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Reviews for Moments in time *Completed*

By : Kvarta
  • From ANON - Anon on December 23, 2016

    Good so far.  If you really want/need a beta, I'm available.


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  • From Desert_Sea on December 22, 2016

    Hey Kvarta, I loved seeing that you have posted here. And I'm glad that I'm to blame :) You have some really nice descriptions here and internal dilemmas for these two. I also noted some familiar phrases -
    ' It is Japanese art of mending broken objects with gold. Such object is valued and treasured because he has history, has a depth and beauty of … well, in a lack of better word…survival.' Nice ;)

    I love that you're writing to your crazy muse . . . it seems she enjoys music too - lucky you :)

    Just a couple of things - you need to change 'Grainger' to 'Granger' throughout. And if you can track down a beta for some of the English it would help the flow. But, then again, I enjoy the quirks of your phrasing so, it's really up to you. Congrats also on delving into a bit of smut - it's liberating isn't it?

    Take care, DSxx


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