Reviews for QuartetBy : OracleObscured |
Love this story! I see it's been over a month since the last update. Can't wait for the next one. Will it be much longer?
Chapter 34 -
This one was short but very revealing.
‘field of gooseflesh to sprout up the length of his spine’ – soooo delicious
‘cock-filling’ – I just like this as a term.
‘He could feel the thump of her heart front to back.’ – I could really imagine this – palpable.
‘inky silhouette dancing to the bed fast as a Snitch’ – Fantastic. I can absolutely see it in my mind’s eye.
‘He didn’t sound so knackered anymore.’ – hahah, I bet he didn’t J
(‘a lot fast the’ – sb faster)
‘When everything was finally still and quiet. Draco took one last deep breath’ – sb a comma instead of a full stop.
‘It from an old Muggle program on the telly. American. You’d hate it.”’ – LOL. We used to say that too! Also, the first word should be ‘It’s’
‘Severus would stake his tongue to the front lawn’ – bahaha, croquet anyone?
(‘his tongue remain’ – missing ‘to’)
Now, the Severus fondling. I’m not gonna lie . . . sort of felt a bit creepy to me. No doubt he has his motives and no doubt they involve Hermione’s wishes but . . . mmmm, I’m really wondering where this is going. And what will his Dad think? What a tangled web you're weaving here woman!
Chapter 33 –
Sorry I’m late with this one. I wasn’t expecting two quick posts this time. Especially when I’ve been so tardy ;)
There were some especially lovely turns of phrase in this chapter.
‘Snape’s right eyebrow rose to help pry open his eyelid, and he peered at Lucius like a haughty pirate.’ – Excellent visual, I can so imagine this. And I love a piratey Snape.
‘And if I’m treating her like my wife, maybe that’s because I miss having a wife!” His voice cracked on the last word, and he clenched his jaw in fury that Snape had goaded him so expertly.’ – love the emotion conveyed by this sad admission.
‘It would be like training wheels for her first buggering.’ – this made me snort :)
‘He loved that backdraft of excitement that flared through those brown eyes whenever her senses overwhelmed her logic. Boom-whoosh! In a split second she could be completely immolated by lust.’ – lots of excellence here, I especially liked ‘backdraft’ and ‘immolated’.
‘cliteration’ – hahah, word book!
‘eyelids shuddered to slits’ – I really liked ‘shuddered’ and may have to use it.
‘head lolling as if she were aboard a ship on choppy waters’ – I know a good word for this . . . starts with ‘p’ ;)
‘Her appreciative moan traveled down the digit and echoed in his palm.’ – echoed was brilliant.
‘his crooked teeth peeked out from behind a loose smile that hadn't been seen in years’ – I really loved this image of Sev. Very real.
Now, I don’t have to wait for the next – perfect!! x
I've been reading this story for ages but I've never reviewed. I had to this time. That last chapter was bloody brilliant. The Waltons reference was hilarious. I burst out laughing I could just picture it. This Draco is so adorable. Can't wait for more.
So friggin' excellent. As always. I bow to the master! LOL!
Chapter 32 –
‘The shit hitting the fan might not be coming from the direction you expect. (That's the only clue I can give.)’ – Ooh, do I detect a twist or two coming up? You know how much I enjoy those :)
‘We eat here every night . . . right where Nagini devoured Charity Burbage like a rodent soufflé. You can barely see the chip in the cherry.’ – Lovely turn of phrase and I like this insight into the reality of life after Voldemort. The macabre of the mundane.
I do enjoy the new sensual snogging Snape. I’ll be interested to hear his take on the about face.
I almost have a thing for Draco’s big grey puppy eyes . . . almost but not quite . . . that’s pretty good for me (or a pretty good effort by you) ;)
Ahhhh, the Tango – yay!!
‘raging against her belly’ – mmmm, very nice.
‘stink eye’ – hahaha, never heard that one – perfect.
Is it just me or are things going a little too well? The calm before the storm? Or is that just in my head? I’m excited to think what might be in store . . . I do like a bit of angst . . . especially of late. Any more clues as I’ve never been good at patience . . . please??
Ahhhh! Wait a tic! I thought this was complete, but it's a WIP!! Oh no ! Ok...ok I'm not going to hyperventilate ... Deep breaths! Phew! Hee hee hooooo! Well. On the bright side, I was worried about what I would do after finishing this. Now I don't have to worry about that... Just when the next chapter will be updated lol! Now I just have to remind myself of all those proverbial things like, good things come to those who wait! Patience is a virtue! Blah blah blah blah ... Looks like miss Oracle has another 14 stories or so to entertain me in the meantime... I better get cracking!
