Reviews for WHAT THE HEART WANTSBy : Mistress |
Mistress,
Elsha here again. I have to take a quick second and tell you again what a great story this is. I'm not a big on critiques of spelling, punctuation etc. I'm just excited about what I'm treading and then s story really is amazing. I'm sure I'll read it repeatedly. Heck I want a novel size of this right here! I'm not sure when you wrote this but I am at a point in my life when this is exactly the magic I needed. I have to get back to it now! Thank you for sharing this with us all!
So I'm on page 13 of this story and I'm completely absorbed in it. I really love it and where you are taking it. I'm a hopeless romantic with a thing for Snape so this was written for me..lol. Great work so far!
I haven't finished this yet, but I really am loving the heck it of it for sure!
Wow I just binge-read your entire story last night and it's fantastic!! I love the care you put into describing each character. For example, the most recent one you did of Elizabeth was incredible; I could really picture her in my head.
(Just a couple quick notes: "Weasley" instead of "Wesley," "fool" instead of "full," "cease to exist" instead of "seize to exist"—hope these are helpful! Overall, these mistakes don't really interfere with my flow of reading, and I can figure out what you mean.)
Also I wanted to tell you, full disclosure, that I usually stop reading after a while if I was on a lemon hunt, but your story kept me reading. I wanted tell you how much I enjoy your story and can't wait to find out what happens??!!!
Oohhh drama!!!! Poor lucius, hes going through some stuff right now, his will though!!. Its like hes given up and trying to get away!!. Nooooo
Yeah bring on the smutty goodness!!!
wow is all I can say , weird partners!!!! Ginny/malfoy sr ???? hope all works, hope hermione gets snape all worked up hahahaha....see you soon :):):)
Hi 😊
This was MUCH better, I can tell your proof reading! There was one or two spelling mistakes but nothing to worry about.
Im really enjoying where the plot is going.
Keep up the good work, can't wait for the next chapter.
R xx
Ooohhh love it!!!, keep it coming its well thought out and im totally in to it deep!!! Please keep me updated on new updates!!!
Hi,
This is a great story! I am loving the plot line.
I would say that there are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes and sometimes using the wrong word for what you mean. But I do understand that it must be pretty challenging to write in a different language. I suggest maybe using a spell checker or look online for infotmation on English prose or something like that.
I would like to point out that as the chapters go on you make less and less mistakes.
Good job 👍🏼 Keep it up!
Kind regards,
Rosario
This story was as a little on the normal relations side at first ( I love the couple) but as you get further into the story it start getting crazy sexy with couples you would never expect. If you are looking for a steamy story this is right up your alley. I am excited to see what sensuous and scandalousness is to come.
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