Chapter 17

I really liked the deeper insight into Lucie and further explanation of his bond with Snape and issues with Draco.

‘lingering unease of visceral flashbacks that dampened his brow with sweaty panic.’ – nice.

‘Left alone with his only his morbid thoughts’ – needs to lose the ‘his’ before ‘only’

‘they’d all be right to worry’ – ‘been’?

‘wilting like a time-lapsed flower.’ – lovely visual.

‘People would walk all over him if he let his emotions run riot.’ – harsh words from a man who was crumbling under the weight of his own.

‘His loyalty to Lily had simply preceded his loyalty to the Dark Lord’ – I really like the loyalty angle here. It feels extremely accurate of Snape.

‘he was just as needy as Draco. A cringe-worthy epiphany if ever there was one.’ – ahhhh, there it is! :)

‘But maybe that should have surprised him so much’ – ‘shouldn’t’?

‘an attempt buy’ – missing ‘to’.

‘It’s the nectar, you see. The night air draws it out until it’s spilling down the stamen.”’ – I like both his turn of phrase and innuendo.

‘Dip her pudenda in a tub of strawberries and champagne?’  - bahahaha, don’t we all? ;)

‘quick volley of strokes’ – I love ‘volley’ in this.

‘squirming his dick even deeper with a sinuous swirl of her pelvis’ – perfect alliteration.

Loved how they ended on a squelchy high. Mmmmm!

Chapter 16

This was sweet. Draco is obviously keen but much of his motivation seems to revolve around dissuading her from his father. I wonder where the separation comes between his true desire and that of what he perceives to be his competition.

‘The only part of him not thinking soft was his cock.’ – luckily enough :)

‘chemical cannonade’ – nice alliteration!

‘like a pervy wanker’ – would you believe I remember that from chapter 3 of TMG?

‘“Perhaps you’re not looking close enough.”’ – LOL - clever, clever ;)

‘suddenly sliding up his body like a greased eel.’ – what could be more sexy?

‘blissful samadhi could be attained with nothing more than a wet witch and Knut’s worth of soap’ – bahahahah!

‘his body and brain no longer under his control, his inner world laid bare for anyone who cared to see.’ – lovely bit of vulnerability

‘calm Draco erratic heart rate’ – Draco’s?

Now I’m trying to remember who’s next – Lucius or Snape? I’m feeling like a bit of Snape at the moment but will be interested in either :)

Chapter 17
I was writing a really great review and my two year old was crawling all over my lap and desk and somehow deleted the damned thing....GRR! I will try and mkae this one as good as the last.

I don't know how you're accomplishing this...but you're making me start to like Lucius Malfoy. *shudder* I really like you're spectacular, detailed, and well characterized back story. Giving us some insight on how you preceived LM through Rowlings' descriptions of him throughout the original series and precisely expanded on that story in a completely believable fashion left me wanting more. I think your depiction of him is spot on. It's how I grasped his character as well. Letting us see how we went from mudblood hating Death-Eater to lusting after Hermione was perfectly rendered.

I loved how you had him break Hermione down into a way that was making him...dare I say...fall for her. His comparison of her to Narcissa's "fiery passion" and "spark of life" making him come back to life was well played. I also appreciated the Gryffindor reference of her "independent and spitfire" nature were "rewards" for him, where in the past they would have been annoying nuances.

I'm loving this strong, sexy, and confident Hermione. I'm guarded right along with her against Lucius' charms and attitude. I like how she's goading him, but still giving him an honest to goodness chance.

Another perfectly written piece of fanfiction art. I love it.

Avidly watching for the next chapter,
Cheers!
~*LissaD

Chapter 16
You’re very welcome for all the reviews – it was the least I could do. You (and DS) have inspired me to “pick up the pen” (or keyboard, I guess) so to say. I haven’t written a thing in almost 15 years, and BOOM. A prologue and 6 chapters in a week. Reviews are a must, I remember how motivated they keep fan fiction writers! Totally my pleasure.