Chapter 31 -
Well this was definitely worth the wait. I loved all the pussy power coming through and the new living arrangements sound like they are going to be . . . interesting! I’m still waiting for the shit to hit the fan. I wonder if it will be gradual or acute. I guess I will have to wait impatiently to find out . . . unless you give me a hint :)
Faves -
‘Severus wasn’t the only one who knew how to billow.’ – Hahah, I so love a good Severus billow.
‘as if someone had forgotten to match up the audio with the action’ – this was so easy to imagine. Love it.
‘illustrious Muffy V. Granger’ – and the V is for??
‘Hermione’s heart leapfrogged her larynx’ – hahah, I love larynx leaping.
‘the sensuality of that fascinating mouth’ – it’s easily my favourite part of him . . . apart from his cock of course :)
‘parted his lips ever so slightly, as if inhaling her need’ – mmmm, delicious!
‘Hermione’s insides melted like a candle in a raging inferno’ – this comparison was so good.
‘“Shall I do the honors?”’ – aha! ‘or shall I’ from ‘An awfully big adventure’ ;)
‘power of her pussy’ – I hear that pussy power coming through loud and clear.
‘The buds tightened to bullets’ – lovely tit alliteration, or as I call it altiteration.
‘muggy heat of his sex’ – I could feel this . . . unhhh
‘Coooooocks!’, ‘lollicock’ – I loved her cock obsession in this part.
‘Her skin prickled and flushed, as if she’d just walked into a freezer and found the sun’ – best line of the chapter – brilliant!
Fixes –
‘the thee time snake wrangling champion’ – sb three
‘Lucius’s’ – sb Lucius’
‘hollowing out like drum’- missing ‘a’
So I’m guessing she will have moved in by the next chapter . . . or maybe it will the moving chapter . . . or maybe it’s the pre-moving sex chapter. Actually, I have no idea what’s next so I will wait and see!
Chapter 30 -
Of course I love the perspective from my favourite wizard – so delicious and deliciously self-deprecating.
‘But the owl of doom never came’ – funny and poignant.
‘He’d never met a witch who could get him hard with nothing more than a book review’ – so, so good :)
‘the fantasy was a potent one, bringing on visions of a future filled with something other than regret’ – I so want this for him too L
‘basing her decision on the real Severus Snape, not on some idealized delusion of who she thought he was’ – unlike the idealised delusions that we take upon ourselves to create ;)
‘he didn’t chose him’ – sb choose
‘riotous clip’ – clip was perfect here
‘“It is polite to greet the host before the stroking begins.”’ – mmmm, is it more polite to stroke the host?
‘I’d tell the Potions master that I wanted to stay at his house and read his books and ride his cock and make potions with him in his cellar’ – so would I!!!
‘“Don’t make me say it again.”’ – bahahahah! There’ll be no fishing for compliments with Snape :D
‘he could feel her smiling against his skin’ – loved the viscerality of this.
‘popping each sound past his lips and tongue like an oral acrobat’ – can so imagine those linguistic gymnastics . . . very AR.
‘undulated like a snake on a wave’ – brilliant!
‘proof her desire’ – missing ‘of’
‘it in ragged whoosh’ – missing ‘a’
‘He’d had forgotten’ – take away ‘had’
‘clutched at the momentary warmth coursing through his soul.’ – He is falling so hard for her, as they all are, I really worry where this is going to end up. He sounded earlier like he’d rather have nothing than hurt the others . . . but it certainly didn’t end that way. 7 days a week? Sounds like more than visitation rights. Looking forward to the next with slight trepidation! xx
He’d never met a witch who could get him hard with nothing more than a book review. – Snort!
Gods, I love her reactions to his books. It’s always my favorite thing to read about Hermione the first time she visits Snape’s abode – no matter the story, no matter the writer, it’s the biggest reason they’re so perfect together. X
“She smiled and, with absolutely no warning, wrapped her arms around his waist and buried her face in his pine-green dress shirt” – big fat AWWWWWW.
When she began to kiss a soft path from his jaw to his mouth, his warning bells went off, and he drew back. “What are you doing?” – So. Effing. Close. Damnit.
Every word was auditory sex that slithered between her legs to tickle her clit with consonants and vibrate her vulva with vowels. – Delicious.
