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By : Gandalfs-Beard
  • From ANON - Ninnie on December 07, 2016

    YES! I have been waiting for Harry to give Ron a piece of his mind! 


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  • From ANON - Mal on December 06, 2016

    Fantastically written. I Absolutely love this story, each chapter builds just enough to keep you hooked and wanting more. I much prefer the idea of Hermione and Harry, when she chose Ron, and he chose Ginny in the originals it never sat well with me, just didn't add up for a whole host of reasons. I love your interpretation of the characters and how the story has changed enough to make events and people fit your version allowing character growth that makes sense, whilst also staying true to the original concept. Only found this site a week ago, and I've read quite a few posts now as I've always been a sucker for a good story no matter the genre and this is by far the best I've read. I just spent the last few hours reading from start to finish, I couldn't put it down. I'll admit i'm gutted there's no more to read, i'm now eagerly awaiting the next chapter along with the rest of the story. Can't wait, hope updates come soon and often.


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  • From ANON - kh on December 04, 2016

    Amazing story hope you continue

     


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  • From ANON - 1stHorseman on December 04, 2016

    Another brilliant chapter mate. I really enjoy how you have the romance play out.


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  • From Malchior on December 03, 2016

    If you change the original idea for S.P.E.W. to House Elf Liberation Party, instead of Front, you end up with H.E.L.P. as the acronym.


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  • From thegingers on December 01, 2016

    I have spet the better part of the day reading this story and I have to say I love it. It is nice to read a Fanfic that isnt all about sex and actually has some substanence to it. I look forward to future updates. :D


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  • From ANON - Curious HP Fan on December 01, 2016

    Haha kinda already did started to find it a ltitle boring and thought the story was already finished. Guess I have to read all the chapters now haha :P


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  • From ANON - Curious HP Fan on December 01, 2016

    Which chapter is the chapter Harry and Hermione have sex ;)


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  • From ANON - Saint-Exupéry on December 01, 2016

    I am thoroughly enjoying this story!  As you say, it is an antidote for many tropes here at AFF.  Your writing is exemplary.  Your narrative flows easily and your dialogue is natural. 

    Other things I like:

    1.)  Your characters are spot-on, but what impresses me even more is that you accurately extrapolate how these well-known characters respond under different AU stimulus.  Harry, who has always been alone, gains self-confidence and trust from his rock-solid relationship with Hermione, and this gives him the back-bone to stand-up to both Ron's lack of manners and Dumbledore's secretive nature.  This has ripple-effects with Ron starting his "learning process" earlier than he does in the books, and Dumbledore becoming a bit more of a "team-player".  In your writing, all of this happens organically - one thing flows from the next with little contrivance.

    B.)  Similarly, your relationships grow and evolve organically.  Hey, I like PWP as much as the next fanfic-lover, but I find it refreshing and heart-warming to see acquaintances grow into friendships and bloom into something more.  Harry & Hermione's romance is growing nicely, but in a manner consistent with their age (starting at 11 - as of part 14 they are fourteen years-old and are starting to really notice their own and each others bodies.  Unspoken, but hanging in the air is whether or not Harry actually knows anything about sex).  Ron's reaction to their unusually close relationship is also natural - he's inclined to spend more time with others more at his level of development, i.e. Seamus & Dean.  Sirius & Remus have re-kindled their friendship and have turned it into quite a bromance (if not more - I love that you feel no need to clarify this one way or the other; it is beautiful as-is).

    III.)  I like how you interact with the canonical plot points.  I just finished re-reading the HP series, and I found it fairly annoying how much of the plot revolves around bad choices and people being preposterously dense or obstinate.  This is one of the strengths of fanfic, in general, that we can take an enlightened approach to a known story and ask, "Suppose they figured things out quicker?  Suppose they made the (obviously) right choice instead of what they did?"

    ,,,and many other things too numerous to mention.

