Reviews for Doing it for the Order *Complete*By : Desert_Sea |
I'm finally catching up with you, Yesss!!! :D
thank goodness I learned from the master, OracleObscured - I love her works, I've read them even before I stumbled at your first story. But at the time I wasn't big on leaving reviews, that started with your Debauchery
send me a cookie and I’ll forgive you - we have a deal ;)
I never expect reviews so don’t feel obliged - I know, but I am fond of our little chats through comments ;)
Ok, my eloquence deserted me after this chapter, all I can think is: fck, fck, fck!!!
Her "nobility" (even if I understand where is it coming from) is really going to kill him.
So far you did not write lemons, please don't start now, or at least warn me :'(
OracleObscured already said all I was thinking so no need to repeat it, but...even if they do manage to keep their heads on the shoulders...whatever happens there can do irreparable damage in more ways than one.
I wish you and your family a HAPPY NEW YEAR and all the best :*
Looking forward new chapter, and more of your fantastic stories, in the net year XX
I have never reviewed anything except for a Sheinside scarf but I felt the need to thank you for this story. It has been my particular oasis while studying for a very important exam. I love that you put an effort in developing a story rather than just intercalating smut scenes. And the credibility of the sex scenes are much appreciated.
I found myself grinning at the screen of my phone these last days when noticing there were new chapters. They felt like Christmas presents, and the good ones like a cashmere sweater or cashmere socks. Thank you very much!! I see that there are many Snape fans out here, I am too but I also love Hermione and I enjoy that you didn,t make her fall for him right away.
PS. IrishChic20 review made me laugh. Draco fans I don,t understand you, he,s a bad person!!!! Sorry if there are any grammar mistakes, I,m spanish and I haven,t written in English in years I think. Happy New Year!
Baaaaaaaaah! So much wet fish slapping. It reeks of mackerel in here. WTF is she thinking? I mean it's all very noble but she bascally just RSVPed to a rape party. Holy fuck. And she's not going to tell Snape beforehand? Oh, he's going to react to that wonderfully. And what's she going to do, just show up at the weekly Mudblood Fuck and say "Surprise! Look who's tagging along with you tonight"? This is gonna be bad. No way will she be able to just go along with whatever they tell her to do. She better take something to make it through the night. (Or is this story going to be the wet fish slap to end all wet fish slaps? I know you have that in you.)
As always, I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chatper. :)
Really enjoying this story. I just sometimes wish Hermione would remember that she's not just a witch. Couldn't she and Snape show up with some hand grenades? Most of the Death Eaters AND Baldyfart will be there. She could blow them up and apparate out with Snape. Or Snape could go there in advance (since he knows the location) and rig up some semtex to a detonator. Old Voldy might not be completely dead but it's harder to terrorize people when you don't actually have a body. Then Hermione and Snape can ride off into the sunset. Just a suggestion....
That was a bit intense when Draco and Snape were talking.
Dang it! You were too fast for me. Now I've got to double up on the reviews.
Chapter 18: I absolutely loved this chapter. But now, a day later, I'm not sure exactly what it was that made me love it. I should read it again and pinpoint my reasons. But I did remember to save my favorite parts, so perhaps that will provide a clue.
she may have practised a little too much.--Bahahahaha! I feel her pain.
lot of his gruff, cantankerous demeanour was a cover for a high level of sensitivity,--Unh! So good.
That you’re human?” Parvati gave a wry smile. “Of course not.”--Love this whole scene. The interaction with someone her own age was a nice change too.
so that it bounced against his abdomen with a hefty twang.--You had me with hefty, but you made laugh giddily with twang.
he dragged it back from her face so he could watch the fine bones of her jaw working.--Fuck me, this is excellent! Fabulous visual detail.
and he equally despised recognising that need in others.--This part was such an excellent insight. Yeeeeees!
It had just been twisted in his mind over time. As he had, in turn, twisted her intentions.--Ditto for this one. The introspection is fabulous.
respite from a world that was rapidly closing in on him-- See, I was right. Escape :)
would you prefer to be . . . doing it . . . with someone else?”“No.”--Unnnnnnnh! You're killing me. The feels!
Chapter 19:
Hermione getting ready for Snape was so sweet. And then you wet fish slapped me with Draco's attack. But I was ready for it. I knew it was coming, and I was cheering when Snape showed up like Batman to save her. Draco was delightfully despicable and that made it all the more satisfying when Snape slammed him into the wall. Mmmmmmm, retribution :)
(Her whole body hat hated her for it.--I'm guessing you meant had, but you could just take out hat/had all together.)
Now I'm dying to know how Snape is going to keep her safe from Draco. (Or if Hermione's going to castrate him next time she sees him.)
that’s a serious shift - sadly it is normal for the end of the year.
would he read them? - for now he reads bits and pieces, btw advantage of living with Slytherin is - you give him idea, he takes it up a nodge ;)
Boy you are fast, I barely managed to read last chapter, next one was already up. :D What maniacal muse you are using now? I know it's not mine (unless she cloned herself) cos she's driving me up the walls, and she has the worst timing ever >.<.
