Very cool that Snape gave them the potions book. I'm bummed that he didn't teach them the healing-song counter to Sectumsempra... it's supposed to be fantastically powerful. Speaking of healing, why isn't there any focus on learning any?

Excellent maze obstacles, though I'm shocked that the toad hadn't set the Cup itself to be an explosive trap! She really is turning into quite the fun villain.

I do hope that Dumbles left some form of trap in place of the girl... it's not usually his style, but for Ariana's sake?

An unspeakable beetle... huh, yeah, that works.

I love the idea that the castle defenses are being powered up by patroni and epic jacuzzi sex :D

I looked up Princess Ozma... who was a boy named Tip... I can only hope that we get a steamy femme!Harry x Hermione... but some other femslash scenes would not hurt my feelings :)

Shiiiiiiiiiiiite!
That was another of those chapters that I had held my breath - several times - and each time I hadn't realized I was doing it until I was exhaling in relief. Nicely done!

Well done on creating a very conflicted and oppressive atmosphere yet letting the teens continue in the way that only teens can, absorbed in their love.

I'm looking forward with hope that Draco is thwarted, but hopefully not killed. He is just a kid, no matter how rotten he seems for now, but he is riding a very dangerous edge indeed.

Interesting turnout. Knowing that McNair and Avery showed up would be fantastic if they were a bit more mercenary. Just stake them out - and Crabbe & Goyle - and take them out, before they became aware that they were targets. That's the only downside of being 'overly light', they don't see the value of pre-emptive strikes against known murderers that Will murder again.

Can you imagine if voldy had four followers, and the next time he tried summoning them he had zero?

Wait, why would dumbles be surprised about Little Hangleton? He knew who riddle's dad was, knew about merope and the gaunts, he had all of this figured out well before fourth year.

Excellent, a decent way to turn the sacrifice into a strike.

Hmmm... one wonders where Rookwoods loyalties will lie once voldy returns openly? I wanted to take a moment and applaud your insidious plotting toad. She's turning into quite the 'co-big-bad', filling the gap for voldy while he languishes in his infant-homonoculous stage.

Oh, I hadn't realized that neither Harry nor Hermione took the time to let ANYONE know of their plans... wow. That's kinda shocking for Hermione to allow to happen. Seem ooc to me.

I keep forgetting to metion it, but what is the practical application of a wand-holster around your waist? I assume it would have to be above your clothes normally (he's going swimming, so against skin makes sense) so it is along the lines of a gun holster?
I've always liked the idea of the forearm holster that slips the wand into your hand at a flick, a-la-spidy's web shooters.

Harry 'supposes' that Remus and Sirius stayed home... don't they have even more ways to communicate than most magicals? Why don't they use them?

TMNK? LMAO!
Wait, didn't he learn basic healing - muggle and magical first aid? Why didn't he casta healing spells on himself?

KILL THE BEETLE, STEP ON IT!
Or... put it in a jar and spend a few weeks randomly rattling it around in the jar, keeping it in a loud, bright environment and torturing it mercilessly in every other way... while you compose a magical vow for it to speak before releasing it. But first render it permanently hairless, titless and with a curse if it should ever try to apply makeup LOL
And that's Nothing compared to the tender mercies that the toad would enjoy under my benevolent attentions :D

Oh... well, while I cannot say that marriage disolving house affiliation is ridiculous, I am also not sure it really makes clear sense. Ultimate it is your call with a clearly AU fic, so... *shrugs* Looking forward to what further manipulations this leads to.

Sparks of magic as they mate... hmmm
That reminds me, other than the one mention at their first time, 'protection' hasn't been brought up since. Myrtle will be moaning for different reasons pretty soon... if she, that is ghosts, can masturbate? Of course if they can have sexual experiences, can they have sex with other ghosts? Heh, a whole new world opens up at the wierd meanderings my mind makes ;)

OK, Hermione playing with Fleur is super hot. A threesome? *nom nom nom*!

