Reviews for Moments in LoveBy : Gandalfs-Beard |
I'm loving this storyline and I'm glad your so quick to add new chapters. I made an account just to say Good work and keep it up, you have real talent.
I am really enjoing this story!
Wile reading I had a couple of questions pop up.
1 With how powerful Harry and Hermione's Patroni are could they cure Neville's parents?
2 I figured that after Narcissa's divorce she would have reconciled with Andromeda. Mr and Mrs Tonks are portrayed as good people in the books. Will we see a happy Black family reunion?
Thank you for writing this!
Keep up the great writing please. I really enjoyed Furry Little Problem and look forward seeing how you present the city fight at the end of this story.
I like the fact that you have made an effort to maintain the personalities and behaviors of the original characters and have added believable new characters to your stories.
I look forward to the next installments.
Oh wow you have got to continue this story, It would be a shame to miss out on it after I spent so long ad many days reading it all.
Hi,
i have been reading your story, and I love it. Please tell me you are still writing it and that the next chapter will be along soon.
I love the story.
John
This is the first i have commented but this made me chuckle.
[Harry narrowed his eyes at the Carrows and nodded. “Oh yeah... I’d forgotten all about that. Did I ever mention you have a brilliant memory?”
“Only about a million times Harry,” said Hermione. She blushed, temporarily distracted from her crossness by Harry’s compliment.]
Wouldn't it have been really funny for Hermione to have answered with an exact number such as "Only 378 times Harry" with of course a smirk. being that she has a "brilliant memory" and all.
Well done on this brilliant story. So far.
Good on you, Neville. I always thought that Dumbledore's Army was a silly name anyway.
Can hardly wait for more!
Had to reread from the beginning in order to remember the differences to HFLP. Enjoyed it just as much as I did the first time. Sigh, now it's down to waiting for updates.
Keep up the good work!
How about eagerly? Did I mention my all nighter?
The best Harmony fic I've ever read to date. I absolutely love how you how found a way to incorporate a muggle into Hogwarts.
I just basically gulped this story in an all nighter; I am going to have to re-read the last couple of chapters as my brain was a bit fuzzy at the end. Off to get some coffee. Early await the next update.
I look forward to reading Harry Potter and the Zombie Apocalypse. 8-)
Typo in Chapter 46: "To one side of Voldemort stood Wormtail, and to the other, Bellatrix Lestrange. A small number of Death Eaters - most of them liberated when Voldemort had taken Akaban..."
Now write, damn you! WWWRRRIIIIIIIIIIIITE!!!!! :D
i love Hermione's Furry Little Problem, its a good twist on the story, i was reading it when i was supposed to be studying for finals (which i passed anyways whoo :) ) and i saw this one and im like i like this person lmao.
A bit of an error near the end of this chapter. You say that Jennifer gets nervous when she spots four people she's never met before, but then you mention that Luna brings three newcomers with her. It should be four newcomers.
I don't understand how anyone could complain about your characterizations, I think they're fabulous. I also don't understand why they would read so far into a story if they didn't like how the characters were being portrayed.
I will definitely be checking out your other story. Keep up the good work!
“…the potentiality of their spells continue to ascend from one pinnacle to another - soaring to ever greater heights…”
Now THERE is an evocative mental image. Wow!
I like the new chapter title, too. It is lyrical in a way that suits the “miracle” that occurs. To put it another way; as you know (and have demonstrated many times), a chapter title can be used to mentally prepare the reader for what is to come. Sometimes this effect is subconscious. “The Lightning-Struck Tower” is a phrase that unsettles the reader, yet gives no warning of the traumatic climax to that chapter of The Half-Blood Prince. I previously wrote that the transmogrification was a little difficult to swallow. Chapter 44’s new title pulls together the ground-work that you have been laying for several chapters and prepares us for the payoff when the miracle comes. Great job!
There are so many terrific moments in this chapter: The discussions of up-bringing vs. character, and of blood-status & Hogwarts houses in relation to prejudice, to name two. I do not know if you are intentionally creating allegories to events in the United States - You have been writing this since long before the current strife. Your observations on character, prejudice, courage, authoritarianism, transparency and more have a timeless relevance that transcends the headlines and works much better than overt, ham-fisted (and to the reader 20 years from now, dated) symbolism.
Another thing at which you excel is writing scenes with many characters. I once heard a professional writer/editor gush with envy over Robert Heinlein’s ability to write dialogue between four characters where she could tell exactly who was saying what. You are doing this with twice as many characters, some of whom have only a single line – yet each voice & opinion is distinct and consistent with the character speaking.
Speaking of consistent characters, I was an early booster of the Severus / Narcissa relationship. I’m glad to see this moving forward even if it is off-screen (It would make for some good vignettes should you ever want to write spin-off stories). What amuses me is that although he has had this huge change in his fortunes on every level, he is still Severus Snape. That you can show this in only two lines of dialogue is nothing short of brilliance.
I look forward to every new installment.
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