she seems to have calmed down a bit - she's going to go crazy on me fast, today I got new project, quite demanding, she seems to like times like this >.< 

I have a bit of knowledge from my work and family (and myself) - sorry to hear that :(

Hermione part is just perfect,  graphic and you are inside her skin all the time while you read. 

And first part of Minerva's and Sev's conversation - so realistic, everyday struggle of so many educational facilities :(

Snape’s jaw tightens as his head snaps up. “I am already brewing day and night.” - this just makes me sad :( He is still there, and fight for the school...part of an atonement (acerbic but noble, as always, and doing thing his on way - as always) and part because he has no other home :(. Really heartbreaking.

“In fact, I considered that Miss Granger may be able to provide the additional assistance that you require.” / “She may be rather fragile but she is extremely bright as you know. And with her current condition happens to come certain assets that could be quite valuable.” - now I'm intrigued, it can be million things and I'm wondering which one (or several) did you pick 

“She is not being paid.” - if my memory serves me right...there was another teacher in Hogwarts, in original canon, under the same conditions, and he also needed Snape's help ^_^

“Don’t you think you owe her that much, Severus?” - this is promising :)

Hugs and kisses for you, and a bucket of good mood and smiles, until the next chapter xx

DS,

Chapter 2.

I don't know what to think, really.  Of course your writing is superb and present tense is giving me a much fuller experience, feels more real to me, it does happen around me. It's great. 

Now, Snape is an arse. It appears as if he's testing her to see what she's made of, to see if she's worthy of his time... And of course he must be curious about her condition and I'm sure he is up to a challenge, but on his terms :))  Yup.

A man like Snape wouldn't just say: "Miss Granger, I couldn't help but notice, that something seems to be ailing you..." yeah... and "Why don't you have a cup of tea with me and tell me all about it.  I would love to help"  ':)

But still it is sad and he is an arse , for now.

Hope you are feeling better 

Love Fox  xx 

P.S. 

It's been snowing in London today :) it looked beautiful. There were large snowflakes falling very slowly, disappearing as soon as they touched the ground (of course). But still I was mesmerised by the feather quality of their descent. Lovely. 

(Apart from that it's cold, gloomy, sleepy and so dark it feels like never-ending night) -sorry I had to hahaha, moaning and whining is an English national sport, I felt obliged, since I lived here for twelve years  😊

Fox xx

And, yes, I do blame your insane creature for jumping into my head and making this happen. I thought she was with still with you? - sadly no, she deflected some time ago, tnx to that I'm stuck on one chapter for my AU/OC story for over a month :( (I'm seriously pondering on skipping that chapter and go to the next few that I already have in my head, more or less compleatly composed)

’m sorry but when I feel sad, unfortunately it comes out in my writing. I’m feeling better now though so we will see. <3 - I'm sorry to hear that :( I hope you'll be better soon, but just in cakes I'm sending you wave of positive energy :* <3

You described Hermione's condition and her inner exhaustion, one that comes from battling long lasting chronic disease, perfectly. I can't separate all the parts I like, that would demand to c/p most of the chapter.

“You should take sugar . . . with your tea.” - oh, he just dying to figure out what is wrong with her :D

Leaning forward, she rests her elbows on the arm of the chair, the teacup held precariously over his lap. - perfect! No, I'm not threatening you, but my hands are unsteady move :D

“You presume that I wish to know,” - lol, I have a feeling that he adopted my favorite quote from Dr House "everybody lies", Snape was never one to pass opportunity to solve puzzle

He lifts only the ring and little finger of the hand that rests lightly on her desk, the gesture enough to send the students scattering back to their bags, packing hastily and exiting without a word. - just love this part

“I did this for the students. Frankly, I’m of the belief that you shouldn’t be here. I sympathise with your circumstances but as a teacher one must be prepared to put the students’ needs before one’s own. If one finds that they are unable to do so, they should reconsider their aptitude for such a role.” - oh, this is painful in so many levels, on so many planes, for him and for her :'(

As much as I'd love, I won't rush you for next chapter this time, but I do hope that story will take better turn soon (I am bit worried about you after this chapter). 