Okay, I know you said this isn’t a Dramione story, but you’re kinda making me fall in love with them. Especially after this last chapter. Snape, shmape. Who’s he again? LOL! Super sweet and sexy. I’m really loving how vulnerable you’re making him. Makes my heart ache. <3

Quite simply, lovely. 

Chapter 15
Oh, it’s so nice to see you again, sir. Have you met my puss, Muffy? Oh! Mr. Malfoy! Is this how you greet all new minge? -  Totally barked a laugh out loud. Lewd Hermione is quite endearing. Hahahaha!

What a pair. One wanted satin and lace, one warned her to wear warm knickers. They both had a knack for demanding that she meet them when and where they decided. – Another giggle worthy line.

I’m rooting for Snape, even though I know this is a Dramione story. Sorry, not sorry? LMBO. I love how sweet Draco is in this one, but it’s the power plays that turn this girl on.

More, please.

Chapter 15 –

‘Only if it's the slowest hummingbird known to mankind :)’ – maybe you need to stun it first? Or find one that’s obese :P

‘damped’ – should be dampen?

‘She’d been amassing a children's library since the start of the pregnancy,’ – that’s exactly what I did . . . we have craploads of them. ‘round-eyed wonder of child to bring each story to life’ – I love that. I still read to the kids every day and they’re 9 and 12 . . . they still love it.

‘she couldn’t tell if he was impersonating the Potions master or questioning her sanity’ – hey! Don’t you go suddenly making me like that bloody cat too . . . I’m warning you!

‘sticky dates with her fingers’ – LOL, is she making a sticky date pudding?

‘cross between a white tiger and a pimp’ – endangered and sort of blingy :D

‘like an onion—savory but not to everyone’s taste’ – and keeps repeating on you if you eat too much :)

‘celebrated as a win both mentally and vaginally’ – hahah, always up for a vaginal celebration.

‘detailed entomology’ – entomology is the study of insects, did you mean etymology?

‘returning to his bollock bath’ – bahahah, awesome!

Okay, so much to look forward to now . . . I don’t have any particular preference which is a first!

Chapter 14

So Draco is certainly growing on me and the relationship feels very authentic. He seems quite innocent, in fact, which is not really a trait I would have associated with him. He’s not the one I would naturally be rooting for, of course, but he’s ahead in my book at the moment . . . let’s see how long that lasts ;)

‘breathy promise of her praise on his lips’ – nice!

‘make his brain sweat’ – hahah, that’s an OO-ism

‘even if he had go last’ – missing ‘to’

‘make her scream like a Mandrake’ - *snort*

‘epic penile proportions’ – I so love his EPPs.

‘by fact that’ – missing ‘the’

‘was she too gobsmacked by Snape’s dick to remember either Malfoy?’ – I like his ruminations and insecurities here.

‘Merlin’s mossy teeth!’ – too funny.

‘as you don’t mind me feeling you up while you do it. But I can be really quiet.”’ – hahah, the old sneaky feel up trick.

‘one-handed package repacking’ – such a useful skill. :P

‘Draco slid is foot’ – ‘his’

‘If he was the one she had the most fun with, maybe he could convince her Lucius and Snape were unnecessary’ – aww, nice planning.

‘furiously fought its confinement to wave back’ - *double snort*

‘Point and flex—she danced along the edge of his dick like a prima ballerina, foot-wanking him with the most wicked smile on her face.’ – deliciously funny and sexy.

‘drunken hummingbird’ – that reminds me, are you going to get me a picture this summer?

‘He gotten’ – ‘he’d’

‘Suck on that, Daddy Dearest. Fuck you and the rose you rode in on.’ – oooh, things are getting a little testy here. I love the fact that each is already trying to outdo the next. To what lengths will they go?

Looking forward to bath time now . . . scrub a dub!

