Chapter 11

So of course I was hooked from the start - ‘Sweet mother of all that is phallic.’ – bahahah!

‘enough lubrication to drown a small village’ – ffs, I can’t even progress in my reading because I have to stop . . . and laugh . . . and paste. It’s ruining my flow!

‘the thrill and panic of self-destruction?’ – hmmm, this is rather telling for our young heroine . . . is she biting off more Snape than she can chew?

I must admit the Lucius/Snape pairing I still find difficult to get excited about. I like the relationship on a lot of levels but not quite there on a sexual level. It’ll be interesting to see if I change (you know I struggle to branch out J).

‘blond hair tickling her thighs like cornsilk’ – mmmm, I felt that . . . lovely J

‘any place that beast touched magically became a new erogenous zone’ – hahaha, absolutely.

‘The suction was so strong she swore she could feel it tugging on her uterus’ – and that exquisite exaggeration comes to the fore! ;)

I loved the Snuggernaut/Snapenstein references . . . and now I want to be Hermione . . . I wonder if the next chapter is from my POV?

Chapter 10

Hey, I’m totally behind. Dang it!  And, yes, I did enjoy my Sevvy chapter ;)

‘sex-stained voice pleading for his manhood’ – stained is perfect.

The idea of Sev being devoted to Lucius is an interesting one. I wonder what he really gets from that relationship . . . it has been touched upon in terms of the rebound from Narcissa but these days is it much more than physical?

‘flared like cognac in the firelight’ – mmm, now I want cognac and I don’t even know what that is.

And his lovely introduction to deep-throating will no doubt come in handy in the near future. I loved ‘gossamer’ btw.

‘Her needy whines spilled out around his fingers and bounced off his palm with a buzzy hum’ – excellent auditory description.

‘It wasn’t difficult to whip thick to a buttery mouthful.’ – and I want a buttery mouthful ;)

‘crotch of his fingers’ – I fucking love that!

‘It was like a private island’ - *snort*

‘Each mound was presented like a work of art, upthrust and round, moulded for a man’s hand.’ – another excellent description.

‘scoring his taste buds as they tightened to rosy knots’ – even more loveliness!

I enjoyed Sev’s random pique of vanity . . . showing a little humanity beyond the snarkiness.

And now I need the next chapter. Stat :)

I love this! I've read your stories before, but I can't remember if I've reviewed them or not (still a little new to telling the authors how amazing they are!) I was worried about starting this story too early once I read that the chapters will be short, but I'm glad I didn't wait too long! This has been glorious and I can't wait to see how this quartet continues. By the way, the musical titles and quotes are a perfect addition to such a moving piece, and your alliterations always add to any work of art.

Chapter 9

‘I had to feed them first :)’ – fair enough I suppose. You don’t want anyone getting ‘hangry’ ;)

I enjoyed this entire smut entrée. A nice sexual cliffie to whet the appetite.

‘Snape’s glare shot across the table and stabbed him like a dagger’ – brilliant Snape-ish start.

‘dying to pet your mane and stroke your horn’ – bahahah!

‘Miss Granger," Severus called in a warning tone as he rounded the corner.’ – I love a Snape warning. Yum!

‘custardy schemes having been thwarted’ – I hate it when that happens J

‘Both required intuition and artistry, but negotiations were won with bluster, whereas seduction’s sway came from the pelvis.’ – my favourite line. Excellent!

‘stomach pitched severely to the left’ – eye spy!

‘Letting ex-Death Eaters have their way with me doesn't exactly scream sanity’ – no, but it does scream a whole lotta other things . . . and sanity’s over-rated as we both know ;)

‘tranquilize and tantalize’ – perfect!

‘like a cock popping from the suction of a lover’s mouth’ – yessss!

‘flare of Snape's nostrils or the flinty spark in his eye’ – love this description of him.

‘We don't take sex lightly. It’s not a pastime, it’s an art. And we're both masters of our medium.’ – more delicousness!

‘Granger was the gunpowder, and it was time to light a match.’ – okay, now I’m desperate for the next one.

I’ve read this through twice now and loved it. I’ve lost track of who is up next but I’m hoping it’s Sev.