“I think from now on whenever I hear the word Tentacula, I’m going to soak my knickers.” – BAHAHAHAHAHA
“I have an auxiliary heartbeat in my arse.” – OMG. I’m dying over here. So many giggles this chapter. Severus is still my favorite. =-)
I got to the end and literally wailed a “Noooo!!” I didn’t want it to be over! So bloody good. As always. Gods, I love how you write! MORE! NOW! ;o)
Lots of love! Hope you’re well. xLissaD
Chapter 29 –
I’m really enjoying this characterisation of Lucius. I always love to make him my bad guy but he’s very believable in this charming/troubled/lonely role.
Most of my faves are the lines that made me laugh or feel fuzzy. I think this is my antedote to AtHD at the moment :)
‘his cock had begun to weep for clemency’ – wonderful!
‘It’s like we're shagging in a war movie’ – hahaha, I could so imagine this.
‘Perceptive little witch. “Habit.”’ – I love how she’s got his number and he loves it.
‘Draco seemed to have missed that lesson—or he’d become so self-indulgent that he didn’t care.’ – It’s comforting when you get a sense of how well the author knows their characters and their perceptions of their own relationships. Lucius’ reflections about Draco really have this amazing authenticity.
‘he supplemented his shortcomings with gifts, which he hoped would keep her satisfied. Or at least distracted.’ – and more lovely reflections on his own insecurities.
‘they were both inured to the other’s flaws after so many years together.’ – I wish everyone was so accepting of one another’s’ flaws!
‘If Draco’s moronic mooning was any indication, he was happy too.’ – nasty but sort of sweet.
‘Jubilation and misery were pretty much the same on that face.’ – bahaha, burn in absentia!
‘Her concern broke his heart, but that just made him all the more determined to bejewel her in his adoration.’ – bejewel in adoration was wonderful.
I loved the pearl kink – fantastic.
‘Nothing ruined a little backdoor fun like a toy stuck in one’s bowels.’ – so true . . . or a bottle stuck in one’s vagina.
‘which was still lightly marked from whatever Snape had been doing to her’ – I think this is my favourite line. It is such a wonderful continuum with previous chapters and relates how comfortable he is (currently) with the shared arrangements.
‘with cock-snapping strength.’ – LOL. That delicious absurdity . . . just works so well.
So now I feel all fluffy but I suspect things are going to start ramping up soon. I wonder if sweet Hermione will continue to try to make everyone happy or if she is going to have to start digging deeper into her own motivations? Ready for more! xx
Yeah some hot kinky jewellery sex!!! Love it perfect for lucius.only fitting for a princess! Wheres my Prince??? Swoon....
Loving it!!!
You (and we'll give JKR some credit) made me fall in love with Severus Snape, now you're making me fall in love with Lucius Malfoy .... hmmm.
I'm sorry I've been absent. As always every word you write is utter perfection and bliss. I think this may be one of the hottest anal play scenes I've ever read.
Cannot wait for more, was so happy this one came faster than the last.
x Lissa
I loved this chapter! Such an interesting use of accessories.
Chaper 28 –
Another sweet chapter. While I was reading this, I wondered how difficult it would be for her to slip into the dominant and submissive roles between partners. It seems to work fine here but would many people be comfortable with both? Just a matter of interest.
‘It was like a personality striptease’ – loved this sense of discarding work for play.
‘His hard-on kept pushing out from under his shirt like a kid peeking through the curtain at a theatre’ – such an awesome visual!
‘in child’s red wagon’ – missing 'a'
‘Bath time starts with the wiggling piggies’ – this cracked me up.
‘jiggling from their lacy prison like jelly convicts’ – bahahah, ridiculously hilarious.
‘baptacular beauty’ – baptacular would have to be one of the best words ever.
‘whimpering in the most unmanly way’ – can so imagine this.
‘a particularly slutty carrot that had been taunting him in the kitchen for days on end’ – This is too funny. I can so imagine you being enticed by a lascivious leek or a prurient parsnip :P
‘I’m all out of cleaning fluid’ – LOL, betcha he isn’t!
‘Or perhaps her pussy was setting an unnaturally high standard for lubrication’ – I wonder what those lubrication standards are measured in? Kilojuices?
So I’m almost wincing now in the expectation that all of this sweet puppy love is going to come crashing down. Does he have the resilience to withstand it? I really don’t think so. We shall see. Looking forward to the next!
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