Hermione being agnostic fits very well... I've always been confused by people who claim atheism - the statement of absolute fact that there is no God whatsoever. I see this as stating that they, as an individual, know more than all the billions of people in the world (present AND past) who believed in something greater than themselves. The sheer ego of it all makes me shy away from such a person as who knows what other ways they believe themselves superior? Plus, in my experience, they don't just believe what they do (in nothing) but they also deride and mock others who believe in 'something'. Of course theists can be just as egotistical, and not all atheists are judgemental... just some really bad experiences when trying to have a simple debate :p
*sheepishly climbs down from soapbox*

Huh, well that was a very nice ceremony, more impressive with the litte bits of background for the officiant than detailed vows or fanciful magical effects. Though the description of the kiss does lead one to wonder :)

*blinks*

Married?!? I mean, he's just 14!

Ooof, well, that's a step farther much faster than I'd expected!

I'm confused... what possible reason could have kept Sirius and Remus away from the first task, the one in which they knew that a dragon may severely injure if not kill Harry? I've always understood when Sirius was not exonerated yet, but Remus even showed up in canon, so what gives?

A lovely, if a tad tame, first time scene.

Annnnd you at least show Krum has active brain cells, well done there, and thanks for not leaving him as a brainless brute... that said, what is it with Krum and girls two to three years younger than him!? :D

Oh I love it! Respecting the dragon and trying to communicate with it... not even using parseltongue, just basic pantomime... Fantastic!

And he gives Ron what Ron deserves... thank you so much!

Wow that was fun, way to go Luna and Padma!

I do have some problems with how you handled Harry's situation and with your specific attention to logic this is a failing I was sad to see your story shared with so many others:
1 - They had an opportunity to PROVE Harry Innocent... and chose not to do so.
2 - Harry actively pursued the idea of Veritaserum in front of Cedric and Krum, and both continue to act as though they didn't have PROOF that Harry didn't enter himself.
3 - Albus had an opportunity to SPEAK UP and share his belief in Harry's Innocence... and stayed quiet, essentially encouraging his entire school to continue to attack Harry and Hermione. What's more, Minerva was standing right there as well... thus you continue the sterotype of her as a rigid, mindless lacky of dumbles.
Why?

I'm not sure if you'll get this - it's been a while since you've posted - but I created a profile just to review so I will just have to be hopeful.

MiL is living up to everything you billed it as - slow burn romance with more logical, intelligent character development and more reasonable, consistent responses from the secondary and tertiary characters.

Then there's the world building, which has really been exciting (and terrifying - hem hem) to watch develop. Speaking of minister toad, that blew my mind! It works in this world, however, with what power she had and the backing/bribery/coercion of lucy, it's a scary but believable move. The obvious paradigm shift from 4th year onwards is one of the reasons I wanted to express my appreciation for your story before I got sucked in and forgot :)

Harry and Hermione are adorable together, and their 'couple-speak' is something I wouldn't belive had I not witnessed it first hand. That said, I've seen it only once IRL, with the couple in question so casual about it that I had to inquire about it with their friends. They weren't as oblivious as H/Hr are, and yet it was pretty much described as a  'shared unconscious thought stream', in conversation form. Then again, they were in their twenties so...
The conversations are entertainingly bizarre, but with my experience it is really fun to read and remember.
Some of their best intuitive leaps have been based on this 'mechanic' and have led to the most obvious divergences from canon. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this as they grow even closer with the isolation from Ron becoming absolute. On that note I do hope that Hermione kicks the shite-head in the balls when he makes his pathetic non-apology after the first task. "Learn how to apologize like you actually know what you are sorry for and mean what you are saying or expect worse the next time you speak to us!" is a scene that is part of my 'dream-head-canon' and I am secretly just reading all the HP ff I can just to find it... hey, don't judge, we all have our goals! :D
I'm also really enjoying watching the young couple 'heat up' and am happily anticipating the upcoming lemons. 

I like what you've done with the other major players - Ron & Draco are not so much 'different' as they are 'more intensely Ron & Draco-like'. Draco exhibiting his father's cold-blooded-killer mannerisms and asperations is a nice change from the monochrome, one-dimensional non-threating whiny child that never grew out of first-year material.

I'm looking forward to Moody giving the young couple a real 'education', and I'm also hoping to see Cedric's apology. The idea of you putting some effort into the personalities of the champions has me excitedly hopeful.

I'm also hoping to see a Lot more of Luna and Neville, and Parvati looked to be more active earlier, it'd be nice to see a well developed version of that all-too-often vapid bit of background-furniture.

All that to say that I'm loving the story and finally just got off my duff to tell you so :)

Lastly, I was wondering if you continue to write? I enjoy your style and would like to see what you are up to.

Blessings,
Jason