And I found ‘Big Little Lies’ on our telly – starts in 10 mins – thanks for the heads up x

That was very erotic and completely awesome. I really enjoyed it.

I love the descriptive words you used in this chapter, for some reason it just reads like you have somehow gotten even better from last even. And let me point out that I am a super fun of clever alliteration and I found myself chuckling every time I came across one, Snapes "testing the pussy pliancy quotient" had me in near cackles. Hilarious! It was so interesting and made it so much more real when you added that bit of hesitancy from Snape in the end there, I think any man would feel daunted by the prospect of sharing a woman whose affections are yet unnatached with Show Pony Lucius and Most Elegible Bachelor Draco. I am glad though that he did not let it get the best of him however and this too made him seem more of a real character in a real circunstance because despite his less gifted atributes when it comes to aestetics, Snape too has much to offer and he knows it too. He has a certain Je ne sais quoi that makes him an attractive character, despite his generally brooding nature.

Im eager to see more of this, this story has got me hooked like you wont believe.

Love this fic

How is Draco feeling about all of this?

I can't wait to read more

Ok, my other acc went haywire on me, I don't know if you can see that comment, you can delete this one if it shows up there.
Finally!!! I had house full of guests and had to wait until now to read this chapter - it was a torture! I nearly faked stomach problems and locked myself in the toilet just read the chapter (I tried, but dinner was my part so...I just managed to read a tiny bit before they started to bang on the door >.<)
Now I think I should have fake it!!! The chapter is BRILLIANT!!!!!! 

Likes/Comments:
Snape’s glare shot across the table and stabbed him like a dagger. “Well, that went well. You’re not going to let her leave with him, are you?” - you got me with this opening line <3

And Snape pressing the issue :D Sooooooooo fcking good <3
Conversation between him and Lucius, they sound like an old married couple, bickering. But more than that is is fantastic insight in to their relationship, such a nice way to show the depth and strength of what they share :)

and I don't even want to think about what your son plans to do with my custard. - maybe he don't want to know what SHE planned to do with it, or maybe he would....
damn blond unicorn sparkle magic - ok I had a fit reading this, I'll see Lucy forever and ever just like this, and have a laughing episode every single time. You are fantastic! :'D
Women flock to you as if they’re dying to pet your mane and stroke your horn. - I just envisioned Lucy looking like centaur and being chased by Firenze (disturbing image, I'm gonna bleach my brain as soon as I stop laughing) 
No offense, but you're about as soft as the Whomping Willow. - you are adding the plants now? XD
"To get her to come back."/"You left with no warning, and I was not finished saying goodbye."/"Hardly. Your point has been taken, so if you're done making your dramatic exit, I would appreciate it if you returned to the library with me to finish our dinner conversation." - I just LOVE him!!!!! <3 <3 <3 I do love his style ;)
but I think I should talk it over with my date first - brilliant, she blocked any possibility of excluding Draco :D
There was some whispering back and forth, and then Draco gave her a tight nod and stood up again, tightening his arm around her shoulders and shooting Lucius a vengeful sneer when she wasn’t looking. - what did she told to Draco? 
He knew exactly what Snape was thinking. Time to sparkle, Lucius. - hahahahahaha
And I want you to understand that I won't be turned into your Mudblood whore. - ouch, talking about the past biting you by the but

I love entire conversation and establishing the roles as well as explanations, it gives glimpse in to their lives. And the role Snape have in that conversation, even if he said that he isn't "the poster boy for charming coercion" his word had impact on her, maybe even bigger than Lucy's.  

"So is Lucius submissive to you?"/Lucius sputtered with repressed laughter, and he could see Severus struggling to stay stoic. - it is refreshing how gutsy she is, but this is also hilarious :D
Severus studied her intently, and Lucius wondered what Snape could see that he couldn't. - I'd say a lot :)
I don't know if you've ever tried to perform Legilimency while in the throes of passion - this is 180 degrees from TMG, I like it :)
bookworm - hmmmmmmmmmm
he tickled his way between her index and middle fingers with a wet flicker. - huhhhhhhhhh
Severus would provide the dominance - mmmmmm, now we're talking
"Open wide, Miss Granger," Snape said in his silkiest voice./"That's it," Snape murmured. "Suck."/Severus had his thumb in her mouth - ok you are killing me
the chorus of hisses and grunts Snape provided - who would complain about that :D, btw
The Potion master’s long fingers danced between his own, playing over her quim like a concert pianist. - this is actually so fluffy, sexy but also fluffy :)
and Lucius felt Snape’s fingers on his neck, urging him to return to her throat. - yummy
Severus has a cock that can leave you speaking Parseltongue - yum yum
Why don't you tell Severus how much you want his cock. I know he'd like to hear that. - if she won't, I volunteer ;)