Take care of yourself.
All the love xx

I'm liking the present tense of this story. It makes for a nice change while also somehow making it more intimate. But there's also something isolating about it (which is good in this instance).

Fav lines--

"In fact, she can hear everything. Every look. Every unspoken word."--Love this.

"unhinged by the unpredictability. Not theirs. But hers. Of her body. And what lies within."--Holy fuck. That's deep. And the story of my life.

"frown slicing into the bridge of his nose"--Great description.

'He lifts only the ring and little finger of the hand that rests lightly on her desk, the gesture enough to send the students scattering back to their bags, packing hastily and exiting without a word."--Love this visual.

Holy crap, Snape. Give a first-year teacher a break. He's such a hard-ass :)

The writing in this whole opening scene with Hermione was wonderful. Everything. From the sun's scorching rays to Minerva's onion skin touch. I already feel horrible for Hermione and we're only 10 paragraphs into the story.

Snape's trip to the staff room was masterful. "his shadow twisting like a phantom about his legs as he swiftly navigates corners, leaving torches guttering in his wake"--Unnnnnnh! Yes! I couldn't honestly cut and paste the entire trip (but I'd just keep grunting in pleasure, and I'm sure you get the point).

I love Snape's reaction and the conversation with Minerva (so much room for a great character arc as the story progresses). Of course I'm dying to find out what afflicts our fair Hermione and what is the courageous and brilliant Snape going to do about it. (I know he can help her, because he's a wiz at keeping away my squatter's twat.)

(Shit, I almost forgot--sound effects (like crunch scrunch) are italicized and no quotation marks are necessary.)

I've already read this twice now. I should really go back to my writing. (Stop distracting me!)

Intriguing.

I was waiting for this, and ofc, you post a story in a middle of my business meeting! Well, now I'm in a coffee shop, I couldn't wait to get home ;)

First of all, we really think alike, why? That is something you'll have to discover on your own XD

And now...

Poor Herione.

Rapidly ascending the stone stairs, his body seems to occupy a realm of illusory magic, his smooth grace giving him the appearance of floating, layered robes adding to the impression as they are lifted on the unforgiving drafts that scuttle by - I just love, love, love how you describe him. Every time I fall for him over and over again <3 

“It was as clear as mud as you would be well aware.” Snape crosses his arms expectantly, his imposing frame looming over her desk. - just perfect

“Well, you killed him so unfortunately that is no longer an option.” - this is not how I imagine Minerva acting towards him, I see her more as motherly type that would be protective over him :)

Snape’s black eyes burn, hurt melting into anger, before he turns one last time and disappears, robes flapping fiercely behind him. - squeal, it is too early in to the story to make me sad, give us bit rest from crying, have mercy.

Now I can't wait for the next chapter.
On a totally selfish note - I am more than happy to see your new story so soon. xx 

Ohh DS, it's so good to hear from you again!  I hope you are all right... I would much prefer if you were writing out of boredom. I don't want to sound psychotic, but I feel you are a part of my life now  :) so be good... or bad... not sure ; ]

Chapter 1.

Straight away I love your description of Hermione's amplified senses.  It's so good, it feels almost as if I was the one experiencing them. Funny, how we do not notice sunlight or singing birds until we have a migraine... or worse in her case. Her struggles are so apparent. 

And then Severus Snape.  Such a contrasting description to hers.  He glides :)) I like that and: "his shadow twisting like a phantom about his legs", "illusory magic", "smooth grace", "Black Ghost" brilliant narration. It shows his quiet and mysterious nature, his powerful and fear-inspiring presence, perfectly. 

Snape's reaction to Hermione further demonstrates her shocking appearance and desperate state.

But Minerva... Ohh Minerva... that was a dirty trick to play :/

I am very curious as to where it all leads :)

Hope to see an update soon. 

Love Fox xx