Reviews for You're My HomeBy : Keladry1n100 |
i like the story, but i think the last chapter was a bit of a let down. Harry, regardless, was wrong. Narcissa is a rightful grandmother and has a right to see her grandson. Harry slept with Draco and didnt tell him for YEARS. He only just LET HIM find out. Otherwise he would have denied Draco the chance to be a father, which is, no matter what, HUGELY selfish. Then to tell Narcissa, the boys rightful grandmother 'I will take the kids and you will never see them again' is rediculous. He already did that for 4 years. Although this harry is kind, and I see where he's going, he's completely wrong.
Draco could fight for custody and be granted it. Yes, sure, you can play the whole 'hes a big bad deatheater and they'd not give it to him' but in reality it would be more likely that card is played to allow the incorrect selfish harry plotline more than to play it because it would really happen. Draco, by getting custody, could then let HIS CHILD see HIS MOTHER. Which is HIS right, NOT Harry's.
Considering Harry is an orphan, he should WANT the kids to be around more family.
Frankly, I dont give a damn about Harry much in this story. He means well but everything is all about HIM and HIS KIDS and how HE SEES it being good for HIS KIDS. You have to obey HIS rules to see the kids-regardless that he never gave Draco the freaking chance-you have to agree to HIS terms if you want to be around the kids, and you have to agree to them IMMEDIATLY or he'll run?
Please.
I am sad to say that, though this is a sweet story, I cant get over how selfish he is in this. No matter how sweet he is with his kids, that attitude will affect and damage his kids, period. I like flawed characters in the story, and other than Draco calling Harry out on one thing, Harry has been basically treated an angel. He's anything but.
I hope you can find more readers to review this story other than I. I dont think it's a bad story, but I am quite tired of how 'everything my way with the kids or else no kids' Harry is. It's disgusting.
Thank you for the story, I must drop it.
Very nice.
I like it and would like to see where you are going with it. How do you pronounce Ciel? Seal or Ci-El? Please, if it's a longer story or any length really, update regularly. I can't stand it when people update once or twice per year or even less than that. I look forward to reading more.
Hestia
That wasn't very nice of you.
Interesting beginning .
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