Chapter 14 - Perfection. All though because if your other FF, I'm totally rooting for Snape. 😂

This was lovely! I always love an emotional Draco who doesn't lose that devious streak. I have to admit it, Draco is my favorite! And that's hard to have in this story, you've made me more of a Lucius fan than I normally am. And a perverted potions master is hard to defeat, but an affectionate Draco? I'm sold! 

Chapter 13

I liked Hermione’s perspective this chapter. I needed it. She seems quite relaxed with the whole situation at the moment. It will be interesting to see if that changes.

‘she bum-blocked any further public exploration.’ – hahah, I’m great at that. I bum block the kids all the time.

‘maybe that qualified her for some kind of extended “mate rate” on the Malfoy shag-o-meter’ - *snort*

‘like a date with a detectable IQ’ – I first read that as delectable and enjoyed it, but much more snort-worthy as detectable :)

‘boring robes and mild-mannered meetings’ – I don’t know why I liked this so much. I think it was the mild-mannered meetings of which I have many (although my manners do have trouble remaining mild).

‘battered biscuit’ – Jesus woman, this is killing me.

‘flat’s feline contingent’ – contingent . . . too funny.

‘propositioning her produce’ – fuck, ahhhh, I’m on the way out . . .

‘progressive course of stretching’ – I agree, she does sound at serious risk of squatter’s twat at the moment.

‘Is that Slytherin code for “shag your brains out with my enormous cock”’ – I think that’s a safe bet . . . definitely the assumption that I’d make.

I loved the flower-reading scene . . . especially Snape’s deliciously enigmatic bunch of course. And I also like the idea of taking up maintenance while I write my first book . . . I'm off to make inquiries!

So I just discovered this site. It's been many years since I've read fan fiction....and even more years since I've read adult fan fiction. 

This was the first story I opened. O.M.G. Naughtily delicious. Hot. Enthralling. I read all chapters in the afternoon. This chapter you posted today? Too short. Need more, ASAP.

Your erotica scenes are phenomenal, but my favorite thus far is the flower from Snape scene. How perfectly intelligent. I could see that truly being a personality quality of his, and I am an avid Pottermore. 

Well done, can't wait for more! Cheers!

Chapter 12

So it wasn’t from my POV, I guess that makes sense :P

I liked the raw smut interspersed with posturing and positioning for the future, each working out how to feather their own nests.

‘laying waste to his sophisticated sensibilities’ – nice.

‘Lucius heard the low hum of heated murmuring and smirked to himself, wondering which track Snape had chosen for his auditory assault’ – yummy!

‘What kind of woman would want some whiny little wanker attached to her tit twenty-four hours a day?’ – whoa, harsh!

‘If I’d known that a nipple was all it took to shut him up, I’d have hired him a wet nurse years ago.’ – bahahah, best line!

‘bridged up off Snape’s chest’ – excellent visual!

‘leg thigh’? – wasn’t sure if this was supposed to be either ‘leg’ or ‘thigh’ or if there was another type of thigh you were differentiating from.

‘"That's our girl. – missing end quote.

‘While he found Snape’s brooding intensity alluring, he preferred the tranquility of a sated Severus.’ – hahah, happy to have both . . . and not too much in between.

‘Draco reminded him of himself at that age, and instead of revulsion, he felt only sentimentality’ – nice bit of reflection.

‘he still be in there’ – he’d?

‘down the spindles of her spine’ – delicious.

Looking forward to seeing who comes out on top, and whether/how Hermione will go about making her choice . . . youth, stability, intellect, experience, love? . . . mmmm x

Ah, four lonely and unfulfilled people coming together to find not only what is missing in their lives but, as Snape might have suggested, a sort of emotional sanctuary in each other. I'm seriously loving this story and can't wait to see some one on one tenderness and delicate passion between our horny quartet 

I fell behind a week, but I've caught up. I'm so intrigued with the emotional conundrum Hermione is working herself into. She could easily join Lucius and Severus in a triad, but a tentative relationship developing with Draco. They are still developing separately and yet together, it's interesting