Desert! You're back!

I was crazy busy for few days and I come back to THREE new chapters? Seriously, woman you are like a machine gun... Thank You! Your holidays seem to be fast just like your writing, hopefully equally good?

Now, just quickly (I have two more chapters to read) I felt sorry for Snape, that transformation was like a slap :/  She suppose to be intelligent... surely, if he sees someone attractive, he will finish sooner? No?

If she's so unwilling -I know, there is a queue, but can I have Snape if she doesn't want him? I'm willing to wait for my turn...

Ohh and that wine? There must be something not right with it, you left like... seventeen thousand hints...

Thank you

Fox xx

Mmmmmm, so hot. Oral first aid is a lost art. And I loved Hermione's inner monologue as she ventured into the mysterious world of fellatio. Fav line was "She peered closely at his organ. It looked back at her." I don't know why I laughed so hard at this. But I did.

You've been keeping the prose under wraps in this story, haven't you? The language has been much more clinical to match their detached and perfunctory connection. A tiny trickle seeped through with this last chapter (mixed in with Hermione's pedantic petting techniques). I'm look forward to gauging their growth by your increasingly artistic word choice. (Oh and I spotted that pitched.)

Before I managed to find time and review previous chapter there is another one today <3 So, now you are getting my opinion on both ;)

 if he looks like Snape, why is he your ex??!  - not by my choice, sadly apart for looks and behaviour, he sare same fate as Snape from canon (minus the snake and Dark Lord, but the ending is ...the same).

Chapter 8
Whenever she thought about his predicament, his perspective, wondering how he must feel, she was met with blackness—a whole lot of nothing. - I love this part, it explains a lot but also opens so many possibilities :)

They needed to talk . . . properly. - this made me happy, finally she is using that brain of hers, so far she was riding the wave of emotional turmoil, that is so atypical for her.

He’d experienced it as a vaguely warped perception. - ok, I didn't see this coming, then again we didn't have his perception just hers, and that could be anything. Bravo! :))

“Fallibility I could live with,” Severus muttered. / “And so you are going to have to live with this.” - grrrrrrrrrr and sniffs, I'm glad I'm not the only one who see Albus in this light, manipulative and cruel

Ok, the last part is so irritating, I was literally growling at my PC, so much that my hun thought I'm ready for a mental ward (after he tried to see what went wrong with my PC only to realise I'm reacting to your story XD - it was priceless).

Chapter 9

I have to say I love this chapter it is so clumsy and fluffy at the same time. 

Sighing inwardly, she realised she hadn’t the faintest clue about such things. - why do I see her buried in the books on that subject in the near future? :D

In fact, all of his features were bold—but they were also elegant. - I sort of always imagined Snape to have what is called "Roman nose", I'm wondering do you see it the same way?

looking pretty miserable as it turned out. / like a baby rabbit or something. - I love it, and I'm giggling like crazy, pretty accurate descriptions in funny way :)

Surprisingly, it wasn’t completely unappetising. It was clean, after all. The issue was that it belonged to her Professor. - ermmm, after all they did she still have that particular issue? XD

Men certainly reacted when they were kicked there - I love the way your brain works :D

Her natural inclination was to move like she was on a trotting horse but it felt a bit too vertical; she needed to be more diagonal. - the touch of reality, contrary to what shady mass entertaining media aimed at male population tries to teach. Maybe you could consider to make a sort of manual I can share with large number of my female friend who opted to learn from former mentioned source. One of the reasons I love your work, you stick to reality and you have your way with words, you phrase them masterfully. 

If this was what he needed, she’d do it. - ok sister, it's not what HE needs, oh well, she'll find out soon :D That is quite sleek move on his part tho, but I guess that his ego is at least a bit bruised by her constant refusal to come.

But before she could right herself, his arm was there, encircling her shoulders. And so she remained, her cheek against his chest, listening to his thundering heart and knowing that he was safe for another week. - fluff, fluff, fluff <3 I'm just melting ^_^

Now what? I fully expect her to jump up and rush or do something equally juvenile. I said I expect but I do hope for other outcome, maybe that conversation? Or maybe that she opt for him instead of books for learning ;) I'm still waiting for romance part to kicks in, but knowing how you write, that will take some time and it is going to be nerve wracking slow.