Last part! Fantastic! Another great insight in his feeling towards Snape :)

So, how long until the next chapter? :)

Poor Draco... I feel like everyone is having fun again and he is being left out to hang in the sidelines. I really hope they find a way to include him in the dynamics that won't sent Lucius into a possessive panic

Well I do always enjoy a cool and aloof Snape as you know - ‘His expression suggested he’d seen nothing noteworthy’.

Although I’m unsure whether I would attend a dinner party there for the food if that’s the quality of cuisine that they prepare. I certainly don’t imagine you eating much of it – ‘raw bivalves’ and all ;)

I was expecting smut this chapter but obviously the plan was for a bit of pre-smut food smut. I think they all held their own but I liked Hermione’s little dig after appearing like she was going to give over way too easily.

‘“If you mean spanking central, I think you'd better prepare to grovel. I might enjoy a good slap on the arse, but I don't make a habit of letting men pass me around like an after-dinner cigar." – Nice :)

Looks like Draco is going to reap the benefits of their arrogance. Looking forward to seeing exactly how :)

More fun Hermione/OO – loved her inner monologue this time.

‘The long list of “Everything That Could Go Wrong,” which she kept tacked up in her brain for safe keeping’ – perfect.

‘Pied Piper of Pussy’ – you’re bringing out those P alliterations for Draco. Perverse Pussy Portrait Painter?

‘Flicking and flipping in a flurry of unfurling’ – ‘The letter seemed to have worn itself out’ – loved the anthropomorphism.

Also loved the wrangling of her inner conscience and pussy-voice.

I’m a bit surprised she doesn’t consider Draco’s jealousy in her hook up with Lucius - So I wrote this statement early and then I realised at the end that she hadn’t understood. But then at the very end she had understood!

‘almost burst her sinuses with the strength of her snort’ – hahah, been there.

We had a secretary called Jeannette at work – a good choice :)

‘Crooks gave her a less-talk-more-food look’ – I give that to the kids every meal time.

‘“Fuckmefuckmefuckme!” without making her look desperate’ – that’s such a fine line to tread ;)

‘this was the perfect opportunity to wear something impractical’ - *snort*.

‘to make sure she wasn’t bedecked with towel fuzz’ – I don’t even know what to say to that . . . now I’m paranoid that I don’t do the towel fuzz check.

I’m getting picky but I think Marvelous should be ‘Marvellous’ as it is a statement.

‘her pussy drawled’ – just liked this for some reason.

‘“You’ll just have to be mental later. I’m busy tonight.”’ – that’s what I tell my brain every day :/

‘Deranged milkmaid wasn’t quite the look she was going for.’ – Hahah, I pull that one off beautifully every day :)

‘like a squashy little maharajah’ – and now you’ve got me liking Crooks, what the??

I love Snape’s black hole. Can’t wait to see what he does with it.

Chapter 6

I really enjoy the perspective rotation and I’m glad to read Hermione’s again, as we didn’t really get much of an indication early as to whether she would have been totally okay with it all. It seems they’re all pretty well on the same page at the moment about where they want things to go, although clearly there is a bit of jealousy set to creep in.

I liked this chapter for setting the stage on Hermione’s willingness. Knowing you, however, there will be challenges ahead ;)

‘still feel the warmth of his velvet glans trailing over her backside’ – mmmmm, nice.

‘She’d forgotten how good it felt to be desired’ – I liked this for the simple honesty.

‘louder it roared when she let if loose’ – love the sentence and ‘if’ should be ‘it’.

