinky, lustful pervert who can't get enough of this smut. Oh no...I'm a good lass. But my dear....engorging her clitoris....my god girl where do you get your ideas from? Not that I'm complaining...just curious is all.

BTW...not only did my computer burst into flames at all this hot rudery (is that a word?) but I myself actually spontaneously combusted and am now a pile of ash sitting on my chair. I do hope Sev uses me as some floo powder.

Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.......honestly great stuff and I sort of got the chapter right!

DS,

I hereby declare that Desert_Sea has my permission to steal and use any/all of my phrases she likes, at any point from now on.

Fox ;-)

My goodness, this chapter (13) was so hot! My favourite moment was when she was standing naked in darkness... waiting -the anticipation! Plus, of course, the whole "letting go" and "giving up the control" I totally understand that...

Last night I received my first proper spanking... I cried, it was wonderful. First, I loved the sound of it, then the burn, then tingling and in the end warmth and boneless freedom. Oracle will be proud, she got me interested in spanking by her stories :-) 

Funny how giving up control in one part of life, changes perspective so completely in others.

I won't forget either.

Great, great chapter (although head banging -little too much for me ;)

Fox xx

Oooh. Well then xD ah.. review responses.. let's see. Depends on hers or my mood, instead of it being her in the story, its a bunch of oc's she's made for each fandom I write xD for instance with FFXV, Shin dates Noct xD but Shin is also related to Gladio xD so stuff such as that. I know I sound ungrateful for having an encouraging person supporting my writing, I just.. I'm not a writer xD I'm more of a reader...But anyway xD the gigantic clit freaked me out, just a little but I still read it xD Yasssss I love Sev taking control. Hehe, he reminded me of a wraith when he was doing all the teasing foreplay xD 

Thanks for writing! :D

Oh, holy fucking hell. This was so freaking hot. I'll have to go hose myself down after breakfast.

Favs and fixes--

(In all honesty, she was quite confident he’d already made it, she was struggling to draw breath after all.--Change the comma after it to an em dash.)

Something was roughly pushed into her mouth. His thumb. Trapping her tongue. Her words turned into grunts and then into silence.--Unnnnh! 

A warmth fluttered against her lips. Breath. His breath. And then lips, brushing, passing by once, twice, before they held, the slightest moisture adhering to hers but still barely perceptible.--I loved this whole bit. The anticipation was palpable.

sensual acupuncturist.--:) Love this.

Only his vibration remained, a trace of potent energy that she could almost taste.--Yeeeeees. Excellent.

(The cool wood touch her clitoris.--Touched?)

his tongue going one-on-one with her clitoris—and clearly winning.--This made me laugh. And it was hot. Brilliant.

The whole head thumping on the desk bit was hilarious and infuriating. If someone did that to me, I might have to cut off his dick while he slept. (But if it was Snape/AR, and he made me come twice, I'd be lenient.)

She was being compacted--I know this was a serious moment for her, but it made me smile because it's such a great description. I have often felt compacted in certain positions, but alas, the word was not on the tip of my tongue.

And his intention was to stop her from undermining the process, to trust him to know what to do. It was entirely foreign but it was a . . . huge . . . fucking . . . relief.--I loved this whole revelation (including the parts I didn't paste). This is even more of an escape for the both of them. She gets to let go, and he gains some semblance of control (which is obviously in short supply when you're a pawn for two chess masters).

Okay. I'm ready for your curveball now. Throw it at me. (I smell a wet fish slap on the horizon.)

Oooooooo, Snape's gonna be mad. (Or more likely hurt--setting back their growth and stabbing a huge spike through their cautious camaraderie.)

I enjoyed the change of pace with the spin the bottle scene. Everything has been so heavy and life-or-death. But this was more innocent--just a bit of light hormone-driven teenage fun.

But jeez, what a contrast to Snape's life. He's risking his life (and balls) to keep Harry alive, and Harry's safe and warm back in his common room playing spin the bottle (with Snape's lifeline no less). What a head fuck.

Fav bits (besides Snape's)

"malaise of rotting guilt "

"before delivering what looked like a saliva transfusion"--Bahahahaha!