    One small quibble:  In the latest chapter (#14), Hermoine explained to Sirius about mobile phones.  What she said was roughly 10 years early.  Sirius was incarcerated in 1981, when the only "mobile" phones available were expensive car-phones.  The start of HP&tGoF (including the Quidditch World Cup and your chapter 14) takes place in the summer of 1994.  In that year, mobile phones were still fairly heavy, expensive and rare.  They really didn't take-off in the mass-market until the mid-late '90s.  I didn't get my first until 2006.  :)


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  • From ANON - Somebody Who Really Should Have An Account on November 29, 2016

    I'm quite enjoying this. It's almost diabetes inducing at times, but, dammit, sometimes that's exactly what I'm looking for with this pairing.

    Is this a repost? I could've sworn I've read all this before, which is driving me nuts! Either way, this has been a very enjoyable find again. Plus it's nice to see some movement in the Harry/Hermione section of this site, since it seems almost dead at times.


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  • From ANON - 1stHorseman on November 29, 2016

    Another brilliant chapter. I look forward to re adding the rest.


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  • From ANON - PotterFanatic on November 29, 2016

    First off, great Fic! I love the story, it's  written very well. I do miss Harry being adventurous and rule breaking, but also love this more intelligent Harry that actually thinks before acting. 

    I also can't say enough about you frequently updating. There has been way too many stories that hook you and quit you on this site alone. I'm actually checking everyday for updates on your story, and guess what? A new chapter! Sometimes twice a day! I love that. 

    My only complaint?(It's a minor one, but it sometimes has me re-reading the last sentence in a different tone) Is the over use of exclamation points. 

    I just don't see someone whispering "I love you!" It's more like they are shouting, expressing excitement, shock/outrage or having an epiphany of some sort, in my mind at least. 

    I don't mean to criticize your work ( I honestly love your story ) it's just my thoughts. Which is the point of a review. 

    Please keep up the good work! It's nice to finally have someone who is truly a good writer and wants to finish their story! 


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  • From ANON - A Fan on November 28, 2016

    Glad you put in the due dilligence to get stronger as a writer. It really shows. I like the progression here a lot.

    Though I have noticed a few fics where I got so absorbed in the relationship that any smut felt intrusive and exploitative. I guess it depends on the initial tone and speed of that ever increasing lust level. 

     

    Yeah, Desk singed my eyebrows off, but that last chapter merely made me raise one in confusion. Oh well.

    There are a few fics I've seen that have the characters dirty talk and say how much they want eachother, but then "oh, our poor innocent bodies are too young for any of that, but when you grow some curves I'll be all over them!" Especially Time travel fics. Weirds me out for some reason. At least Backwards with Purpose addressed that with Ginny jumping Harry during pre 2yr summer and then Molly finding them. Added some realism in how awkward that could get. And how pissed Mr. Weasley could become.

     

    Ooh, I read some multi fic with H/Hr/Gin/Gab that had birthday presents be advanced levels of intimacy since Gabby joined so young (Saving girls bonding). Good overall, but that contrived bit was odd. Darn FF and its randomly enforced censorship and easily offended prudes. Can't a man have some PwP that is not too heavy on either P? Balance!

     

    Sorry to ramble, keep posting!


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  • From ANON - on November 28, 2016

    Hope this gets finished.  So far I'm wondering how the Marauder map winds up in Harry's possession as its key for a bunch of future scenes.  Overall , I really like it so far.  Good job.


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  • From ANON - A Fan on November 28, 2016

    Glad to see this update so quickly. The quality is really good.

     

    It is nice to see a story that emphasises romance and relationships. Too many stories jump straight to the "action" without any build up. That can be fun too, like your Furry Little Problem. Some do quick build up, like Society of Two, but slow and steady is a nice approach as well. The Desk is another story that builds, though it does so from a more physical starting point. To be fair though, some stories, like those by Robst on FF, build a relationship, but the attempt to keep it PG13 until the Wizarding age of majority makes it feel stilted and too defined. Spontaneity but with natural progression is best.

     

    Just because some kids are precocious in First year doesn't mean they all are.


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