‘body had decided the appropriate response was copious lubrication and the utter abandonment of all pride’ – hahah, always.

‘Snape had hurtled past pleasant and skipped straight to intense.’ – Love an intense Snape.

‘He probably smells like mothballs and metal cauldrons’ – bahahah, I can so imagine that, and it’s not even off-putting J

‘mowing down her classmates to get to the dungeons early’ - *snort*

‘warm weight of a real man on top of her, crushing her as he drilled away her loneliness’ – loved this sentence.

‘And she’d give that man her knickers’ – ‘given’?

‘heal of her hand’ – ‘heel’

‘She rested secure in the belief that they’d never know’ – I wonder if she can hold out for another 70 chapters? ;)

Chapter 5

This chapter was clever and funny so my favourite lines are all around that. You also manage to get away with exaggeration like nobody I’ve read. It just seems to work effortlessly, adding rather than detracting – a gift.

‘soft succor’ – word notebook (if I had one ;))

‘soft as a porcupine, and Draco didn’t want to get stabbed.’ – I like a stabby Snape

‘Someone whose heart wasn’t as black as coal’ – this felt like a really pivotal insight into his perception of his father. He would have known Lucius’ sadness over his mother and yet sees him in this way. Perhaps this is post-Narcissa?

‘imagined himself as her personal cleanup crew’ – nice J

‘loquacious for Snape’ – Anther for the word notebook. And it sounds yummy too.

‘didn’t think “Jolly good show,” conveyed quite the right sentiment’ – Bahahah!

‘His stomach dropped and then somersaulted gracelessly into his liver’ – that exaggeration that works so well. J

‘cock leapt out to greet her with all the subtlety of a Labrador puppy, drooling in her face and demanding to be petted’ – deliciously funny.

‘And to top of’ – ‘of’ should be ‘off’.

‘spilling his secrets like a stool pigeon’ – lovely analogy.

‘Which would blow first, his balls or his left ventricle’ – again, perfect.

‘His chest had been cracked open like an Augury egg, and his heart felt all tingly and itchy. Like her afghan. He hadn't felt so good since he was a child. "You have no idea."’ – love this ending. Endearing and sweet.

Looking forward to Hermione next!

I found this story two chapters ago and now I check everyday for an update. This latest chapter just made me fall more in love with this story!! Thank you! I took a break from fanfiction for a while after my favorite story went on hiatus and life got busy, and coming back it has been difficult to find a story that really grabs my attention and makes me want to come back. Thank you for this story, for already having it planned out so I know I wont be left hanging (again) and for updating frequently. I just wanted to let you know that I am another fan you can count (since I know many do not leave reviews). 

Can't wait for the next chapter(s)!!!!!!

And a lovely hot chapter to get things going ;)

‘All those years of hand-waving and endless textbook recitations’ – nice Snapeisms

‘That arse alone was a testament to the glories of womanhood’ – LOL.

‘deranged artist preparing to paint a prize-winning pussy portrait’ – 5 x alliteration – nice!

‘He'd forgotten the adrenaline-fueled pleasures of a well-spanked witch: her hot little body writhing in his lap, her belly pumping against his leg with each nervous breath.’ – lovely and hot.

‘gave her break’ – ‘a’ missing.

‘Sexual intimacy was a poor substitute for emotional support’ – it seems we have yet another insightful male for Hermione to play with. It seems all three have a heart. Hmmm, who will she choose? ;)

‘behest’ – nice vintage.

‘It was like watching a screaming skull’ – excellent visual!

‘the floor glittered like a diamond mine’ – I love this so much.

‘masochistic to just keep ruminating on a thirst he couldn't slake’ – nice.

‘Like lighting. But still, lightening needed grounding.’ – 2x misspellings of lightning.

‘filled his nostrils like tendrils of opium’ – another lovely olfactory and visual moment.

‘"Try not to leave a puddle on my rug. It's imported." – bahahah, so Lucius J

‘saucy wink of approval’ – snort.

‘His grey eyes darted to her face, and Severus saw him squeeze her hand in return.’ – hmmm, a little more than he bargained for, me thinks.

‘sheathe’ – should be ‘sheath’.

And now I’m looking forward to the next!