Whoops Hermione....Busted! And does he sound pissed off or what? But you know if he manned up a bit and gave her a thorough good snogging followed by the rogering of her life, they might learn to get along a lot better. I understand her conflict in that she sees her enjoyment during the "act" as some sort of personal betrayal of her ideals and morals especially as there is a war going on. In my opinion however she should accept it as a perk of the job. No doubt easier said than done as there didn't appear to have been any sort of attraction before they had to engage in this manner. On a serious note your prose and writing style is brilliant. And so from a balmy, tropical, unseasonably warm (albeit wet) 13C in Lancashire..... Best wishes, Love Ali xxxxx.

Ahh cliffhanger!! What is next for these too? Love your writing style, can't wait for more.

I need to return her to you soon.  - 2 more days and my work is done, I will more than welcome her return ;)

Wow, I love your reviews but I don’t want them to take up so much of your time. -  Don't worry, it usually takes me just a couple of minutes, but the last one - I was working, so I'd write sentence, then return to the part of my report I was mulling about so it took me longer, much, much longer than usual. But I'm glad that you are not bored with my essays, ups reviews :D Each time I plan to leave just a short note and end up with leaving you War and Peace. 

Are you referring to my other fics? - Ooooo yesssss :D I meant it more as a joke ;) - I love your "water" scenes ;)

He’s damaged goods, no matter what front he adopts, it’s always there. - I know, and I feel awful for saying this but...would we all loved him so much if he isn't damaged goods? 

This time I'll try to keep it short.

I admire the mastery you used to explain such a simple yet so complex notion as falling in love or enjoy in things that go against reason. And ofc she had to degrade to emotional turmoil, teenagers >.< When I read that letter of hers, I could smash mymonitor :S

And then, there is he - all banged up and broken. I nearly started to cry :'( 

Spin the bottle game, I won't even comment XD But Snape showing  up when she had to kiss Harry - you are devious! Are you trying to destroy him completely? Evil!!! 

“Miss Granger. I believe we had an . . . appointment?” - the scales are tipping again, will we have now her expecting the orgasm and him refusing to provide one? 

This chapter was true emotional rollercoaster, I truly hope you have another chapter ready and that you are going to put us (well, me) out of misery soon. Chewing my nails now  XD 

Until the next chapter XX

DS,

Chapter 12.

So our lovely Caring Hermione morphed into Stubborn Hermione, plagued by horrible dreams. Dreams, which seem to circle primarily around her guilt. She turns stubborn just when Snape gets badly hurt, I can only imagine what an amazing guilt fertiliser that will be...

I hate it, when Snape gets hurt. I'm displeased.

I think, you do it on purpose, you gave me (ok us) a chapter, not only with as little info as possible, but also with a painful cliffie! All the info in this chapter is pretended! Most questions unanswered! You are a merciless tease. 

And Sna-ape is jea-lous... hahahaha

Ohh and Drake is right, good cock is a cure for almost anything, especially headache, I know, I tried.

Waiting for more. 

Fox xx

Ooooooh... someone got better quick. Hm... bet Harry feels just a light bit disappointed now x3 looks like someone else is out for our bookworm xD 

Attatcheddd... woop! Least no unnecessary pain, yea? Now thinking back on it, my feelings would be hella hurt if I couldn't get whoever I was having sex with hard -nervous laugh- hahaa.. yup.

-laughs maniacally- that's  fucked up xD maybe he should have went to the american girl anyway?  Wonder how Hermione will feel about this xD (Shit, I'd feel a bit awesome, though I hope he doesn't turn resentful...)

Sev, dressed up, is delish. I always figure him to be pretty lean, can't be slipping into cracks and crevices to spy like he does(or at least, how I think) xD

Yaaaaaaayyy!!! She's not being so terribly mean anymore xD this is going to be a long review.. 

alright, so when I was younger I tried to write some fanfics myself, felt that I sucked at it, and quit xD then my roommate and best friend of lile 8 years, starts bugging me a year or two ago about writing her some FanFiction specifically. I'll say sure... and write two sentences to a paragraph or more and then stop xD and she would still ask and guilt me on not writing the fanfic for her xD. But what I mean by all rhe he's and she's is that I haven't named a character nor said anything about any personal affects, like his long hair or her purple eyes xD and so i graze through the story and most of my sentences start off with he or she, which aggravates me cause... I want it more creative, like for instance, your stories and such! But! All is well x3 

I'm thinking Sev was faking it so he would have to worry ahoit her freaking out and running away again but maybe he wasn't xD I wonder what Ron and Harry would say about her sexual questions xD

I love this story! Can't wait for the plot to progress and to find out what happens. Can't wait for the next chapter.