Oh yes, before I forget (as if I could!) - scratching the walls in expectation of new chapter XX

Well done you!  You've hooked us all!!

keen for more! 

Excellent chapter. I loved the bit between Snape and Dumbledore. Great dialogue. And the tension with Malfoy and his nefarious plotting is getting deliciously dark.

Fav line was "A thin sliver of moonlight cut a luminous strip across one silvery eye and half the smirking mouth of her assailant."--Love this imagery.

(Now that’s not very nice is it?-- Comma after nice.)

And I enjoyed her sticking her wand in Draco's crotch and threatening to castrate him. Makes me wish I had a wand. And magical powers. And Snape.

I look forward to Hermione's attempts to befriend Snape. (And I hope he comes to her aid when Draco goes bad.)

Oh, and Miss Manners says the polite thing to do when you get your partner's junk zapped by dark magic is to kiss it better.

I'm prepared to make amends on her behalf.

So debating on laughing out loud at that immage or not, and fussing at her, since she knew the damn restrictions to a T. What'd she alter that time..? Did I miss it? I'll go back. Anywhos so who actually slly made the stuff then? And Draco is very funny with the P's remark xD do they know that she can do the tissue changing thing too? 

The little bint is making it worse for herself yet again xD her sympathy went put the window just now xD  she just had to try to make it so he almost couldn't get it up, didn't she? And of course Ron would need more wanking practice, at the rate he's going, only ones that will want him will be for the money from his career xD if he makes it xD

Yasssssss Strip baby strip x3 anyway, the lot of them are little shits and maybe he should give her a buzz everytime xD she won't be so intoxicated to not know what she was doing, but she wouldn't have the urge to be so bitchy either xD Do I spy some Ron bashing on the sly? Bwhaha.. alrighty continuing on!

I know it fucks with her mind, but doesn't she know that if she enjoys it, it'll help her better in the long run , rather than making them hate each other? o.o (this is wh I don't write stories lile this, my mind isn't adept enough to deal with all of the options xD). Anyways! Onward! (Hope you're getting enough sleep with life and all! All I have is school and a part time job and it's hurting more than it should be :3

Why Puddifoots? Isn't that the place with the tea and gag worthy amounts of pink? Anywhos, I'm excited to see what's next!

We couldn't have him incompetent (is that the word? Can't remember) now could we? Hmmm... hopefully he'll break though to her even though she wants to be stubborn xD maybe its the mind game ontop of the other mind game where the person in emotional turmoil overthinks the situation more when they get the opposite reactions xD I haven't named anyone in my fanfic yet. Do you know how irritating it is to go back and read your work and see a thousand 'he' and 'she's in it? Its killing me but the friend hasn't complained so no names now xD

Going to log in sometime today. This is going to give me excellent inspiration for mine that I'm writing for my friend. Then I can like, burn mine at the stake and hopefully she won't ask for another one xD anywho, Harry's a bit of an ass, isn't he? I'd also fuck Sev, but I hate when he's in emotional distress xD makes the end sweeter though, so I'll take it :D

Ker-rist on a bike! Didn't see that one coming. Can't she just kiss his bits better? I asked my husband the other day if a lass had ever kneed him in the balls and although the answer was no he still squirmed uncomfortably. Poor Sev... but she can't leave him like that. His knob could drop off and then where would we be? My accent.......officially still Scots but understandable  (I've lived in Lancashire for 40 years) and rather dry....like my humour. Think Frasier, Monty Python, Father Ted, Fawlty Towers (RIP Manuel),Malcolm in the Middle, Blackadder and Family Guy. Like a certain potions master I call a spade a shovel and don't suffer fools gladly.  A female Malcolm Tucker but with a fraction of the swearing. Looking forward to so much more....don't disappoint me. Best wishes, Love Ali xxxx.

I have an account here now xD too lazy to sign into it xD but the title is pretty funny but This looks like it'll be great x3 I love your stories!

Ooh I almost forgot Malfoy was bound to reappear! DS, you enjoy torturing us with cliffhangers, I swear. That being said, the pace has quickened and while it was enjoyable to have their drawn out sessions, you were right that at some stage it would become almost mechanical. Howling for the next chapter (and it was bang out of order, hurting poor Snape).