For me, first comes New Year and then Christmas, so beside work I have tons of preparations and she is like crazy, making me write when I should sleep :S Btw, I gained new respect for smut. Sex scenes are hell of a hard to write and I think I'm failing at them spectacularly :/
Back to your story:
Chapter 18 - I really like the shift in Hermione, she is finally coming through. On the other hand, poor Sev :'(
Chapter 19 - all I can say is: fck. Pls, pls, pls tell me he's not in trouble! Ok I know that he is in trouble or all this wouldn't be necessary but...
Oh, yeah...he is following her? Tell me that he does! He is so sweet :)
I know this is the shortest review I've written to you, but my cookies starting to burn, I'll make it up to you after the holidays, promise! xx
Oh bloody hell you naughty little Christmas plum duff. I'm trying to read this secretly while the rest of the gang are watching Jeremy Clarkson in his new show. What's up Mum? Oh nothing dear it's just that Sev is frigging Hermione into heavenly oblivion with his gorgeous fingers......and I'm jealous.
This story is both delightful and sinful in equal measures and is helping to brighten up the Dead Days between Christmas and Hogmanay. Yes I'll be hosting my usual get-together in Lancashire this NYE. But I will always find time to read some more chapters (hint hint) if they are forthcoming.
Best wishes, Love Ali xxxxx.
PS....Last Orders...not yet though and dare I say it....Holy Orders
Well, hot damn. I loved the Hysterical Fiction scene. So sexy. (I play the same game--but by myself. Alas, something is lacking when going solo.) I love how they're gradually opening up to oneanother. Your handle on their varying viewpoints is spot on. I feel this story from both sides (although they're more on the same page now).
Fav line
"She couldn’t help glancing up to see the aftermath on his lips"-- Fuck me, this is fabulous!
Oh, and I spy the pitched. :)
Is it just the 6th and 7th books that are not followed. It occurred to me I can't remember her year in your story and that he is a potions teacher still so the 6th book is invalid but then I get further confused lol cus rob and Harry are in potions but a ape only takes Os from owls for his advanced classes o though that was in like the 5th book...
p.s all this smut and I finally get to that.
I soooooo LOVE this chapter! After nearly 16 h of work it was like a glass of fresh water on a hot day. Tho the comparison is debatable - I feel like I need cold shower after reading it. For whatever this chapter is tribute to - I'm eternally grateful.
hmmm, what were you doing in it? - sadly it was more of a cartoonish moment, I dropped a bar of chocolate and leaned over a handreast to reach it before cat did, the carrier just broke off landing me on the floor :/
I look forward to reading more of your story - thank you, coming from you it means alot! *blushing*
Ok, I'm too tired for some deeper analysis, but some meaningful moments didn't escape me (just to let you know I noticed them) ;)
A cup of tea would have to suffice—for now. - lovely, a bit of comical moment wrapped up in very serious dilemma. Comical, cos when I read it first thing on my mind were words from my very frustarted friend when she was on he master studies in London "Brits, they think that solution for every problem is a *** cup of tea!"
He knew a lot about her. More than he cared to let on. - :'(
I love how you implemented the reading of "body language". That is such muggle skill but necessary if you are spy or a teacher. And that skill complements so well his analytical nature. It is also something I like to argue in discussions - thing that ppl call "6th sense" is often no more than subconscious reading of "body language and micro facial expressions".
“Read.” - ok everything after that, it is just too hot! Not to mention...appealing to a book worm like me. Would it be too much if I point my hun in to direction of your stories? :D Btw, perfect match between content of the text she's reading and what is going on between them, brilliant.
discovering that he was still intently watching her. Then he slowly brought his hand to his mouth / “Friday,” she whimpered. / “Friday?” - oh! He is just plain mean. I love it when Sev is a tease :)
Impatiently waiting for next chapter! I can't wait to see how you gonna top this one ;) xx
I still really want to say I hope she gets pregnant. Maybe not right this moment but I hope so because it would make my day. I would write more but on my phone.
Well I'd just ask...fancy a shag Professor? So good that they are coming together in a spiritual.....sentimental... sense as well as a sexual one. But how is Lucius going to fix into the mix as it were?
Sorry sweetheart it is still Christmas Eve here and I am nine sheets to the wind. Prosecco is my diwnfakk...sorry that should read downfall.
A Very Merry Christmas to you and yours and I can't wait for more.
Love and Best wishes, Ali xxxx
This is a hot, marvelous story. Please don't stop writing. The characters are written well and believably, there's a plot outside of the sexytimes that usually makes sense, and the grammar and syntax and everything is very well done. It's honestly great.
I really liked the internal angle this chapter. She's dealing with the emotional shift taking place between them. I love that she admitted she showed up early just because she wanted to be with him. (And his reaction.) And of course I loved that he's watching her back. So fucking sweet. The conversation with Minerva and the resulting revelation were great.
(‘Potions uncorked’--If this is the title, you should capitalize both words and italicize it instead of using the single quotes.)
He’d follow. He always did.--Oh my God! This is my favorite line so far. Wet fish slap to the heart.
To continue to save him.--This was my next fav line this chapter. Right in the feels. And it works on so many levels.
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